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stuti

@stuti123

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

speechless..very beautifully written ..wish we get to see this in the show too

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aaliah3108

@aaliah3108

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Such a poignant and beautifully written OS dear !!! Loved it and was moved beyond words !!!

You have touched a chord here seriously. Loved it totally !!! 🤗

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...FRF...

@...FRF...

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Ammu, it was brilliant...The way you described their relation... it was amazing... you are an amazing writer, yaar... keep writing... love ya...😳

Edited by ...FRF... - 9 years ago

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TereLiyeMINU

@TereLiyeMINU

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

The celebration is grand,distractions are much and yet you stuck to the core of the ceremonies--The Seven Vows...This is the first thing that pulls a reader's attention and transfixes it.No love is complete without sacrifices,no relationship is complete without commitments and perhaps no writing is complete without allusions and references.You surely excel in that,there is not an iota of doubt in it.😊 The part of Ishwari has been addressed justifiably without any over usage of agonising lines.This seemed to me as one of the strongest pillars in all your works---no over usage or repetition of theme or emotions.Your creativity which is ablaze like an inferno yet poised like morning prayer takes the responsibility of producing another rich and subtle work.

Thanks for the pm.

Keep Writing and Keep Smiling..😊

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Littlestar108

@Littlestar108

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

This is so beautiful...

Your writing is so magical...

How come you do this magic everytime?

You are a really beautiful and a creative writer...

Love you for this!! ❤️

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randommusings

@randommusings

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Beautifully penned down...just sheer brilliance.

All the saat vachans perfectly explained from both Sona's n Dev's perspectives...👏 they don't formal name for their relationship, their souls are already married to each other

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WeRockTheWorld

@WeRockTheWorld

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Beautifully Written !!⭐️👏

Not sure on that day how many understand the beauty and purity behind the concept "Seven Steps / Saptapadi)". Thank you so much for writing this and reminding us of our wedding day !!

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Anu

@Adi_Ki_Zoya

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Ammu chechi 🤗

Iam literally out of words right now .. There couldn't be a better eid gift for me .. thankyu thankyu thankyu 🤗

Don't know whether your lil sis should be more happy becuz she got to read something Mindblowing today or becus she has got the most talented chechi in the world ☺️

Love you forever and ever ❤️

Your lines, your words .. basically every single thing about your OS is just ... aahhrg I don't have words to describe those! Seriously 🤗

The way you described the seven pheras, the importance of sindoor and mangalsuthra ... hats off!👏 No one could have written it as beautifully as you did

Some sentences of yours !! -

"Fire is the purest thing on this earth - an object that purifies others yet still remains clean."

And -

"If you are the music, I am the lyrics.
If I am the heavenly body, you are the earthly world.
While I am the life source, you are the carrier of the same.
I am the thoughts and you are the speech.

While you are the words, I am the meaning.

We may exist but will not make sense without the other."

How ?? How can someone write something so deep and meaningful?? These lines !! Oh god, give me some adjectives so that I could describe what it is!! How extraordinary they were! 😃

Every time I think this is the best OS of yours, You come up with a better one next time proving me wrong 😊

And yess !!

I know mangroves and pneumatophores .. iam not THAT bad in bio *dancing* this relation too was depicted perfectly 👍🏼

Ishwari part too was amazingly portrayed!! Whatever you wrote about a mother is just so true and beautiful 😳

And at last the way you ended it !

"Why would you make a man choose between his life and soul?

Why?

Seven steps. Seven vows. Seven rounds. Seven lives. Eternity."

Iam again running out of words to describe the perfection you follow in selecting the words .. they come out so meaningful, leaving an emotional impact on the readers...

Fine fine !! Iam finally stopping my rant 🤪

Lastly, Your lil sis loves you hamesha ❤️

A BIG hug again for the dedication chechi 🤗

You are the best 😃

Take care 😃

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ammu3

@ammu3

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: AnatomyAddict
Res- UNres

Edited- I'm such an amazing stalker! I will unres soon! I Shapath!

I will be commenting more in depth later, but I just want to say, what did I just read! It's.. I don't have words right now. Let me read it once more and then comment!
I am back to add on!
His hazel eyes that melted at the slightest bit of heat from love or happiness yet hardened at the cold, harsh reality. His eyes reminded her of the old barn door, flecks of deep brown married with lighter hues, so much strength remaining despite the years of weathering, so much life. They always shined with a golden light, whenever they met hers - sending a shiver down her spine every time, every time.

This is beautiful! I have no words for this paragraph, it's just brilliant! Beyond words! Other than that I love how you have given the seven circles a new definition! I truly loved it, it was beyond just the rituals, it was more! It was so much more!

You truly are a talented Bae! Thank You so much for always dedicating your work to me (even though I don't know what I did to get this privilege from you😆). But it's truly an honour to know just a beautiful soul like you!

Keep writing!

Awww thank you so much Pari !! D'Aww its because of the innocence of your comment on my very first post Bae :* and ofc I later went on to realise what an amazing person you are !!😉😆😆 Awww you are too kind !!😳