FF: The Hitchhiker: Part 9 Page 19: April 7th

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Hi Guys, I'm starting a new FF on Prem and Heer obviously!! It's called 'The Hitchhiker' Here's part one, I'm hoping you all like it. I'll try to update every week, I hope I get a good response!! Can't wait to read your comments on the first part!!

PART ONE

The rain poured heavily tip tapping on the sidewalk that she stood on. Covering her head with her jacket, she shivered as the chill spread through her body. She stood alone, the road deserted, not a single car drove past. She couldn't go back home, not after everything that had happened, not after everything she had had to endure in that hellhole. Her life was now about her and her only. Protecting herself was the number one priority.

All of a sudden, her eyes caught the sight of a distant light. 'Yes!!' she thought, extending her arm and putting her thumb out. 'Please stop, please stop' she muttered, as the car drew nearer and nearer, the light causing her to squint her eyes.

No luck, the driver paid no attention and drove off speedily. 'What an a**!!' she shouted after the car, not like it would do any good. Stepping into a big muddy puddle she swore under her breath.

'Don't I have enough problems??!! These were my only jeans!! URRRRGH!!' she shouted, trembling as the rain showered more rapidly. Her hands felt numb and were beginning to turn purple.

'Are you okay ma'am?' a voice pierced through the air, causing her to turn her head around so fast that she almost felt she had sprained her neck. She stared at the man sitting comfortably in the car. 'What the?? This guy came out of nowhere!!' she thought.

Apprehensively, she opened her mouth to speak. 'Ummm, yes, I ummm...needed a lift...' she stammered.

'Where to?' he asked simply.

'ummm...Mumbai' she answered.

'Get in. I'm going that way too.'

'Really?? Ok, thank you, I really appreciate it' she said quickly, pulling her backpack off her shoulders and taking a seat at the back of the Mercedes car. 'This guy looks well-off, look at his car- my goodness, look at the suit man!!' she thought as she sat comfortably in the warm leather seats, However, an odd inkling of fear spread through her body, causing her to shudder.

'Am I doing the right thing by getting a lift from a strange man that I don't even know? What if he tries something with me!! No, no, he looks alright; I don't think he'd do something like that!! Bagwaan, protect me please, you're the only support I have now!!' she thought, closing her eyes and letting her head fall back on the headrest.

Unknown, two eyes were watching her from the rear-view mirror.

What did you think?? Hope you like it- will reply to comments soon!! Love Zahra xx

PART ONE: Page One
PART TWO: Page Two
PART THREE: Page Four
PART FOUR: Page Six
PART FIVE: Page Eight
PART SIX: Page Eleven
PART SEVEN: Page Thirteen
PART EIGHT: Page Sixteen
PART NINE: Page Nineteen
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow that was a great update,like the new story and then what about ur other ff aren't u continuing it???????????heer in a jeans hoping their journey becomes some magical and lovely that they fall in love
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Posted: 16 years ago
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^^ Hey, thanks for reading, I'm glad you liked it!! Yes, I am still continuing my other FF, so I will be doing two FFs at a time, lol!! Hopefully I will be able to manage them both!! Heer in jeans, lol, yeah she wears both Western and Asian clothes in my FF. I do hope to make it a magical journey of Prem and Heer!! Thank you!! Love Zahra xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey, awsome start.. very interesting.. is this stranger our sweetheart Prem??? update soon..take care
~nikki
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
great start...I like the title...very unique. continue soon 😊
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Originally posted by: ~nikki1992~

hey, awsome start.. very interesting.. is this stranger our sweetheart Prem??? update soon..take care

~nikki

Thank you!! You will have to find out if it is Prem or not!! I will try to update as soon as possible!! Love Zahra xx

Originally posted by: Ghia

hey
great start...I like the title...very unique. continue soon 😊

Hey there- thanks for reading, I'm really happy you liked it- I tried to make it as unique as possible, will try to update soon!! Keep reading!! Love Zahra xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hi, awesome ff. keep going.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ooh ooh ooh! I have a hitch-hikers thumb, just learned it in biology. But I guess most people have a hitchhikers thumb. 🤔

Anywayy... I loved how you started off with the rain, and then mentioned the girl, which I think is Heer... and I hope the guy is Prem. I wonder what the girl ran away from, and why she's going ot Mumbai. Aww... poor girl, she only has one pair of jeans... thats sad. I wonder if Mr. Stranger's going to help Heer, or be more of a trouble.

Continue soon Zahra! Can't wait!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Intellienough

awesome start...keep going

Thank You- I will update tomorrow!! Glad you liked it!! 😳 xx

Originally posted by: bd670816

hi, awesome ff. keep going.

Aaaawh, you will get the next part tomorrow, thank you for the encouragement!! 😃 xx

Originally posted by: kimmu

Ooh ooh ooh! I have a hitch-hikers thumb, just learned it in biology. But I guess most people have a hitchhikers thumb. 🤔

Anywayy... I loved how you started off with the rain, and then mentioned the girl, which I think is Heer... and I hope the guy is Prem. I wonder what the girl ran away from, and why she's going ot Mumbai. Aww... poor girl, she only has one pair of jeans... thats sad. I wonder if Mr. Stranger's going to help Heer, or be more of a trouble.

Continue soon Zahra! Can't wait!

Kimz!!!!!! Glad you popped by to my FF! Yep, we all have hitchhiker thumbs 😆- did u know, it is legal to ask for a hitchhike, but illegal to give a lift to a hitchhiker, lol!! I know, random, but I thought I'd just add that in, lol!! I'm so happy you liked the first part, I will post part two tomorrow!! You will soon find out why the girl is running away, and whether it is actually Prem and Heer- don't worry, I won't disappoint you!! Keep reading!! 😃 xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
awesome start! loved it totally!. can u plz pm me when u update??
thanks
anupama

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