ZINDAGI:The FF about LIFE-Part 15 on pg 54!!!!!!!! - Page 7

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: atop

bhaiyya muahh muahh...marr dala allah aaapke ff ne maar dala..wow it's too good ..too good..omg u write so well bhaiyya waise wen u are my elder bro u need to be perfect after all u are my bhaiyya plz see am pressurising my bhaiyya..hehe jokes apart ...it's fab bahiiyaa.need to take some tips frm u.....

and bhaiiyyaa keep writing early..looking forward for the next part..write jaldi jaldi.

u're lil sis is waiting..

and and am sowiiee i replied late...u noe na i was not here that's why..lotherwise aisa ho sakta hai ki choti behna reply na karti.....

okie now enuf of my bak bak..u must have got bored..but u noe na amm not kanjoos in replyimng am very dildaaar..heh..

bhaiyya keep writing fabuously....

may god bless u with wisdom and happiness..ameen..

luv atop



no yaar i m not at all bored... actually u r my sis so its obvious that u ll b dildaar..😉😉ya jokes apart thanks alloott for the lovely reply.. u r my angel sis... its too gud to have ur fab reply.. ya i ll write soon and try to post...and sis plz keep replying me coz ur reply make me write more and much more.. thanks sis...😳😳

Originally posted by: blushpink13

lovely, awsome waiting for 3rd part
luv iqra



and iqra..i ll post the part soon.. and thanks for the compliment..thanks..sis..

PARTH
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Posted: 17 years ago
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bhaiyya don't worry abt the reply u'll not ask then also i'll reply..but tell me u're this line...u r my angel sis... its too gud to have ur fab reply.. ya i ll write soon and try to post...and sis plz keep replying me coz ur reply make me write more and much more.. thanks sis...

all this was to butter me or really it matters..i think aap apni lil sis ko maska maar rahe the...hmmmmm bhaiyya but aapki sis is bery hard nut to crack okies,..

and secondly am ghuccchhhaaa...u said thncchhuu to me..am u're lil sis and u being formal with me bhaiyyaa..am really gucchhha u said thncchhuu to me...


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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: atop

bhaiyya don't worry abt the reply u'll not ask then also i'll reply..but tell me u're this line...u r my angel sis... its too gud to have ur fab reply.. ya i ll write soon and try to post...and sis plz keep replying me coz ur reply make me write more and much more.. thanks sis...

all this was to butter me or really it matters..i think aap apni lil sis ko maska maar rahe the...hmmmmm bhaiyya but aapki sis is bery hard nut to crack okies,..

and secondly am ghuccchhhaaa...u said thncchhuu to me..am u're lil sis and u being formal with me bhaiyyaa..am really gucchhha u said thncchhuu to me...


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hey sis dont be gussa yaar..,and i want to tell u that whatever isay to u rele matters...i di not lie to YOU.. u r my lil sis.. and if i wud not say it to u then to whom i ll say.😉. so sis dont ever think that its fake.. its real.. rele i felt it from the bottom of my heart and now if i say sorry to u..then u ll again be gussa so what do i say...😳😳and once again i want to say that its real not fake.. u r real angel...haan thodi badmash ho no doubt abt that par chalega...jaisi ho achhi ho..😉

PARTH
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Posted: 17 years ago
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HEY bhaiyyu yup am badmaashh..but u find me only thoda thoda badmaash tsk tsk am pukka shaitan as my bhaiyyu.
accha bhaiyyu congo u have become a goldie.. yay dancey dancey,,,... and ya i noe watever u say is real..after all u'll not tell u're lil sis then who.was just pulling up u're leg..haha..thodi badmaash hu main..thodi nadaan hoo main..

am singing song for my own self..hehe funny na..

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Originally posted by: atop

HEY bhaiyyu yup am badmaashh..but u find me only thoda thoda badmaash tsk tsk am pukka shaitan as my bhaiyyu.
accha bhaiyyu congo u have become a goldie.. yay dancey dancey,,,... and ya i noe watever u say is real..after all u'll not tell u're lil sis then who.was just pulling up u're leg..haha..thodi badmaash hu main..thodi nadaan hoo main..

am singing song for my own self..hehe funny na..

luv atop



hey behena thodi galti ho gayi.. u r very badmash not thoda thoda..and u proved it...😆😉
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Hey guys I m going out of station for sum hours only or a day…so I ll b unable to post my part tom.. so I m posting it today...and don't think I m not here so ll not read ur replies plz reply..i ll wait for them…

PART 3…

Prem entered in d mandir and saw heer doing the pooja…and waz so happy seeing her there…

Prem: (thinks) Oh god!!!!!!!!! She is just tooooooo cute and adorable and beautiful and what do I say to describe her... she is d one wid whom I ll live my whole life… she is d one wid whom I ll share my happiness and sorrows…no...Not the sorrows...only happiness...she deserves every happiness on this earth… she deserves to be worshiped… and she WILL BE worshiped… by my love… she is d one wid whom I ll live my life…I ll put everything on her foot b4 she asks me for it...I ll be the one to whom she ll share her sorrows and I ll try my best to make happy…she is just an angel…oh!!! I m crazily In love wid her..she is..

Prem waz just staring at her then gaya3 says…

Gaya3: what r u waiting for prem… lets go…prem..PREM…

Prem: ya mum coming...

Gaya3: hurry up…what r u doing???

Prem: ya mom…cuming…

Then he enters the mandir and sees heer praying…her eyes were closed…and her hairs were touching her face due to strong air…she was looking like a angel in disguise…

While he waz staring at her he felt that a song waz playing in his heart and the words were sung by his eyes...the song was…

Tum Meri Aarjoo Ho, Tum Mera Pyaar Ho

Pal Pal Kiya Hai Jisaka Woh Intzaar Ho

Puchho Na Kitni Shiddat Se Tumako Din Raat Main Chaahata Hoon

Apani Duwa Mein Rab Se Hamesha Main Tumako Hi Maangata Hoon

Tumako Maangata Hoon

Dil Na Dukhaaoge, Ab Dur Jaayoge Na

Tumhein Kasam Ki Hai Kasam Jaan-e-jaan E-jaan

Iss Dil Mein Tum, Tum Hi Samaaye Ho, Dil Mein Samaaye Ho

Prem waz toooooo busy staring at her that he not even noticed that his mobile waz ringing…then gaya3 says...

Gaya3: prem??? PREM (she shouts and prem cums to d reality)

Prem:haan.. han ma..

Gaya3:what ma..???ur phone..

(he waz too busy in watching heer's beauty that he waz totally confused what to do… either watch heer

Or listen to gaya3)

Prem:haan ma kya hai…

Gaya3:tera phone baj raha hai paagal..kaha dhyaan hai tera…

Prem:ma wo..wo kuch nahi ma..aise hi…

Gaya3:aise hi..??? jaldi phone utha warna cut ho jayega..

Prem: ok..(he picks it up..)

Gaya3: jaldi baat karke pooja karne aa jana mai ja rahi hu..…

Prem:ok ma..(He thinks)- dekhun to kon hai kabaab me haddi..

Then he says *hello* and it waz preet who called up… And listening to his voice he turned at the opposite side of heer and he thot…

Prem: (he thinks)OH ye to haddi nahi HADDA hai…wo bhi bada wala..(lolz)

Preet: what r u doing bhai…

Prem: (he thinks again)ab ise kya bataaun mai kya kar raha hu.. hayyeee

Preet: y r u not speaking bhai…

Prem: array lemme say sumthing.. u r only saying.. lemme talk too..

Preet: ok.. say..

Prem: what do I say??? U have called u…p u say…

Preet: bhai gussa kyun hote ho…

Prem: arre gussa kon ho raha hai... Just tell me y u called up…

(while saying this he again turned to heer..and her dupatta flew on prem's face and he waz enjoying the dupatta that he forgot that preet waz calling him..)

Preet: aap ghar kab aa rahe ho…(prem waz not listening) bhai aap kab aa rahe ho…

prem then cuts off his phone...and slightly removed heer's dupatta from his face…and saw heer cuming towards him to take the dupatta…he waz so delighted that heer is cuming towards HIM…and he took her dupatta in his hands..

Prem: (thinks) haayyee… (sighs) ye aise hi mere paas aaye to mai humesha isse dur rahun…

Heer then cums towards him and asked for her dupaata but prem waz not responding as he waz tooooo busy in staring at her…

Heer: hello…HELLOO (prem cums to d reality then..)

Prem:han..

Heer:ji mera dupatta to de dijiye..(she feels lil bit shy..)

Prem:oh.. haan ye lijiye..

Heer: thank u...waise maine aap ko kahin dekha hai…(she waz trying to remember but she waz unable to think where they have met…and mansi cums…)

Mansi: arre!! heer he is d same person who gave u water that day..

Prem:ya I m d same person.. (Blushes)

Heer:oh.. hi I m heer…

Prem:I noe..

Heer: ji????

Prem:I mean.. I m prem…

Heer: oh..

Mansi:hi I m mansi…

Heer:aap bhi yahan pooja krne aaye hain..

Prem: obviously mandir hai to pooja hi karenge na…

Heer :oh haan...silly me…to aap apni mom ke sath aaye hain…

Prem:haan aapko kaise pata?? (he wonders)

Heer:bcoz she is shouting ur name from back…

Prem:oh god mom…???

Heer:ok bye…

Prem:bye?? Par abhi to hum mile hain..

Heer: ji kya???kya kaha aapne??

Prem: ji kuch nahi..bye…

Heer leaves and prem continuously stares at heer… Gaya3 shouts again..PREM….and he goes to her by thinking…

Prem: ek bhai hai jo use dekhne nahi deta aur ma hai jo baat nahi karne deti... Oh god!!! Help me…

Then they do all the pooja and prem runs for office… In the office prem yells at the manager…

Prem: u have not appointed a secretary yet…

Manager: but Sir I already have a secretary…(makes a innocent face)

Prem: shut up!! Not for u… for me…

Manager: ok sir I ll appoint today only..

Prem: gud...now leave…

Then prem leaves to have a coffee…

Waiter: what can I get u sir..

Prem:one coffee wid no sugar

Waiter: sure sir.. just a min..

Prem:thank u..

Then the waiter brings the coffee and prem starts to enjoy it and suddenly saw heer walking at the corridor and stares at her…after sumtym she disappears as it waz his imagination and he asks a waiter..

Prem:hey waiter…

Waiter: ya sir..

Prem: can u see a girl there…

Waiter: there??? No sir…

Prem: are u sure…look harder…a girl in a yellow dress…

Waiter: sorry sir… there is no1 in yellow dress…

Prem: it's ok…

Then he paid the bill and started to walk again…and suddenly he saw heer in a room and stopped…then he walked in the room and asked…

Prem: heer???? Are u heer…?

Heer: ya prem…I m heer

Prem waz tooooo glad to noe she waz there in REAL….(lols)

Prem: tum?? Tum yahan kaise….

Heer: wo mai yahan job ki khoj me aai thi..

Prem: ok cum I ll take ur interview…

Heer: ok..

Prem sees that she is orphan...and feels rele very bad..

Prem: u r an orphan..

Heer: (she becums sad) ya I m a orphan

Prem: oh I m so sorry wo mujhe aise nahi puchna chahiye tha.. I m sorry..

Heer: its ok…

Prem starts to take her interview…and while taking the interview when heer waz very nervous and she waz seeing outside d window he stares at her and his heart starts singing again…

Dekhe Bagair Tumako Aata Nahin Hai Karaar

Ji Chaahata Hai Tumse Milane Ko Baar Baar

Deewaanagi Ki Had Se Bhi Aage Jaana Gujarana Jaanu

Dekhi Khudaai Seh Ke Judaai Main (tanha Mar Na Jaanu - 2)

Dil Na Dukhaaoge, Ab Dur Jaayoge Na

Tumhein Kasam Ki Hai Kasam Jaan-e-jaan E-jaan

Iss Dil Mein Tum, Tum Hi Samaaye Ho, Dil Mein Samaaye Ho

Tum Mere Ho, Bas Mere Ho, Mere Hi Ho

Then heer sees this and smiled to him and he came to reality…and finally gives the job to her…

Prem: congrats u r perfect for d job of my secretary…

Heer: oh thanku sir but can I ask u sumthing…

Prem: sure y not…

Heer: ye job aapne mujhe meri qualifications ke hisaab se di hai na… mere orphan hone ki wajah se to nahi…

Prem: no..no… not at all ye job aapko aapki qualifications ke hisaab se hi mili hai…

Heer: thanks..thanks alllooottt… to mai job kab se join karun…

Prem: jab aap chahein…

Heer: ji???

Prem: I mean aaj se han a se jab aap chahein…

Heer: ok I ll join from tomorrow…and now I have to see mansi too…

Prem: oh is she here too..

Heer: ya she has applied for a job too…

Prem: ok…

Heer: ok bye sir…

Prem: ok babye…

Till now prem waz in luv wid her beauty only but now he waz proud of her honesty too…now he felt that he waz in the top of the world… in the seventh heaven…he waz toooo happy that the gal he always wanted to meet is going to work wid him…everyday…he waz just imagining how it wud be and waz blushing…and then preet enters and waz in panic condition…

Preet: bhai???

Prem: Preet????

Preet: bhai …aap kahan hai…

Prem: u and OFFICE??? Shocking isn't it…

Preet: oh bhai stop joking and listen that who is coming…

Prem: who…

Preet: TAPISH…

Prem: what?????????? Tapish is cuming…(he waz tooo happy to hear it)

Preet: ya…tapish..

Prem: when?? I mean when he is cuming…

Preet: today…

Prem: AAJ???

Preet: ya aaj..

Prem: aur tu mujhe ab bata raha hai…

Preet: bro maine aapko call kiya han a…

Prem:haan to..bataya kyun nahi..

Preet:kitni koshish ki batane ki but aap hi najane kahan khoye hue the..

(Listening this prem waz imagining heer again…and waz blushing)

Preet: oye hoye.. bhai… y r u smiling…

Prem: no..nothing..just like that…

Preet: Oh!! Just like that??? Aise bhi itni achhi smile aati hai kya… aur aap kahan khoye hue the…

Prem: kahin nahi yaar…wo aise hi mandir gaya han a to pooja kar raha tha…is liye…

Preet: ok …

Prem: (thinks..) thank god isse kuch nahi pata chala warna ye to mujhe puch puch ke paagal hi kar

deta…aur phi rise batana hi padta…

Preet: bhai kahan kho gaye phir se…

Prem: kahin nahi bol na…

Preet: bhai lets arrange a party for him..

Prem: for him?? For whom? (he waz in thots of heer again)

Preet: OH god kya hua hai aapko …tapish bhai ke liye aur kiske liye…

Prem: oh haan…tapish ke liye..

Preet: bhai kya hua hai aapko…i think u need a psychiatrist…

Suddenly prem saw heer from a window of his cabin and she waz with mansi and he again stares at her and he waz again lost in her beauty…and preet waz confused now…so he asks…

Preet: bhai??? Do u agree wid me…

(Prem waz seeing heer so he waz unable to hear the advice of preet to consult a psychiatrist and to ignore him he says yes…)

Prem: ya I agree… (Now preet's jaws fell on the ground hearing this shocking answer)

Preet: u agree wid me???(Asks shockingly…)

Prem: ya …I agree..

Preet: what?? Bhai??? (Then prem waz lil bit gussa and turned to preet's side)

Prem: ya I agree that we shud throw a party…

Preet: (totally shocked) bhai maine aapko kya kaha aapne suna????

Prem: haan suna..

Preet: kya suna aapne???…

Prem: u said that we shud throw a party for tapish..

Preet: uske baad kya kaha maine WO aapne suna…

Prem: uske baad??uske baad..(Prem waz totally confused..)

Preet: bhai aapko pakka kuch ho gaya hai… (Hearing this prem said in his mind…*ya mujhe pyaar ho

gaya hai…heer se* and preet waz wondering ke uske bhai ko kya bimari ho gayi hai ki wo baar baar kho se jate hain…)

Preet: bhai aap thik to hain na..

Prem: haan I m all rite..

Preet: to phir aap aise kyun keh rahe hai…

Prem: (now prem waz loosing it…) mai kya keh raha hu??? Tu hi hai jo bak bak kiye jar aha hai..

Preet:kya mai bak bak kar raha hu..u r impossible bhai…kya ho gaya hai aapko…???

Prem:preet tu abhi ghar ja mai baad me baat karta hu tujhse… (he ignores him)

Preet: ok its better for me too…agar mai yahan ruka to shayad mai bhi paagal ho jaun..

Prem waz still confused ke what the heck preet waz talking abt…he waz lost in the thots of heer that what preet said he waz not listening to him…and preet waz wondering that prem has gone mad and prem waz wondering that preet has gone mad..(LOLS)…

And prem again turned to the window to see heer and she waz gone…he thinks…

Prem: (thinks) ye sab logo ko mujhse kaam tabhi aata hai jab mai heer ko dekhta hu… koi mujhe heer ko dekhne hi nahi deta…par ab to wo mere sath office me kaam karegi…lets see who stops me now…

And he smiles naughtily…

"..::~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~::.."

How waz it??????? Plz do let me noe na… I noe most of u ll say it waz boring…but I wrote such a biiiiiiiig part and as my gift I need ur replies plz tell me how waz it… no worries even if they are -ve…and plz plz reply as they are my best gifts… u all are so encouraging…and ur replies force me to write more...so plz reply...i m just toooooooooooooo fond of reading them….

PARTH

Edited by Parth Garewal - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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bhaiyya muahhhhhhhhhh muahhhhhhhhhhhh muahhhhhhhhh muaaaaahhhhhhh..this was only for writing the big part okies....now now
ahem ahem..achooooooo achooooooooo.throat clogged..serious virus infection..lost my voice..my senses evrything..now shud i say goody goody things or or.......uuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmm lemme think..chalo first of all the worst part of u're ff is that it's damn addicting and am always wanting for more..so plz plz make itt such that am not addicted to it....
secondly the loose point is that it's very beautifuuly written which makes me read it again and again..so rectify that mistake.....and thirdly why u choose the apt songs haan tell me tell me....
hai main mar jawaan bhaiyyu lost in bhabhbi..aawwwwwwwwww preet bro is kabab mein hadda aaaaaaawwwwwwwwww yhis is also lacking point..u're ff is chooooo chweet so rectify this also...

ahem ahem bhaiyyu toh has lost himself in bhabhi only..badmaash not giving her dupatta...

i hope u will rectify u're above mistakes...and yes the biggest mistake of all is that it's too perfect ..so i want that also too be changed..

i hope i was the best critic 😉 ..kyun bhaiyya behna ka comment kaisa laga..

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Posted: 17 years ago
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thats very nice bhaiya and big too which helped me pass my time bhaiya i am confused u wrote in the promo that heer will refuse for the job but here she did not
anyways all over prem preet part was also too good
keep it up bhaiya 👏
Edited by tanyaaaa26 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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thats very nice bhaiya and keep up the good work and Preet and Prem parts were good! 👏
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Originally posted by: tanyaaaa26

thats very nice bhaiya and big too which helped me pass my time bhaiya i am confused u wrote in the promo that heer will refuse for the job but here she did not
anyways all over prem preet part was also too good
keep it up bhaiya 👏



she refused bcoz she thot that prem gave this job to her bcoz she is orphan but when prem told her that she got this job bcoz of her qualifications so she joined it..hope u noe now..if u have any other confusion feel free to ask me...😃

Originally posted by: atop

bhaiyya muahhhhhhhhhh muahhhhhhhhhhhh muahhhhhhhhh muaaaaahhhhhhh..this was only for writing the big part okies....now now
ahem ahem..achooooooo achooooooooo.throat clogged..serious virus infection..lost my voice..my senses evrything..now shud i say goody goody things or or.......uuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmm lemme think..chalo first of all the worst part of u're ff is that it's damn addicting and am always wanting for more..so plz plz make itt such that am not addicted to it....
secondly the loose point is that it's very beautifuuly written which makes me read it again and again..so rectify that mistake.....and thirdly why u choose the apt songs haan tell me tell me....
hai main mar jawaan bhaiyyu lost in bhabhbi..aawwwwwwwwww preet bro is kabab mein hadda aaaaaaawwwwwwwwww yhis is also lacking point..u're ff is chooooo chweet so rectify this also...

ahem ahem bhaiyyu toh has lost himself in bhabhi only..badmaash not giving her dupatta...

i hope u will rectify u're above mistakes...and yes the biggest mistake of all is that it's too perfect ..so i want that also too be changed..

i hope i was the best critic 😉 ..kyun bhaiyya behna ka comment kaisa laga..

luv atop



hey atop what do i say to u now.. i have already said everything to u ..i can just give u this...🤗

Originally posted by: Nazara

thats very nice bhaiya and keep up the good work and Preet and Prem parts were good! 👏



thanku sooooooooo musch di... u r so sweet.. i felt gud to read that u liked it..😉thankz...

PARTH

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