New FF : Jaan UPDATED (Part 4 Pg 5) - Page 3

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AmanaR thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
#21
hi tiaaz
great update!!
loved the chemistry between prem heer
oooohh i cant wait for the next updt
ugh i hate cliff hangers...lol
updt asap
Amana
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Posted: 16 years ago
#22

mind blowing updt👏. iam feeling like iam watching an thrilll film with my mouth open😲.plzzzzzz updt soon.

-sugi

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Posted: 16 years ago
#23
Hey guys sorry for the delay this is part 3.......ill try and update sooner the next time.......thanks you for all you supoort and comments......so sit back get a pepsi and chill!
Part 3
Still in Pov
Prem was only a breath close to heer's lips when he opened his eyes and jerked his head away from hers. He was still grabbing heer's hair and holding her. He brought a frown to his face and being really confused started to think while looking a heer , who was still semi- unconcious.
" Prem! what are you doing? How can you take advantage of a girl when she is especially in this state. You are here on a nother reason and this girl was delaying that. He had taken trouble and precious time to save her. He was supoose to be frustrated and angry with Miss Whoevere-she -is.....but was it that he was not feeling a touch of that at all.........what was he feeling was a pull towards her......he flet he knew this stranger and being so intimate with her all of a sudden a second ago was not just merly a attraction but also very natural....his mind had shut down at that moment and only his heart was ruling.............WOAH WHERE DID THAT COME FROM!!! who was she to rule his heart...for god sakes he did not even know her...he had t take matters back into his arms.....i mean hand.(prem corrected himself)!"
Prem took a handful of water from the pond beside him and splashed it onto heer's face. He could see heer groggily opening her eyes. He had already let go of her hair but was still holing her. Then when heer opened her eyes she first smile and digested her surroundings.....damn he loved that smile!
Then she started to mumble......."WOW! Mein swargh phohoch gayi! Thank you baba ji! Waise toh mein janti thi mein swargh mein he jaogi''.......
okie....prem thought.........what in the rhino's world was she talking about? then she notice the person holding her....
" Bagwan ji! wow bagwan ji app toh bare he handsome ho....! Aur kafi mordern bhi. Nice to meet you ...im heer ......app toh jante hai na ....mein bhi kitni pagal hoon."
Prem let go of heer and started to think and start at her in shock and with a confused look on his face..." okie....this is weird.....what was wrong with her ......did i happen to hit her head while getting her into the cave....?'' Prem mused over that thought?
" Bagwan ji bakisab toh theek hai lekin yahaan itna andhera kyu hai....i mean kafi romantic toh lag raha hai par flimo mein toh hamesha swargh ko white white dhikaya jata hai...yahaan pe black v\black kyu hai.....? App ne jya swrgh ko naya naya renovate kiya hai?" Heer asked jokinly.
Prem finally got it! She was thinking she was dead....hahax ... he wanted ti laugh ......she had a good sense of humour......she talks to god with so much ease? That was odd to see. More liek as if good was her best friend or something. Prem liked it. But he had to break the ice to her that she was not in swargh and he was not her bagwan ji!
" Ji app swargh mein nahin hai....app zinda hai....mein bhaagwan nahin balke woh insaan hoon jisko apne bhehoosh hone se phele dheka tha."'
First heer nodded her head like he just told her dinner was ready. Then she stoped suddenly turned to prem slowly and pointed a trembling finger to him with shocked filled huge opened eyes..
"Aa.....app woh hoo!''
"Jee haa mein woh hoon jisne-"
Prem never got to finish as he saw heer stood and ran to a corner of the cave screaming! Prem knew her scream could attract teh wrong crowd,,,he when after her and cornered her to a cave wall and covered her mouth. He ws shocked why had she reacted like that .....he got annoyed and started scolding her.
"Kyu chila rahi ho...Kya hua!" prem wispered to her angrily. Heer Pushd his hand away from her mounth and pushed him away rom her.
" Tumne abb taak mujhe mara nahin......kya tum mujhe uthakar hi marna chahte teh......Are tumhare seene mein dil hai ke nahin......mein jaanti hoon marna aahsaan nahin hai aur mein toh pheli baar marne wali hoon ......mere paas koi experience bhi nahin hai.....taras nahin kah sakte the mujhepar.....bahooshi mein nahin maar sakte the mujhe......now i would have to witness my death. Damn you ...you..you....er....Mr....mr....Mr I-kill-people-when-they-are-awake!"
Prem laugh from inside she thought he was a killer and this is how she talked to killers...........this girl had great comedy timing....rare for a girl whom looks like her......but this was no time for comedy they were in danger and he had to calm her down before the real killers come.
"Dheko mein tumhe marna nahin chahta....meine tumhari jaan bachayi hai.....aur mein tumhe marna nahin chahta hoon.....dheko woh gunde abhi bhi ass paas hai aur agar tum aise hi chilaogo toh woh sach mein akar hamein mardeenge!.......so please calm down for now...."'
"sach?'"
"' Haan trust Me"' She looked deep in his eyes from the distance they were standing. He knew she were reading them and he knew she was good at doing that. But something about her staring at him like that were making him hurt to cross the distance and touch her again.
He saw eased. She Started jumping up and down like a kid and speaking softly...."Oh thank god......thankthankthankthankthank you Baba Ji.'' Then she sighed and looked a prem.
" Im sorry ....woh mere overreact karne ki bohot purani adat hai.....dont mind ah..Bohot buri adat hai''
Hmm so a girl who admits her mistakes easily......okie she was not rare......but very very very rare....prem was impressed!
"' So Mr knight-in-the-shiny-armour....aapka naam jaan sati hoon..?''
Prem smiled...." mera naam Pre--"
Just then prem heared someone entering the cave.....he foze and turned to see a Heer with wide eyes filled with fear.....
Okie guys that was part 3......hope you guys like it.......plz comment if you do.........till the next update....take care keep smiling ...! Chao!
Love Tiaaz
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Posted: 16 years ago
#24

hey thats soooooo funny and cute😆.i luvvvvvvvvvvvvved it.

really u r a cool😎 writer as well as thrill. lage raho....... yaar

eagerly waiting for nxt new experience.

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Posted: 16 years ago
#25
hey..OMG!! wat an update..loved it!!! i lloved heer's comic timing..😆.superb,loving prems reaction too...oh gosh who entered the cave????? man we have to wait for another.update. do update soon...and take care..
~nikki😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#26
hey,
i read ur ff.
it was awesome.
cont.soon.
take care.
tiaaaz thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#27

Originally posted by: sugi77

hey thats soooooo funny and cute😆.i luvvvvvvvvvvvvved it.

really u r a cool😎 writer as well as thrill. lage raho....... yaar

eagerly waiting for nxt new experience.

Thanks yaar.......ur comments means alot to me so please keep commenting...
Love
Tiaaz
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Posted: 16 years ago
#28
omg luved it cant w8 to read more luv heer in dis ff shes got afab personality
prem already fida cant w8 to see wt hpns next
thank u 7
update sooon
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
tc
tiaaaz thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: ~nikki1992~

hey..OMG!! wat an update..loved it!!! i lloved heer's comic timing..😆.superb,loving prems reaction too...oh gosh who entered the cave????? man we have to wait for another.update. do update soon...and take care..

~nikki😳

Thanks nikki......ill promise to update sooner thanks and take care
tiaaaz thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#30

Originally posted by: zaibun

omg luved it cant w8 to read more luv heer in dis ff shes got afab personality

prem already fida cant w8 to see wt hpns next
thank u 7
update sooon
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
tc

Thanks alot and ill meke it more interesting in the next update.
I thought of making heer comic a little as it will make her more brighter ......glad you liked it.
Love
tiaaz

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