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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: Princex178

Nyccc part & premeer milty milty reh gaye 😆

So now they are in delhi finally
Waiting for the next update



thank u dear

yeah yeah same same city 😲

and sure thanks for ur feedback 🤗❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: AASUS

Cuty 🥳

pg 7

What Heer went to shopppign with Maahi ? ! 😲 omg😲
I guess travelling doesn't make her tired or them tired 😆
Hehe Preet's reply to his mom about Prem "Wedding se dur dur"😆

Prem went to receive the family 😲 I wasn't expecting this. 😛 Cool but then he missed Heer.
Oh well lets see how they meet next time.

Cuty fruity 🤗 my fav are your edits. And you change d font style and coloru haha so cool.

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** I mentioned to you before while writing dialogue make sure it's clear who is saying who.
It's short update so it's ok and not confusing but if you had written long this won't be clear.

for example if Prem is talking you may write like this

Prem: aap Mr.Khanna? ... etc

if he gets reply then it will b like

Mr.Khanna: ji I am ...

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Cute story hai. Lets see what happens next.



yeah sweetie heer is so active this time she shoppiholic 😆
🤗
yeah sweetie i try to write clear 🤔 and thanks for always advising me ❤️


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Posted: 8 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: lazychick.maria

Ok so Prem went to the airport but he missed Heer, who went phirse for shopping with Maahi🤣, Kiran I guess you've made her shop-aholic on purpose😆

hopefully they'll meet in the next episode!!!All are in Delhi now, meeting will be easy😆😉
I can't wait, your story is going amazing so far!!!!!

Love the siggies as well, wonderful style baby!!!!!! 😊

🤗


Hahaha sistaah yeah crazy girls always ready for shopping 😉 and hope for the best 😉

Thank you sistaah ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: tarannum6

woww Great update kiran loved it Heer ko abhe shoping jana tha :/ :p prem Heer next epi mein milege na Family Sceans are superbbb kiran and cute dailouges love it pls update next part soon



hena awww my din ka tara but no worries ur imagination on the way 😉

and thank you 🤗❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#65
Awosome and cute epi
waiting for
next update
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Posted: 8 years ago
#66

Originally posted by: tanuharshiti

Awosome and cute epi
waiting for
next update


thank you 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
#67
Episode 5

Same Day in delhi ...

Night 09:00pm

Mr.khanna and mrs. (Khanna) gone with prem to hotel ...

or heer and mahhi ju keh kr gai thi ke jaldi aajayngi nahi aai thi ..😲


Mr.khanna took the mobile and dial the number of heer's friend her name is ( Maansi)


Ring .. ring ...ring ...

Maansi: lift the call


Maansi: hello ?


Mr.khanna : hi beta


Maansi: 'Uncle' aap aagaye finally thank God mujhy daar thaa ke aap loog ni aapaynge but m so happy happy that you're here before my wedding..😊


Mr.khanna:
Beti you 're the only one friend of my daughter jisse woh bht pyaar krti hai aana tu thaa hii ...


Maansi: Yes uncle its true 😊


Maansi: by the way 'Uncle' where is my nakcharhi Heer and cute Mahhi ?


Mr.khanna: with shocked face wo waha nahi aai


Maansi: what ..? and asked the question ... 'Uncle' kya wo aapke sath ni aai


Mr.khanna: woh beta mujhy pata nahi chala and ganga ne unko permission dedi for shopping woh near to airport koi mall tha woh chali gai but now too late
i am worried about them


Maansi : uncle relax and calm down miljayngi jald (i'm sending anybody for checking there.)


In the hotel ...


Prem received a call by (harman)


Harman: hello ...?


Prem: han harman bolwhat happened now ?


Haraman: bhai apne bride ki friend ko receive kia thaa na from airport ( you received the guests from airport)


Prem: haan tu?


Harman: woh unki friend and her sister till now not come


Prem: what?


Harman: G bhaiya and her parents are worried now


Prem: reply to 'Harman' should be


Harman : bhaiya do something please ...


Prem: relax Harman (firstly i'm going for find them) han don't tell anybody here


Saab tens hujaynge ...


Harman: okay bhaiya i'm here don't worry


Prem: said to Harman' or haan send me the pics of those girls hurry


Harman: yeah okay ...

Prem started the car and start to find them everywhere ...
After some min he received a message and saw the pictures.

Prem: umm tu ye hai mahraniyan
Jinhone meri life mei bhuchal laya hua ...


Prem start to think about first girl

(Ye pehli wali tu samjhdar laagti phir b (the first one girl looks intelligent) but carelessness oh my)

and tell her self that i have to find them...



Prem : After one hour prem stopped the car (and became aggressive)

Damn it.. woh kahi nahi dikh rahi (the girls aren't not on any place.)

Prem: thinking about the way and calculating the difference from Airport to Hotel... just 15min diff and worried too about girls

and asked the question from own self (Where r the girls ? God help me please)

Then he saw the building (the building was empty)...

And think that... yhaa kaun aayega

Aur wapis jana shuru kia car ke pass (and started to walk towards car)



And suddenly a girl run towards him help me ? ...

Prem suddenly turn back

And catch the girl ' saves her from falling...❤️


Prem : saw the face of that girl

and he's surprisingly you ...

Heer: what you mean?... (you)

Prem: aap milgai oh God you're great

Heer: what...what you say ? ...and leave me

Prem: oh sorry madam hey where's your sister ?


Heer: aapko kese pata chala ? (how did you know) ?


Prem: replied her please btao jaldi ...

Heer: reply him she's safe and inside the building...

i don't care about myself ' but for my sister i am so much careful

Prem: well yeah i saw and that's good (for you mein huna) ❤️


Mujhy ta'aluq saa lagta hai apna tujhse

...ke tera huna...

ke tera huna mere dil ko ehsas de raha hai naya

kyaa maaur le aaye ye pal aab ke zindagi mei

...ke tera wajood...

Mujhy kuch apna saa lagta haai.




hope u all like the episode ...!!

Hit Like the button share your views in comments ❤️

and stay tuned with me

Edited by kksoap - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#68
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Woot and update 🥳
Oh oh the sisters are lost 😲 😭 aw
Hehe Harman again phones his bhaiyya 😆
That's sweet.
Wow Prem must b exusted searching for the girls.
And she asks for help and falls on his arms 😲 oye
And what happened to the other sis y she is inside. Heer said she is safe - wonder what thier story is hmm.

PH met woohoo let's see what happens.

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Writing is a lil more clear Kiran. Ty and you even translated for ppl so kind.
Dialogues clarity is the impt part. You're getting lot better.
Keep going.

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Beautiful edit - 2nd Shiv Mandir meeting of PH in show or more like Gaurav Heer meeting as he was affected by amnesia that time.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#69
Wow such a sweet update
Finally premeer met
Great part kiran 🤗
Continue soon !!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#70
Wohooo so finally they met😛
What a great update 👏
Keep it up dear
Waiting for the next update
Let see what happend next &
How their love story starts 😳

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