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Posted: 15 years ago
#81
awesome NEHA jiiiiiiii as u r👏
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Posted: 15 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: aishwaryagayen

me too should be added to ur pm list sweety

JO hukum..............😆😆

neha u write awesum and m too suspiscious about the man who loved heer who he can be ???/

Keep guessing............😆😆

and my god prem hihihih u portrayed him so bad but i like prem as a bad guy hahahah



Yahee tu humare problim hai ashwarya...woh borra bhii hoo tab bbhii humi achcha lagta hai 😆
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You are added...........😃😃
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Originally posted by: aditifan

awesome NEHA jiiiiiiii as u r👏
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Thank you Amna...............you are added in PM list........
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Posted: 15 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: masin

aww!! this was of course very cute..but im wondering..something really really drastic must've happened for such a turn in prem's character?!?!?! what could it be!?!? and i have a feeling we're not finding out anytime soon either -_-

You are intelligent girl samra.......Thats something very True that you are not going to find out
soon

i gtg now..but fantastic ff :D:D
please add me to ur pm list
lovee
Samra <33



Thank you samra...........................you aare added in PM list 😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: riks1

add me neha

ur ff is good




Thank you Vandy...........😃😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: yoyojazzy

plz pm me really good update



Sure i will Pm you...................

Thank you
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Posted: 15 years ago
#88


.I am just updating....😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
#89

Originally posted by: luv_kdmhmd

Oh my god neha, I hv no words to describe. You hv expressed the emotions in a such stunning way. its awesome. The way you described the pain and feelings of heer in 'first look' was just perfect

👏

⭐️

I love it, every moment of reading it. too good

Thank you Sia Rani.....😳

You have given an inttg chr sketch- lalit is a greedy man, prem was sweet and loving and now he is torturing heer to no end, even after staying and studying to be civilized being, he still didn't stop himself from causing heer harm. I understand he lost his brother but that does not mean he would infect heer with so much pain. Why could not he understand her suffering.

you will get your Answers Soon....😃


The chr sketch that you gave to manns, you made them better people caring more about their family but still heer only had a support of her brother, didn't he do anything to stop this wrong to happen.

You will get your answer soon....😃

In chapter 1 when you described that heer got cuts due to broken glasses in the room, I felt very bad for her. from the describation it looks that prem continuously beat her and keep her as a prisoner. Why does he feel so much hatred for her, he is treating her so badly.

Yes he beats her ,behaved rudely with her BUT WHY you will have to wait

For that

In flashback heer is like a gal, who is carefree, one who doesn't know what it would be like to go through extreme pain, I feel so bad for her. her love cares for her, and loves her so much,
Her love,Loves her ALOT..........😳

I don't why I hv this feeling that it is prem. It cant be a mere coincidence that both premeer were in London. I loved flashblack scene, inspite I felt bad after reading present, but then I read flashblack I couldn't stop myself from smiling at their cute dialogues, their love for each other.

Abhii tu mai kuch nahii keh sakti.........about london
and all........

Truly neha I loved it way you described it, it was very good. Now when I hv commented I hope u r no more angry 😉 Loved it, do continue soon.

Sia



Thank you.....glad you liked it.......................I wasnt angry on you..........
mai tu sirf nautanki kar rahii thiiii

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Posted: 15 years ago
#90


CLARIFICATION:- Heer was not married to anyone,in the fllashback
scene she said HONI WALA PATI not PATI.the guy in the flashback scene
will be introduced soon, as i HAVENT intoduced him.😉 And the guy who is
torturing heer is PREM.

CHAPTER 2

It was early morning Heer was sleeping in her room, sitting on floor and placed her head
on the edge of the bed.Last night she fell asleep thinking about some old GOOD days
of her life.Happy moments with her LOVE. Her room was still mess up so was she.



Prem entered pushed the door of her room open and entered her room.Prem saw her
sleeping in the same position that last night he left her.He went towards the window
and removed the curtains.The sun light which was piercing the clouds entered her room
through window. The light rays of sun made her uneasy.


She was dreaming about her Prince charming with an unknown smile playing on her lips.
She has completly forgotten where she is? What happened last night?Cause she was
dreaming the man whom she loved.


Prem saw that the sun rays was not affecting her dreams,The smile was still plastered on
her face and that angered prem.How can she smile? I hate her smile cause i hate her!!
Thought prem in his mind.He went towards the table which was placed next to bed.And picked
up the glass containing water.God Knows how that Glass remained save last night.


He splashed the water on her face.Heer quikly opened her eyes with a jerk.The image infront of
her eyes was still blurred.She rubbed her eyes to clear her vision. As her vision was clear She
saw him.She saw prem,the man whom she hated the most.she got a quik flash of what
happened last night.


Prem came closer to her "Tum shayad bhool rahi hoo,Tumhi yaha arram karni ki liye nahii
kaam karni ki liye laya gaya hai" he said rudely.Heer looked down.He came a bit more closer
to her and lefted her head up by his finger under her chin derplets of water were rolling down
her face. "Jalde se neechey ajana,Warna tumhi bohut takleef hog,phir mat kehna ki maine
inform nahii kiya tha"saying this he walked towards the door.


Before leaving prem turned back and said "Tumhare Baap ne tumhara kuch samaan
bhijwayaa hai" saying this he pushed the suitcase which was placed at the door inside.He
went from there She got up from her place and wiped her face with her dupatta.Her body
was aching she was unable walk properly.Some How she managed ttill the suitcase.
She dragged the suitcase to the side as there was pieces of glasses scattered.She sat
on the clear floor and opened the suitcase.



Inside the suitcase was her cloths and other stuffs but her eye caught up with a red Heart
shape box She stretched her hand and picked up that Box.She opened it slowly ans saw a
beaitiful white pearl pendant inside.Her lips stretched automatically seeing that pendant.It
was a gift from her Ranjha.Her Lover gifted her that pendant on karvachaut.

FLASHBACK
(continuation of Last flashback)



He was sitting on the bed rubbing his head, As The Naryal slid from heer's hand and
clashed with his Head.Heer didnt did that on purpose it was just a mistake and he knew
that but still being the naughty boy he is he was behaving like she did it on purpose.Poor
Heer was so worried for him.She was actaully tensed about him,she thought he was hurt
because of her.


She entered her room holding jug of water and as he saw her coming in he started to
scream and acted as he is in GREAT pain,she became more worried about him.she
quikly went towards him placed the jug on the table and sat beside him. " Bohut dard
horaha hai" she asked in a very concerned tone placing her hand on her head" He
nodded saying yes making a sad pout.


"Sab mere wajah se huwa hai.....Mai bhii na kabhie kabhie......" she said in between her
sobbings.she was crying.and how he was going to see her cry.He even cant toletrate her
sad face,and she was crying infront of him. Her every single tear were like an Arrow which
was landing on his heart.He loves her till no extent.


"Hey.....Heer..please stop crying" he said wiping her tears. "mere wajah se tumhi choot lag
gaye,mai bohut boore hona" she said still crying. "Mai bilkul theek hoon,dekho,mere
taraf dekho" he said cupping her face." Tum theek hoo" she said looking directly into his
hazel brown eyes." Yes, I am fine" he said staring back at her."Tu phir pehle kyon kaha ki
choot lage hai" she was still crying a bit."Woh tu mai Nautanki kar raha tha,Tumhi apni
paas rakni ki liye" He said taking a sigh and releasing her face which was cupped in his palm.



"Nautanki kar rahi thi....Mere jaan jaa rahii thee aur tum,Tum nautanki kar rahi thi" She
said angrily.Now he realised that some minutes ago he was just pretending to be hurt
but NOW he was actaully going to be hurt."Heer mai tu bas........." Before he can complete
Heer smacked the pillow hard on his head."Heeeer....." he said rubbing his head.



Heer turned her back towards him and crossed her arms aginst her chest,giving an
angry look."heer mere baat tu sunno.."he said putting his hand on her shoulder,but
she removed his hand."Theek hai tu mai jo gift tumhari liye laya tha,Woh mai wapas....."
but before he can complete she interrupt in mid.


"Gift...tumhare chakkar mai tu apna gift lena he bhool gaye...chalo nikalo....maine subih
se kuch nahii khaya kuch tu inaam milna chahiye..chalo chalo jaldi karo" She yurned back
and said to him."Waah jab mai baat kar raha tha tab tumhi baat nahii karni the ab tumhi
GIFT chahiye" he said a bit surprisingly."Hum tu aise he hai.." she said raising her collar.
He laughed and then took out a small Heart shape box from his pocket.


"Yeh mere liye hai" She asked happily."Nahii.....mere Gawoo wale ghar ki paross mai
jo Meena Mausi rehti hai,unki liye hai" he said teasingly. "Tummmmmmmm" she said angrily.
"ok ok sorry baba..ab khol ki tu dekho"He said giving her the Box. she took the box from
his hand and opened it. It was a beaitiful White Pearl pendant. with some diamond studs on it.


She was mesmerized by it.The shine of the Pendant were sparkling her eyes,
Adding more to her beauty.If she was staring at the pendant Then he was staring at her.
cause he thought SHe is more beautiful that the pendant.She smiled at him.He picked
up the pendant from the box and put it around her neck.


"Its beautiful" she said touching the pendant around her neck."Not more than you sweetheart"
he said while placing a kiss on her cheek. That made Heer Blush.


END OF FLASHBACK.

She missed him but suddenly she realised that prem had ordered her to come down
quikly.she placed the pendant back in the suitcase and took her cloths.After taking a
warm shower she was feeling a bit good.but her wounds were still aching and burning,
and there was no one to cure it.She managed to go down.


He saw her coming down stairs,wearing pure white shalwar kameez. Her wet hairs
hanging down in a lose bun,some strands of her hair playing on her face,Completely
looking like an angel.Wait.....I am not supposed to think all this.One thing is clear in
my mind I HATE HER, thought prem in his mind.


She came down and stood at a distance from the dinning table where Prem and
meher both were having there Breakfast. She was looking down while prem was
staring at her.Meher looked at the Girl standing infront of her.Some bruises and
scratches were visible on her arms and face.


Meher looked at prem and asked " Prem bhaiya yeh kaun hai" she asked looking
at Heer then to prem.Prem broke his gaze on her and said." Is ghar ki naye "NAUKRANI"
Balraj Maan ki betee"


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LOVE NEHA




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