FF Rhythm part 5 page 11 31/5 no pms sorry - Page 6

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Posted: 16 years ago
#51
Hai priyo,
Read the update.So, finally got to know why Prem left Heer. But god knows what's happened to her now? Wondering who's the anonymous person who sent the letter. Well, i guess all these will be answered soon.
Waiting for the next update & Prem better be going in search of Heer. You wouldn't delay that right?
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Posted: 16 years ago
#52
Hey Priyo,
Great concept...loved the story so far.
Pls continue soon & add me to the PM list.
-Sona
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Posted: 16 years ago
#53
oh prem left heer because of akash..

stupid guy..why did u left your life????
she couldn't be happy without you...but can be happy with you in any condition...
love is unconditional

continue soon...
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Posted: 16 years ago
#54
hey, thanks fro the PM, and its really interesting, i cant wait till the next update, till then take care..
~nikki😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#55
update ur fic plzzzzzzzzzzzzz waitingggggggggggggggg asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: sugi77

hey! finally the secret is revealed😊.omg what will happen when they meet.i can't wait its soo interesting.plzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue soon yaar.

-sugi



thanks for commenting, ya we know now, why he left her. they'll meet soon I guess😳, will post soon


hi,
nice update.
so, finally the secret is out.
cont.soon.
tc.



thanks a lot for commenting...will update soon😃

hey
nice update
that's why prem left
the raaz is out yay
wonder what will happen next



hey poonam...thanks for commenting..ya the raaz is out..you will come to know the rest in the further updates...😃

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!! 👏


thnks for commenting...will update soon


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Posted: 16 years ago
#57

PART-4

Prem snapped out of his thoughts and headed downstairs for lunch.

The lunch was a quiet affair between the brother, sister as both of them where occupied with their respective thoughts.

Prem was about to get up after the completion of his lunch, when his Iphone beeped with an "you've got mail" message. He questioningly checked the mail which resulted in the formation of creases over his forehead, over ten folds,.

Jiya sensing something wrong, snatched the iphone from his hands. It was a photo attachment of him and Heer when they were about fourteen. They were wearing identical half sleeved , dark blue sweater, the only difference being the H and P embroided with Yellow wool.

A small smile touched her lips at the sight of the picture. She looked up and found out that her brother has already left. She shifted her gaze back to the mail and scrolled down further. It had a one line text message

"have you decided yet?"

"Prem beta… tu yaha hai, aur main tujhe yaha waha , pata nahi kaha dhund rahi thi." , Teji settled herself to Heer's bed and lovingly caressed Prem hair, who watching Tom and Jerry with Heer on her room.

"Kya hua aunty? Kuch karna hai kya?" Prem tore his gaze from the tv and looked at Teji.

"Ma, yeh aapke haath mein kya hai?" Heer asked pointing towards a packet in her hand.

Teji smiled and said "Mujhe tum dono ko kuch dena hai." And she handed both of them their respective packets.

Enthusiastic as they were, tore opened their packets and found their gifts.

"Like it?" Teji asked raising her eyebrow.

"Very much" whispered Prem touched by the lady's affection.

"Par hum dono ke liye same gifts kyun?" Heer asked innocently.

"Who isiliye , because both of you passed your 10th exam with the same marks"

Both of them gulped and looked at Teji at shocked. Their results were out? They passed high school? When did it come? How much did they score? Same marks? All questions were arising in their thoughts.

"Woh ma, how much did we score?" Heer asked silently

"87% , congratulations" Teji gave them a broad smile and Heer's happiness knew no bounds. Hyper active as she was always, started jumping and screaming at the top of her lungs. She ran and hugged her mother tight which her mother returned. After breaking the hug, she turned towards Prem .

"Prem we passed, with same marks, can you believe????" she screamed again and hugged him tightly.

The poor boy was at a fix at that moment. As soon as the smell of her freshly shampooed hair reached his nose, he seemed to loose all his senses. He stood theirr numb, shy and reserved as always, unable to hug her back. He couldn't explain the turmoil he was going through at that moment. Heer was his friend and both of them have been together but for the first time in his life, he felt a flutter inside his veins, an emptiness inside his stomach at her touch.

"apne apne gifts to pehn ke dikhao" Teji asked them smiling, and Heer broke the hug. Smilingly, the wore their respective sweaters and Teji clicked their picture.

He felt a weight beside him but did not look up. His face was hidden under his palms as he recalled that day when he felt 'something' for Heer.

Jiya silently kept his iphone in front of him, which he saw through the gaps of his fingers. She then placed his sweater in front of him. At that very instant he removed his palms from his face and touched the material of the sweater, His fingers lingering over the embroided P

"I think you should look into the matter." Jiya suggested.

"someone might be playing some dirty joke, that's it", he replied exhausted as he got up from his seat.

"since when you have become reluctant to the matters regarding Heer, Prem?" , she questioned him.

He stood there, without an answer, he didn't want to face her, he is nothing but a blockage to her happiness. His presence would never make her happy.

"she is fine….I guess." He concluded the sentence with heavy pauses in between. Unsure of what he is saying.

"you're sure?" she asked as she knew, Prem could sense Heer's awkwardness , happiness and everything she felt.

He didn't answer back as he himself didn't have any answers right now. Jiya pulled him to face her " I know, you are worried and there's something that keeps you away from her. But Prem atleast look into the matter. God forbid, if something really serious has happened to her and you are not beside her when she needs you the most , will you be able to forgive yourself.?" Jiya insisted.

"you love her right?" Jiya questioned him again, though she knows the answer. She was not going to let the matter get out of hands, she kept on questioning it for the umpteenth time till he uttered a yes exhausted.

He quickly took his iphone and dialed back to India to his most trusted friend

"Hey Preet…."



okkk guys..here's part 4... but somehow I feel, the story is going nowhere... should I discontinue it..???


do reply.. will wait for ur comments



Priyadarshini aka Priyo😃

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Posted: 16 years ago
#58
awesomeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey its sooooo sweet and awesome.plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz don't discontinue.entry of preet is sooo intersting plz continue asap.

-sugi

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Posted: 16 years ago
#60
hey plz don't discontinue
awesum update
preet entry yay
wow same marks

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