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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: gmgi

I felt like dancing seeing your update 😆 So happy Divya and thank you Suvi 🤗
I loved it. It is not easy to get under Ishwari's skin and with so much hatred that character had accumulated I am pleasantly surprised and impressed with the way you have brought out her thoughts. I always thought RR is the only one who can show her the mirror and was happy when I read the same. She always thought RR was beneath her but would have been shocked to see how much beneath she had fallen. She fell in Dev's eyes but it was necessary that she falls in front of her own eyes for her to introspect. Thank you Divya for this treat.

Suvi,loved your review. It shows how wonderful a team you both are. You both read between each other's lines. As a reader I am happy to know I will get one more part for this wonderful OS which both of you will write. What more can I ask for 😳



No thanks required. It was a joint effort (yours and mine) to get her to type 😉 and she didn't need to be persuaded all that much. She had already been itching to write. 😆

We have been reading each other's lines for four years now Geena. Met in IF when I had just started writing. I used to look forward to her reviews. Take pointers from them for my next chapter. From there she went on to become my friend, sounding board and editor. Once she got into writing in this forum, we had a role reversal. It's fun. 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Itsveena

Wow amazing awesome .. i feel IF has more talents and for some reasons hiding them.. i am sure you all will make successful authors and print your own books one day ..

Loved the way you think and mould the story, loved the way you tie all the moments together without losing their essence, loved the way you put them in sophisticated words to make it simple for us .. what else , cant wait for the next one from our talented writers 👏 👏


A bow to you Both 👏


Veena you are so generous with your words. Thank you. Yes Suvika is already an established author and has multiple books published...

I just dab around sometimes... I am equally in awe of the beautiful posts that some people present here.
Thank you once again. Will try and post the next part soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Oh dear this was so beautiful!!!!!!!
You actually had the guts to write it up from Ishwari's pov
Great one i must say
N let me tell you ...u have done exact justice to suvika s first part
It was a beautiful continuation
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Posted: 8 years ago
Ah... Such music to my ears... Sorry my eyes... Let's talk. Such a long overdue but most important aspect of any relationship. Finally they are ready to talk. You guys are excellent in writing stories. Please write some more and send them to CVs. I know it will be plagiarising, but I hope you won't mind if I wish to see it portrayed on screen.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Suvika dear...
👏
The best piece ever...
Can't say much...
But jus loved it to the core of my heart...
Plz keep writing more...
Can U PM ur writings dear...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Fanktlk...
U have nailed the second part...
U have topped the challenge of thinking by Ishwari's POV..
So true to her character...
Plz do write more...
Can U PM Ur writings dear..
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Posted: 8 years ago
Fabulous update...loved it
Brilliant writing👏
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Chandniyati

Suvika dear...

👏
The best piece ever...
Can't say much...
But jus loved it to the core of my heart...
Plz keep writing more...
Can U PM ur writings dear...



Thank you so much Chandni.

Sure will PM you the next update. 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
Nice one dear 👏
You actually wrote exactly how Ishwari will react to the whole thing. Finally she realized her mistakes.

Please update soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Dear Suja di,
The night we got to read your OS, there was some commotion in my head... I wondered how are they going to talk, they will talk, that is a must... but how? what sequences can be used? How will Dev meet Soha? What will his reaction be? Will he get angry at Sonakshi? Or is he going to be shattered seeing what he lost while he thought it is fine to move on? Lots of things in my mind and mostly-How it may be presented to us...?😕

Your OS came to me like the answers to those questions, mostly like a fresh respite... Thankfully...👏

Now coming step by step into your story:

I don't understand, should I be blaming this guy for all the lost years, because he could not stand up in the moment of need, or I should be sympathetically standing by his side like always because this guy is suffering again and long from years, with little to huge faults of his, and sometimes no fault of his...
I am not saying that Dev wasn't at fault, my sole reason for the sympathies is the backing family that Sonakshi got, and Dev never had... A support, a reason to live is a way easier means to survive... Sonakshi had her family, plus her daughter... Who did Dev have? Golu? Is that it for being able to survive the hugest losses of your life?
Him showing a facade of a rude, mannerless, and a jerk guy is a but obvious for me, and thus, the opening of your OS was a more reality to imagine than to say that man was sprawled insolently on a chair in front of the policeman... The arrogance is a must in his demeanor, and he is justifying it...
Him turning towards the hotel as a ball of fire, well, he wasn't actually interfering into her privacy, and the words Obhodro and Mumma's boy had triggered the same pain in him... The point where Sonakshi broke the thread of their strained love with her bare hands and had moved out... The wounds are still fresh... A confrontation was a must...
But whoa! What did he see or rather whom did he meet inside?
The moment he came to know it must be him, who is the father of that beautiful little girl; in the back of my mind, there came a visual of ice cold water splashing on a red hot furnace... "Beti wo hawa hai, jo mere gusse ko hawa kar deti hai..." ie. Daughter is the breeze that vanishes my anger into thin air... Same was the case with Dev... Who came like a ball of fire walked out as a statue of ice... Cold and frigid...

THEN COMES THE CONFRONTATION NO.1: Dev and Sonakshi's first conversation!
Honestly, I had thought a lot about their first confrontation, but trust me when I say, that I could not conjure up even 10% of the intensity what you have given to their conversation...
What dialogues, what setting and what effects...
I had so wanted Dev to get really angry with Sonakshi for hiding the truth about their daughter... Because as much as I thought again and again, for me nothing justifies the fact that Soha wasn't only her own daughter, she was Dev's as well... They separated for their individual self-respect "MY" was their issue... But Soha wasn't a property/commodity to be possessed by just a mother or a father... She should have been loved by her parents...
Comes the justification from Sonakshi's side as well: You didn't want to have any responsibility of any child in case of divorce as you stated in the prenup... FAIR ENOUGH!
But, was that guy anywhere at fault? Did he even know about such a clause? He hadn't even heard all this from his lawyer back then... Okay, it was all Ishwari's fault... But, should that guy be punished so lethally for believing on people, to suffer the loss of his own child's childhood? I don't think so, nature, fate or whatever cannot be so repeatedly cruel to a guy, who had no fault to the limit of seeing all this...
And here, it calls for a further part in this story, to justify the partiality of fate done to this poor guy, who lost everything in providing for everyone's happiness, you can't do this to us!😭

NOW COMES CONFRONTATION NO.:2-- Dev and Ishwari face to face!
Honestly speaking, Ishwari has lost the entire charm for me, she has become as good as a background Junior Artist that nobody notices... Now even if Dev breaks the entire relationship with her, or puts the entire blame for his failed marriage to her, or leaves the house forever, or anything that pleases the sore eyes; I don't give a damn, or care two hoots about Ishwari's character... A woman who repents none in the right time; is long forgotten... Seven years and no introspection-- Forget it lady, not your forte... Please shut yourself in that damn room forever... You can never change... A hopeless character.

AND ON THE CLOSING NOTE: Can we Talk?
Frankly, this should have ideally been done on the separation night only... Both of you wouldn't have missed the blissful period both of these went through in solitude and gloominess...
Now it sounds more like the daughter is the reason for the talk... Shouldn't have it been the love for each other, the sparks that are still smoldering under the ashes of your separation?
Don't these two love each other anymore? Is it only a compromise that is laid on the foundation of giving a better life to that kid and nothing more?

My questions need an answer di, can we have a continution to this to see why he wants to talk?
Can I be proved wrong, pretty please?
please? please? please?

I hope I didn't make you yawn at this ajeeb o gareeb review of mine... If I did, Gareeb ki beti ko maaf kar deejiye Jeeji...

PS: Right since the breakup and separation happened, I am not able to justify any one of the two leads, Dev and Sonakshi... If Sonakshi had to bear all the brunt and had to keep on sacrificing and adjusting, Dev was not partying either... I cannot understand why sometimes he is shown in a light of being a total loafer, drunkard, and a loose charactered bas***d. Just because a person has a false facade, doesn't mean that person was wrong all the way wrong... I have been equally blaming and equally defending both of them, NO MATTER WHAT... (This was my thoughts from the show)



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