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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sweetxsuga

wow.. i love the concept and the storyline.. its different... amazing az always... plz continue soon....thanx 4 a lovely part...


thanks for reading yaar..next part will be up in a few...๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: tanyaaaa26

oh jaz ear its gr8 one more ff very good i will be waiting for this also eagerly so do update soon dear ๐Ÿ‘ this is for u

lov
Tanya


jaz ear...huh...new nickname for me ๐Ÿ˜‰...j/k...glad you like this one too...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: moonlightgurl

AAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!! * screms once again*

seems like i m fond of screaming, huh? ๐Ÿ˜‰ ya think yaar...๐Ÿ˜‰...mere toh kaan pak jayenge tere iss screaming se...still...dont stop...dil khol ke scream karo ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

omg, wht is heer's raaz? she's got a four yr old son? wht happened in London, Heer? ๐Ÿ˜ƒ the fact that she has a four yr old son is the raaz ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...im not ekta...i let the audience know what is going on...now the thing is...do all the characters know...๐Ÿ˜‰...well whatever happened in london had heer land up with aarav...u need details...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...tabua...look at me...all besharam ๐Ÿ˜•

prem's an antagonist? how did this happen? ๐Ÿ˜• oh you will see...prem is a real jerk...๐Ÿ˜›

luved it! update soon! add me to ur PM list! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ you are already on my PM list jaani...next part up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ



Originally posted by: blushpink13

hi jaz di, i luved the concept of modern ff. the first part creates alot of suspense i am looking forward for the 2 part. update soon,thanks.
luv iqra


hi yaar...thanks for liking the ff...part 2 will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Originally posted by: fijiana

๐Ÿ‘ great concept jaz.
aarav is sure going to be my fav baccha now(apart from nephews that is)woh vaapas aa gaaya,hai kaun hain bhai.ash is all goody goody on this one ,wow that will be interesting to read.waise do update soon.


yup yup...aarav will be a heart stealer...you cant help but fall in love with him ๐Ÿ˜‰...just wait for his intro...there is still some time b4 that but still...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...woh, woh hai jisse hum saabka intezaar hai ๐Ÿ˜‰...PREM!..just see ๐Ÿ˜ณ...next update soon ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Originally posted by: Parth Garewal

hey jaz....u r toooooo gud fantastic...awsum......what do i say now u shud try on balaji...seriously... u have much more better story then the show rele has...i love ur ffs....they are toooo gud...rele...awsum......... post the next part soooooooooooooooooooon...i m waitingggggggggggggggggg ๐Ÿ‘

wid love
PARTH ๐Ÿ˜Š


haila...me with balaji...they would fire me one week into the job ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...im all for romance and stuff...they like to drag...i do not...lol...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...now with aditi gone...i think the show ill lose its special touch...premeer is harshiti...hai naa ...next part up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

JAZ

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: kellz

can't wait for the next update please continue


next part up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: iqbals4ever

wapis aagaya... kaun aagaya??? i hate cliffhangers!Angry ahhhh! but i love the story ๐Ÿฅฐalready so i'll wait in suspense or anticipation for the next part!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿปawesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป


aare yaar...kuch toh samja karo ๐Ÿ˜‰...who can come back that will create havoc in heer's life...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...soocho...you will get the answer soon ๐Ÿ˜›...i love cliffhangers...they are the best...only when i am giving them...not when i am on the receiving end ๐Ÿ˜•๐Ÿ˜•๐Ÿ˜•...next part up soon๐Ÿ˜Š

Originally posted by: prab_rockinn

awesome start...... watin to read more......

๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป


next part up soon ๐Ÿ˜Š

Originally posted by: -Faith-

Will be back to comment


still waiting ๐Ÿ˜‰...hope you did read it though ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: square1

Hi jazz!

Im so glad you wrote another FF. We get to enjoy another FF by you and let me tell you it's so "hatt ke" from Bas ek Paal. I thjnk i'd like prem in a negative role... it'll be quite interesting! Cant imagine his puppy dog eyes firing bullets (unless someone harasses Heer... but that's another whole story) ๐Ÿ˜† thanks for liking the ff...it is a complete opposite compared to Ek Paal...prem will the a class 1 jerk...not as bad as manmeet in EP...but bad enough ๐Ÿ˜‰ Anyways, absolutely love the first part... please update soon... please please please! Im dying to read more! next part will be up soon...very soon ๐Ÿ˜‰
tc and keep amazing us with your skills! aww...you are too sweet ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...thank u



JAZ
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey guys...im back with part 2 of Heer's Secret...sorry for the delay but i do hope you are still interested ...๐Ÿ˜•๐Ÿ˜•๐Ÿ˜•...just keep in mind this isnt your typical ff ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰..

for those interested...i came across this video on youtube...its only a little over 1 min long...do check it out...it will bring a smile to your face for sure


http://youtube.com/watch?v=5phDlQIOfls&feature=related

Part 2

The pounding of her heart stopped to a stand still, the fear running hot through her body had died down with an icy chill that spread across her body, panic churning in her stomach.

"He came by a short while ago." It seemed that her mother was now relaxed, because her Hindi was gone, and the English was back.

"What?!" Heer finally chocked out once she found her voice again. "Here? In person?" her panic and dread was increasing ten fold every passing second.

"Don't worry; Aarav was already out of here long before that with your father," her mother tried to re assure her.

"But what about the pictures?" Heer's mind traveled to her parent's family lounge that was basically a time line of their one and only grandchild, from day one to just a few weeks ago at the state fair. Then another thought gripped her mind, "Oh God, the toys...what about he toys?" as she dashed into the lounge.

"I had already done the clean up as soon as your father and Aarav had left. There was nothing that would give him a sign that there was a child in this house. Besides, he didn't come in; I didn't let him past the hallway."

"Thank God," she said as she let her body sink into the chair next to the telephone in the lounge. Heer covered her face with her hands and let out a breath that she had held back.

He was back. After over four and a half heart breakingly lonely years, he was back...he was in California.

After gathering her thoughts and her wits she spoke again, "What did he want?"

Her mother looked at her is disbelief for a few seconds. "You...he wanted to see you," her mother replied calmly. Her mothers hand fished in her pocket for something, pulled something out, and handed it to Heer. "He wouldn't take 'no' for an answer."

With trembling hands she took the piece of paper from her mother. As soon as it was in her hands, Heer knew that it was a business card of sorts. Taking a deep breath, she slowly turned the card over...Prem Jhuneja CEO of Jhuneja Industries...typed across the pristine white card in big bold, gold letters.

Obviously things hadn't changed much in these past few years, Heer thought cynically. He was a man used to getting his way all the time, and he was unashamedly ruthless in going about getting whatever he wanted. "I can't see him," she jumped to her feet in frustration and agitation and began pacing in the hall. "I can't see him...I won't."

"Darling..." her mothers tone was gentle but authority was unmistakable. "...you should have told him about Aarav. He has the right to know he has fathered a child."

"No...No he has no right!" Heer shot back fiercely to her mother. "He made it clear from the get-go, no commitments, no marriage -- no kids. That was the deal."

"Regardless, he still should have been told."

Heer took in a deep breath, trying to control her anger from her mother. "You still don't get it do you Mom? Even after all these years you still think he is victim, don't you?" she gave her mother a bitter glance. "Well, for your information, had I told him that I was pregnant with his child, he would have steamrolled me into terminating it. I know he would have insisted on it."

"That choice would have been yours I'm sure." Her mother's expression still filled with motherly concern. "He couldn't have forced you into anything."

"Forced โ€“ no; convinced - yes. I was only twenty years old!" Heer yells, almost on the verge of tears. "I was living overseas with a man nearly nine years older then me, for whom I would have done anything...anything. If he asked me to jump off the top level of the Eiffel tower, I probably would have done it." Heer let out a ragged breath as tears came to her eyes, "I loved him that much."

Teji couldn't help but pull her daughter into her arms and comfort her. One of her hands lovingly stroked her hair, just the way she had done for almost all of Heer's twenty-four years.

"Oh mom..." Heer chocked on a sob as she turned to face her mother. "What am I going to do?"

Teji pushed her daughter back and looked her in the eyes, "You will go and see him, because, if nothing else, you owe him that much. He mentioned that his father had recently passed away. I take it that is why he is back in California, to take care of his fathers' affairs."

As Heer followed her mother into the kitchen, her brows came together in confusion. When she had been with Prem he had told her that both his parents were dead. That was beginning and end of the only conversation they had about his family. He had mentioned his childhood a few times here and there, reluctantly no less. What she couldn't figure out now as why he had lied to her?

"Did he say where he was going to be staying?" she asked as she sat down on one of the breakfast stool by the kitchen counter.

Teji busied herself with the kettle and tea bags as she replied "Some hotel, the number is on the back of the business card. However, I got the impression that he may be moving to Santa Barbara."

"That close?" she asked her mother in utter shock. Heer's family lived in a small city called Carpentaria a few miles from the main city of Santa Barbara. In fact, her younger sisters Ashlesha and Meher were still students at UCSB; Ashlesha in her final year for her BSN, and Meher getting her bachelors in drama, Meher was sure she was going to make it big. It was only a 20 or 25 minute drive.

"I'm afraid so, but you never know, he may have changed." He mother offered.

"I highly doubt that. People like Prem Jhuneja don't change...ever; not in their nature anyway." She added under her breath.

"You and your father are two of a kind...stubborn!" Teji yelled. "I know you needed to be extra strong since you are a single mother but there are limits. I swear you would cut off your nose just to spite your face." Heer couldn't help grinning as her mother rambled on. "You know very well that you should have been married and settled by now. I don't know why poor Preet puts up with you, really...I don't."

Heer rolled her eyes as her mother blasted off into another one of her rants about how Preet and Heer should already be married and thinking about adding to the family; and how Heer really needed to push the wedding forward. Her mother, her father and her two sisters just adored Preet Singh; he was like the son/brother they never had. What hit Heer was how much Aarav adored Preet. That was one of the main reasons to why Heer had accepted his proposal. Her fianc, Preet Singh, adored Aarav equally, if not more, than Aarav adored him.

JAZ
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Posted: 17 years ago
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haila!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*okay now i m screming my heart out!*
i m so glad i was wandering across the forum and caught prt 2 as soon as u posted it up! didn't hav to wait for the PM! ๐Ÿ˜‰
okay, so i dnt think i m glad tht prem's the dad of aarav? heer makes it sound like he' a complete a**
preet singh? ur using manmeet's last name in this FF? dnt make my luvly preet like manmeet then! ๐Ÿ˜‰
haila!!!!!!
prem's nine yrs older then heer??????????????
gawd, so if heers 24 he'z 33? boy, is he old in comparison! i m sure hez as hot as ever! ๐Ÿ˜‰
i cnt believe it! i m addicted to sumthing other then harry potter and meg cabot! *sigh*
luvvvveeddd it!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
OMG, I Just loved it!!!!!!!!!
they have a baby!
I am really excited about the next one, it was great i loved it all!
?xXx?
Sunayna
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Jaz, you never seize to amaze me.

Prem is Aarav's father, and Heer is engaged to Preet Singh. BRILLIANT!

I think I'm going to enjoy this Prem...I think I'm going to love to hate him and hate to love him. I can't wait!

I'm also interested to see Heer/Preet's relationship unfold. This is gonna be good.

I wish there was more and I could just keep reading...I wish this was a published novel so I wasn't sitting here longing for more right now.

I hope you'll update again soon....though, take your time, you know I'll wait (though impatiently) for it.

Love,
~Payal
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Posted: 17 years ago
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yeah its very nice dear too good
well same words i wiill be waiting for next so do update soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow di believe it....ur just tooooooooooo ud and awsome in ffs...i rele like ur ff's...the reason y i stopped reading ur ff ek pal cuz thats long but thats not the prob.....its that i can't read it...u know shortage of time...besides when ver i am on indian forums my bro is like u always do stupid stuff on indian forums....but i don'tcare whatever he says.....but don't i'll try to contimue this one...
luv iqra
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey jaz you still managed to get asmile on my face with your ff(still tensed about the additi sacking biz)so heer lived with prem overseas and his the father, and heer is engaged to preet.now this ff will rock for sure.yaar hope that he has changed his attitude,and so the maan are like always prepared for mr juneja if he shows up,that they clear out the toys.i want to know what happened between prem and heer.oh no please update soon

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Posted: 17 years ago
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I agree with Payal.... no matter how many times i read your FF/ new update, you always amaze & impress me on how you write.... and your storyline lines are just wicked/magnificent ... i honestly lubbbb them.... seriously mini story or even a novel of 395 pages will be a classic hit everywhere... back up career ๐Ÿ˜‰....

im really enjoying the way this story is unfolding....and i knew Prem will be the father of Aarav (nice name)... Prem in this character role will be interesting to read... i guess love can change a person in time....

Preet is engaged to Heer.... my eyes popped out.... hey its better then Manmeet right... anyways i want to see Preet and Heer chemistry but can tell Heer will melt in front of Prem and his charming words... ๐Ÿ˜ณ

update whenever you have the time hun... will be waiting eagerly .... hehehe and no you don't have to explain the birds and bees story.... was a nightmare when i had to sit through that in the first place don't need that torture again... had to explain it as well...

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