Hamara payal~new ff~by aashifa~chp4 & part 2 added - Page 3

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Posted: 16 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: --Sarah--

Great update...loved it..it was beautiful
Prem and Heer chemistry 😍
waiting for the next update

thnxxxxx

Originally posted by: cute_17deeks

wow awesome update.....
loved it a lot....
Premeer scenes were beautiful.....such an intense chemistry☺️aww thnxx
so it is love at first sight amazing...... yup it was
wow Prem got lot of guts that he hold her..... he has but.....
a very nice ff......will be eagerly waiting for next update....
plz post next part ASAP...... great updating in like 5 minutes!


with lots of love


Deeksha


thnxx deeksha
thank you aati
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Originally posted by: 9rpatel

awesome update
love the chemistry between prem and heer
please update asap
thanks for the pm
pm me!!!!!!!!!!!!! please pm me for your next update thanks

thnxxxx both of u!!

Originally posted by: -Pooji-

hey
nice update
love premeer scenez

hey thanks

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Posted: 16 years ago
#22
chapter 4
It was early morning when Prem heard the same payal calling him .He awoke from his fantasy dream, wishing it was true ,wishing he could make it into reality .Prem was in deep thought when he heard the payal again.......

CHIN...CHIN....CHIN... the payla went again

Prem jamp out of bed and followed the sound that called him he followed it out of his room , past anyones bed room down the stairs and into the kitchen.

Prem sonly word to decribe her today would be...............BEAUTIFUL..........today she wore a purple and creamy suit, with embroidery done on it

Main mangey sii manta veh manata...............thu jhu milee jindree janata veh janata..........mainehoa pyaar a baliye pehli pehli baar baliye.............Prem sang aloud

Heer stopped dead on her feet.She understood everyword he said, blushed and looked down

Aap Ko kuch chahiye??...............heer asked prem turning her blushed red deep into a crimson blood red.

Nahi voh baas....................Heer aap ne phir aap kaha..........main ne kaha na aap maat bhulaye. Prem told her edging closer and closer as he spoke to her.

Paar..............Heer began to protest but coulden't prem had clasped his right hand over her mouth.

Prem started to walk forward gradually putting his left hand on her waist raising goosebumps on her arm there eyes locked and stayed that way until Heer bumped into the wall of the kitchen with a gasp. Prem edged a little closer cutting the distance between them. With their eyes still locked Prem asked Heer just to hear her voice...............

Mera naam kya hai???...............prem asked her and both of them did not realise his hand was still over her mouth.

Prem......Heer said although it was a muffled his name came out as clear as a bell sending a tickle down Prems spine. And the feel of her lips on his hand was soft and warm , smooth and round.

Prem smiled at her blush, he knew why. Heer became self-concience and she looked down.Prem removed his hand only to lift her chin and to place it on the other side of her waist.

Their eyes met and Heer looked, looked deap into his golden rown sunsettd eyes, they were mellow today,happy and calm. Prem drank her alcohol and felt drunk of her presence and of her eyes all of a suddden

All of a sudden prems eyes shifted to Heers lips, Prem wanted to see if her lips had the taste her eyes, the aroma of her blush the warmth and feeling of her skin. Heer not knowing what to do closed her eyes in fear and waited......................until she smelt something burning. Heer opened her eyes and had just looked at how close Prem had gotten to her in that one moment......She sniffed the air and Prem let go of her knowing she had other priorities to deal with.

Heer moved fast to the milk. The silence which was once peacefull turned into awkardness

Heer aap kya ban rahi hai??................Prem asked...........there was still that barrier of respect which needed to be maintained

Main............nashtaa banaa rahi hon.............Heer said
why is it that when ever he is around me i forget the place and time..............Heer pondered deeply

Voh kya hai naa ke main kuch khass kata hon severeh nashtaa mein....................Prem said

Voh kya hai??..............Heer desperately wanted to know his favourite or speciality!!

Halva pori!!!....................Kya aap yeh bana sakhti hai??.................Prem asked her

Voh aaj nahi ban sakhthi...........Heer said while taking out the plates that were going to get served

Thu aap aur main kaal banaa sakhta hai plzz................Prem was almost at a pleading voice

Haaa kyon????..................Heer asked him a bit comfuzzled

aisa.......main sirf madat karna chata hon............Prem told her with a grin spreading from ear to ear across his face.

oh yeh oh yeh oh yeh...............prem was joyously reciting in his head

Aap matlab Prem aap fresh hoke nichi ajiye.......Heer told him just so she could think straight while he was gone

Theek hai!!...................Prem said with a gruff..............maybe she doesen't like me i need to confirm this but do i like her??? so may thoughts were crossing prems mind as he went up to get a shower
part 2
Meher Meher.............abhi ut naa jaldi nashte ka vaqt ho ra ha hein...................No matter how hard jassi tried to get Meher up all was failing

Jassi.............ek minute....Preet said getting himsef into mischeif
I need to get her back this is the only way mohaha aha ha preet laughs evillly in his mind

Just then Preet pours a huge bucket of water ontop of meher

PREET.............................PREET........... ..........PREET......by this time thnxx to Preet all were up because of Meher's loud screaming and wailing as she was chasing him up and out everywhere

Heer didi.......Heer didi..............Heer didi BAHCHOU...........Preet hurriedly ran behind Heer while she was setting up the table

Preet Preet kya hua..................Prem hurriedly ran downstairs to find out wat happened

KYA HUA.........................PREM BHAIYE AAP NE PUCHA KYA HUA?????................................Meher shouted

Preet!!!!!...............Heer used her authority she didn't use it much bit in cases like this she had to

voh kya hai naa didi...................meher ut nahi ri thi aur jassi ne kai baar kushish ke thi..............thu mena sucha...........Preet did not finish of her sentence

SOCHA...............YA KIYA PREET BATUA NAA!!!!!...............Meher was now furiated

Meher.................Prem started to use his I'm a grown up so you better listen to me voice!

Meher ki kya gaalti hai????..............................Heer asked

Gaalti hai!!!...............Prem started off..............Voh ut nahi re thi!!!!!....................Prem started to show 'his authourity'

Preet ki kya galti hai???................Prem was enjoying this fight

Preet ki galti hai.......................us ne pani kyon penkha???...................Heer was furious now all of that shying and blushing at Prem was gone what was only there was fury until she met his eyes everything was gone. Heer felt hollow hollow on the inside as she felt she was drowning into his eyes into the sun that was setting. And all Prem could do was now look back he was trapped there her eyes held him there in that position like a prisoner spotted he was frozen just looking back

Meher.................Preet called right next to her ears sending different emotions corsing through her body..............Zaare Prem bhaiye or Heer didi ko dekho.............Preet and Meher both looked up to see Preet's brother and Meher's sister walking towards each other without looking anywhere else only in each other eyes there was only a step left to close the distances between them when Preet and Meher shouted

PREM BHAIYE..................HEER DIDI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.......................bot h shouted bringing both lovers back to the time and place that was.

Mujhe prassad lehna hai......Heer said who was flushed and made an excuse to get out of the room

Aur........aur main apni korsi paar baat tha hon...............Prem also said avoiding the question that both Meher and Preet were dying ot ask!

DINING TABLE 10 PM

Bauji mujhe jaane hai theen dino mein uni ne accept karliye hai!!!
Heer said jumping with excitement

Kaha janne hai beta?..................Lalit became curious

London vapas jaane hai chachaji.................voh aab parhai ka waqt ho choka hai!!................Heer said still excited

Arre fantastic...............Prem ko bhi jaane hai..............thum doone saat koi nahi jaate...........Lalit said

KYA???....................both prem and heer said at the same time

Both bauji's made a puppy dog face because the knew that they were gonna be safe together and the fact that they are planned to get married after they complete all studies(but those two do not know)

Ji bauji..................Both said looking at their individual fathers

AFTER 2 DAYS

CHALO CHALO.............AIRPORT JAANE HAI............DHERI HO GI!!....................Gaytri and Teji shouted up to their husbands

Ballu yaad hai huma aun dono ko kaab batana hai???............Lalit said

Ha ha mujhe yaad hai chalo aab.......................Balraaj said
hey guys thats it for now please comment and critisize all welcome
thnxxx
luv aashifa
Edited by curledup - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#23
wow another great update...loved it ..
so beautiful....
loved the scenes of Prem and Heer 😳
awee they are going to London together.... 😍 😍 😍
thanks for the PM
waiting for the next update

Sarah
Edited by --Sarah-- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#24
WOW it was amazing.
scene b/w prem and heer is gr88
hope we would enjoy their london trip😆
thanks for the pm
continue soon..
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Posted: 16 years ago
#25
HI
NICE UPDATE
PREMEER SCENE WAS AMAZING
CONTINUE
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Posted: 16 years ago
#26
hi really good concept going very well with the story.
add me to your pm list.
Edited by addiction - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#27
hey awesome update
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continue soon
pm me
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Posted: 16 years ago
#28
heyy aashifa 😃
thnx for the pm........w0o-ho0o MEEt were there..and omg they are so0o ridiculously funni ..hahaa ...luv them 🤗and thnx ..loll
hayee rabba...kya nasheeli aankhein hai prem aur heer ki...😆 ..well thats a good thing, they can get drunk w/o damaging their kidney's from real alcohol ..lmao 😆.......just stare into eachother's eyes 😍
hehe
omg !!! i luv that song..mannata ve...its so0 beautiful ..one of my fav ..hehe ....and u kno whts so0 funni ....i actually imagined prem singing that song to heer ....haye mein mar jaava..lmao0o
anyways i love ur updatee ..pm me for the next one😉 cant wait
woww...prem and heer..in london...AL0NE !!! ab maza aayga lmao
luv Rumsha
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow what a beautiful update.....
loved it a lot.....
Premeer scenes were so intense and passionate......
preet n meher little fight was really cute.....
OMG Premeer were caught red handed by Preet n Meher ..they were so lost in each others eyes that forgot abt their surroundings.....
premeer going to london together......it will be awesome....
n their marriage is already been decided by their parents.....thats great....
eagerly waiting for next part.....plz post it ASAP.....


with lots of love
Deeksha
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG!Really you have excellent Premeer scenes way better than mine's!And their going to london!Oh I wonder what they're going to do over there?😍And their marriage is already decided!Wow!I hope Premeer fall in love with eachother really soon!Anyways you're an excellent writer👏 and this part was wonderrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrfullllllllllllllllllllllllllllll!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😊
Edited by buttercup123 - 16 years ago

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