DevAkshi OS~ Dard ke andheron se, aa gaye ujaalon mein

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Shaun

@Jade0001

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

Beautiful and Soulful at the same time

I liked how you described each marriage vow that was indeed beautiful

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: adi35
Another brilliant OS
HATS OFF!!!!
👏 ⭐️ 👍🏼
keep writing 😊

Awww thank you so much Adi !!😃🤗

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: luvflicksgirl
I don't have words to explain my feelings. Akshara you rock...
Meri Sona🤗 Love ya sweetie😳
Totally maza aa gaya...

P.S. I have a request to my beautiful GF - Can you please write an OS on a Dev Sona horror movie watching sequence 😆

Luv
Main Dev aur kaun😆😆

Awww Sri !! Your comments always make my day yaar !!😆😃

And yes I will definitely take up your request!!

Loads of love,

Tumhari pyari Sona aur kaun 😉

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: stuti123
speechless..very beautifully written ..wish we get to see this in the show too

Awww thank you so much stuti !! I am glad you liked it !!😃😛

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saumiee

@saumiee

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

I reserved my comment 4 pages back. . but since it is so late( I am so sorry BAE, got stuck with exams and I wanted to read this in peace❤️) , Now commenting here😳

I am so glad I waited for a while to read this. . One needs emotional calmness to read something so soulful as this😊

How on earth Did you manage to interweave the vows so beautifully with DevAkshi👏 This was so beautiful🤗

So touching. . They didn't speak a word. . Yet everything was spoken😳 I loved, loved the part where Neha seeks their blessings and how you wrote.. . What was there to give now apart from blessings.👏

Did you research about the saptpadi for this piece ? The vows are written by you in your own words, dear!? The lines where the partner addresses the other half as vishnu and lakshmi?

If it was done by you. . I have never read something so thoughtful before👏

And if not, even then it was so amazing to incorporate it into the os.😳

My favorite part was this. . I miss my mother so much. . This brought tears in my eyes..almost.

A mother is your first prayer, your first love, you first friend, your first enemy. Ishwari might have held Dev's hand only for some time, but she did not realize that she would hold his heart for a lifetime. The fact that Dev loved another as well - only showcased that after her - there was someone equally capable of taking care of her child. To shower him with same love, scold him the same. That somebody, other than her would always be there for her. Someone who would complete her love - in other ways.

Ishwari, nothing can separate Dev from you. Not time. Not space. Not even death.

Not even your selfishness. He would break. Tear apart. Witness a living hell. Die a thousand deaths. But would never stop worshipping you.

So then, why?

Why?

Why would you make a man choose between his life and soul?

Why?

Thank you so much for dedicating this🤗

Edited by saumiee - 9 years ago

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: aaliah3108

Such a poignant and beautifully written OS dear !!! Loved it and was moved beyond words !!!

You have touched a chord here seriously. Loved it totally !!! 🤗

Aww thank you so much dear !! Glad to know you liked it. Your comments matter so much !!❤️🤗

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: ...FRF...
Ammu, it was brilliant...The way you described their relation... it was amazing... you are an amazing writer, yaar... keep writing... love ya...😳

Awww Fatty thaank you so much for those heartwarming wishes !! I am so happy that you liked it !!😛🤗

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@debby_11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

i think you should join their script writer's department
it was absolutely amazing. loved it
Please join their team :D

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ammu3

@ammu3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: TereLiyeMINU
The celebration is grand,distractions are much and yet you stuck to the core of the ceremonies--The Seven Vows...This is the first thing that pulls a reader's attention and transfixes it.No love is complete without sacrifices,no relationship is complete without commitments and perhaps no writing is complete without allusions and references.You surely excel in that,there is not an iota of doubt in it.😊 The part of Ishwari has been addressed justifiably without any over usage of agonising lines.This seemed to me as one of the strongest pillars in all your works---no over usage or repetition of theme or emotions.Your creativity which is ablaze like an inferno yet poised like morning prayer takes the responsibility of producing another rich and subtle work.
Thanks for the pm.
Keep Writing and Keep Smiling..😊

Awww maa !! Aapki har ek cheez mujhe choo jaathi hai. You r compliments are so beautiful and makes me squeal with joy !! I always eagerly hope you like it !! Thank you so much !!🤗❤️