Devakshi FF:The Memory of Us Epilogue Updated on Pg 70

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Curlyhairdiary

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Posted: 8 years ago

#311

Originally posted by: LiveLife321
Seriously...U cant do this to us yaar...I want the next part right now😊

Hehehee.. thank u dear😃 I hope you liked it :) will try to update soon😳

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LiveLife321

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Posted: 8 years ago

#312

Originally posted by: Malvika07

Hehehee.. thank u dear😃 I hope you liked it :) will try to update soon😳

Liked it...Na baba...Its amazing👏

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Suvika.

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Posted: 8 years ago

#313

Phew! OK. Finally the past is out. And what a trigger to bring it stumbling out!!

But before that, I absolutely loved a couple of sentences you'd written - the way you brought the emotion out in them.

1. He was going to hell anyway, what was one more sin under his belt?

2. "It reminds me you lived."

Especially the second one. Very profound. For me, these two are the highlight of the whole chapter. 👏 👏

Dev is not stuck any more. In either departments that I'd mentioned in my previous review.

There is no terror in the bang of a gun; only the anticipation of it. - Alfred Hitchcock.

Now the bullet is out of the gun.

Good work.

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saumiee

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Posted: 8 years ago

#314

🤗

This is so not done, Malvika!

On one hand you write a part which makes us all giddy..😆 and in the very same part you explode the bomb of the past memories

Amazing update! You have such a talent. .really you don't have the caliber of being just an Os/ff writer. . But a proper book. I would love to read it.😳

So this part was pretty overwhelming👏 Dev-Sona's paradise is shaken again, for the past memories come haunting a way back into their lives.

But its okay. .they needed to face it, to conquer those dark memories and make a new beginning, properly.

I can't wait for the next part😳❤️

P.S unres my comment on the previous page😃

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Shaun

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Posted: 8 years ago

#315

Part 5

Fantastic Chapter

I really like how you brought out the issues between Dev and Sona between Sona and Ishwari and the fact that Dev could make excuses for his mother believing her fake sweetness,

Dev and Sona always assuming things would get better but they never approached the root problem instead they ignored it by going on trips and now that Sona holds onto the wrapper she senses there was something more but trying to remember is difficult

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Curlyhairdiary

@Curlyhairdiary

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Posted: 8 years ago

#316

Originally posted by: LiveLife321

Liked it...Na baba...Its amazing👏

Thank you so much dear😃😳

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Curlyhairdiary

@Curlyhairdiary

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Posted: 8 years ago

#317

Originally posted by: Suvika.
Phew! OK. Finally the past is out. And what a trigger to bring it stumbling out!!
But before that, I absolutely loved a couple of sentences you'd written - the way you brought the emotion out in them.

1. He was going to hell anyway, what was one more sin under his belt?
2. "It reminds me you lived."

Especially the second one. Very profound. For me, these two are the highlight of the whole chapter. 👏 👏
Dev is not stuck any more. In either departments that I'd mentioned in my previous review.
There is no terror in the bang of a gun; only the anticipation of it. - Alfred Hitchcock.
Now the bullet is out of the gun.
Good work.

Thank you so much, Suvi 😃😃

Exactly, he's not stuck any more. The only thing to fear is fear itself. Now he doesn't have to live with the constant apprehension.

The line you liked most is one of my fav too. Glad to know we like similar things!

Thanks once again for your constant support😳

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BunnyObodhro368

@BunnyObodhro368

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#318

Wow what a twist
Love it
Now I can't wait for the next part
Pleaseee update soon
Im so curious

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Curlyhairdiary

@Curlyhairdiary

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Posted: 8 years ago

#319

Originally posted by: saumiee
🤗
This is so not done, Malvika!
On one hand you write a part which makes us all giddy..😆 and in the very same part you explode the bomb of the past memories
Amazing update! You have such a talent. .really you don't have the caliber of being just an Os/ff writer. . But a proper book. I would love to read it.😳
So this part was pretty overwhelming👏 Dev-Sona's paradise is shaken again, for the past memories come haunting a way back into their lives.
But its okay. .they needed to face it, to conquer those dark memories and make a new beginning, properly.
I can't wait for the next part😳❤️
P.S unres my comment on the previous page😃

Big jhappi to you, saumiee😃

Hehehee, I know, I'm sorry! But it needed to happen in the same chapter to have maximum impact.

Oh my, Thank you so much for such an amazing compliment. Love you for it!!

Yes, now comes the confrontation and the angst.

Will try to post the next part soon😳

Yes, I've responded to it😊 thanks once again!!

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rasika_DS

@rasika_DS

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#320

Malvika ye tune kya kiya..a treat along with a bomb explosion.

Big hug to you for giving this part so quickly..much needed🤗

So finally the past is revealed..they were going to have a baby..so she had a miscarriage😭😭🤢

Now its clear why Dev was so much apprehensive and worried for what if she remembers this.

Loved the romantic DevAkshi. They both are so maturely dealing with the sort of new relationship. Looking forward to see if the past will change the dynamics of their (new)relationship or make it more strong. Now we need the next part very very soon😳

You write so beautifully.👏👏 I have no words to describe. Have you thought of it as a career option. You should definetely give it a try😳

These lines are so so beautiful.👏👏

Every time Sonakshi looked at him, it was with a tentative apology for not yet remembering. While she was regretful, he was grateful. While she looked at him hoping to remember, he was wary one day she would.

The fragments of unhappiness she'd remembered before belonged to another life, another couple. They were long gone, replaced with new memories of a man to whom she couldn't possibly feel closer. She couldn't remember smiling more in her life.

If she was honest with herself, she'd admit that she was meshing the few known pieces of her life in a disjointed picture. She was shoving mismatched edges together like an impatient child, bending corners any way she could, all to escape the realization that she wasn't playing with all the relevant pieces.

Edited by rasika_DS - 8 years ago

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