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Posted: 17 years ago
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Scene 3
It's raining heavily when Prem returns 2 the chawl totally drenched.
"Aap to poore bheeg chuke hain.jaldi se kapde badal lijiye nahin to phir se beemaar ho jayenge."Meher shows a considerate gesture
Prem does not pay heed 2 her advice and asks
"Heer kahan hai?"He asks seriously.
"Di andar hain,aaj shayad unki tabiyat kuch theek nahin hai."
Prem walks 2 her room all wet.
"Arre...kya hua?Pehle.."but Meher halts sensing that something is not right.
Heer is sitting down with a photo of her parents in her hand.
"Ab tabiyat kaisi hai Heer?"Prem asks sarcastically.
"Theek hai par tum.."But Prem cuts her short and asks in a slightly raised tone
"Kya main itna begaana ho gaya hoon ki tumhaare aansuoon par bhi mera hak nahin rah gaya?"
"Kya hua?" Heer tries pretending normal.
"Kya hua?"Prem screams with clenched fists and continues"yeh sawaal mujhe tumse poochna chahiye?"
"Prem tum bheeg chuke ho pehle kapde badal lo nahin to thand lag jayaegi."Heer answers in a calm tone.
"Mar to nahin jaunga."Prem answers in rage.He moves forward and pulls Heer with a jerk with a tight grip on her arms.
"Prem!!"She gives a cry of pain.
"Kyon gayi thi tum Bauji ke paas?"The question by Prem leaves Heer stunned.
"Chaunk gayi ki mujhe kaise pata, main tumhaara aks hoon,aur apne aks se kuch bhi chupaana naamumkin hai."
"Jawaab do kyon gayi thi wahan?Mere hisse ki zillat sehne, .."
"Nahin Prem main to bas maafi maangne gayi thi."
"Aur badle mein dard ki yeh saugaat lekar lauti ho,maine to tumse nahin kaha tha..."
"Bina kahe zazbaaton ko samajhna hi to pyaar hai Prem."
"Mujhe itna mahaan banane ki koi zaroorat nahi...mere liye khud ko qurbaan karne ki koi zaroorat nahin..kyonki tumhaare bina main adhoora hoon."Prem leaves the room.
It's late in the night.
"Di aapne subah se kuch nahin khaaya chal ke kuch khaa lijiye."Meher requests Heer
"Prem ne khaa liya?"Heer asks with a worried look on her face.
"Nahin woh to so gaye.Bahut thak gaye honge."
"To phir main kaise khaa sakti hoon?"Heer replies.
"Phir bhi di.."Meher tries persuading her.
"Tu jaake so jaa main khaa loongi."
"Agar woh nahin jage to?"Meher insists.
"Tu so jaa."Meher goes 2 sleep.
Prem is standing on the terrace,he feels a shadow in the dark. He thinks it is Meher.
"Tum so jao Meher mujhe bhookh nahin."
"Meher so chuki hai."Heer informs him.
Prem turns around and walks down without reacting 2 Heer's statement.
Scene 4
It's 3'oclock in the morning and Heer is still all awake in her room.Meher is fast asleep beside her. Heer hears a sound in the kitchen.She walks into the kitchen and sees

Prem standing there with a glass of water.
"Tum soye nahin?"
"Tumhe jaga ke main khud chain se kaise so sakta hoon?"
"Yeh dawayee kyon kha rahe ho?"Heer asks seeing a tablet in his hand.
"Sar mein bahut dard ho raha hai."
"Main chai bana deti hoon usse aaram milega."Heer starts preparing tea.
After a while Heer and Prem are sitting in the verandah.Heer is gently massaging his head.Heer decides 2 leave thinking Prem has fallen asleep.But Prem holds her hand.
"Mujhe maaf kar do Heer,us waqt main.."
"Tumhe haq hai Prem."
Prem gently smiles at her and runs his fingers through her locks.Heer starts feeling shy but Prem draws her close and Heer rests her head on her shoulders.Prem gives a

deep sigh.
"Sach kahoon Heer mujhme tumhari tarah bardaasht karne ki taakat nahin.Magar jab se tum meri zindagi mein aayi ho maine apne aap ko pehchaana hai.Main yeh nahin

kehta ki tumne mujhe badla hai. Kyonki pyaar ek doosre ko badalne ka nahin ek doosre ke zeene ki wajah ban ne ka naam hai.Aur tum meri jeene ki wajah ho.Tumhe

khush dekhne ke liye agar mujhe marna bhi..."But Heer shuts Prem's lips with her fingers.
"Mujhe aisi khushi nahin chahiye jisme tumhaara saath na ho."
"Heer toh Prem ki rag rag mein hai,Heer Prem ke dil ki dhadkan hai,dhadkan ko dil se juda karke rakhna naamumkin hai.Yeh Heer aur Ranjha ki kahaani nahin jisme Ranjha

Heer se juda ho jaata hai. Yeh Prem aur Heer ki dastaan hain jinhe koi,jo hamesha saath the aur saath rahenge."
Prem tightens her arms around Heer and the world around doesn't exist for them temporarily.
Song in background
Bahon ke darmyaan do pyaar mil rahe hain..
This was my version of Monday's Epi,just 4 fun,continued from "Heer turns brave on Monday"


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Aanandaa thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Wah Wahhhhh...👏....Maza aagaya...

I loooooooved the dialogs...they were sooo like Prem..Of course Heer ne kuch zyada bol di end me, but may be that is where she is getting to, in the serial too..lol..she better..she is being a little too mute for her own good...

I especially loved 'Kya main itna begaana ho gaya hoon ki tumhaare aansuoon par bhi mera hak nahin rah gaya?'.kya dialog hai...brilliant!

Thanks Keanu for the wonderful scenes..You have really made my day...😳

Raksha...



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Posted: 17 years ago
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Thanks for writing such a beautiful scene.....wow...
you are a great writer...the dialogues the scenes everything simply superb...Hope Ekta's creatives read it...

do keep writing more...you really freshen us up...
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Posted: 17 years ago
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dammnN!!>..u r truly a rock star!..u go girl!!>..lol!...seems like u love to write or make up a story!!...some day in future i hope u will be a writer of kdmhmd!!.ekta ko batana padega!!..loL!>.....love to see ur prediction in 2days epi!...just hope this happends!!....loved ur dialogs!!..they r awesomely described!!

"Mujhe aisi khushi nahin chahiye jisme tumhaara saath na ho."
"Heer toh Prem ki rag rag mein hai,Heer Prem ke dil ki dhadkan hai,dhadkan ko dil se juda karke rakhna naamumkin hai.Yeh Heer aur Ranjha ki kahaani nahin jisme Ranjha....Heer se juda ho jaata hai. Yeh Prem aur Heer ki dastaan hain jinhe koi,jo hamesha saath the aur saath rahenge."

luxurious,brilliant, and marvelous writing!!....

thank u so much for posting wonderful forecast of kis desh mein hai mera diL!.
Edited by vishalrana222 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: raksha.l

Wah Wahhhhh...👏....Maza aagaya...

I loooooooved the dialogs...they were sooo like Prem..Of course Heer ne kuch zyada bol di end me, but may be that is where she is getting to, in the serial too..lol..she better..she is being a little too mute for her own good...

I especially loved 'Kya main itna begaana ho gaya hoon ki tumhaare aansuoon par bhi mera hak nahin rah gaya?'.kya dialog hai...brilliant!

Thanks Keanu for the wonderful scenes..You have really made my day...😳

Raksha...





Oye RuRu ju still have the key to my brain na lol..
You said exactly all I wanted to after reading the post...
It was weally well written esp loved the dialogues.. and esp the one u pointed out.. Thought chor😆
And sach may Maza agaya😃👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Faith-



Oye RuRu ju still have the key to my brain na lol..
You said exactly all I wanted to after reading the post...
It was weally well written esp loved the dialogues.. and esp the one u pointed out.. Thought chor😆
And sach may Maza agaya😃👏



Heyyyyy ZuZu...Socha tha kabhi toh mai tumse pehle likhloo..😳😆

If I keep on dittoing you, some day I may lose my whole vocabulary...😆

But yes, I still have your key and you mine...😳

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: raksha.l



Heyyyyy ZuZu...Socha tha kabhi toh mai tumse pehle likhloo..😳😆

If I keep on dittoing you, some day I may lose my whole vocabulary...😆

But yes, I still have your key and you mine...😳

Hawwwww lol I wud tou love if u always write mujhe say pehlay😳😉 I dont mind losing my vocabulary bhi.. coz I dont have much to lose😆
Oh ya and I dont even plan on returning the key😆

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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow......dis is gr8.........bot plzz if u dnt whn u write in urdu....can u plz in write in english..coz some people like me cnt read urdu.....n it gets hard 4 me 2 understand wots happening...i cnt get some of da words..not all of dem.....so plz next if u doing da update plz wrire in english.dnt mind if u write in urdu.....just translate in english is well......thanks.
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Wow its superb...kya dialoges hai yaar....i loved every bit of it....thx for it 😊 ....
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Posted: 17 years ago
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very nice bahaut achaaaaa laga hope u will give a 5th part too 😆 although very nice 😛

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