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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey, here's part two, hope you guys enjoy it!! Can't wait to read your comments on the part!! Even if you have negative comments, feel free to tell me, it will help me improve!! xx
PART TWO
Silently, he absorbed her image, taking time to acquaint himself with her eyes, her nose, her lips. She looked…what was the word??...Different. Not like anyone else he had seen. There was something about her that was different, yet at the same time it was something familiar, something warm.

Her long, silky black hair flowed in waves over her shoulders, whilst her lashes casted shadows on her cheeks. Her skin glowed like a pearl and her cheeks had a tint of pink. Her lips were a dusky strawberry, pouting, as if reflecting her melancholy.

'What am I doing?' he thought, focussing his eyes back on the road. What if she noticed him staring like a weird obsessed psycho? Shaking his head, he stretched his fingers, whilst his palms remained on the steering wheel. He let out a big sigh.

It was going to be a long journey to Mumbai. It would take almost a 5 hour drive to get there. 'Did I do the right thing by giving a lift to a strange girl I don't even know? No, no, she doesn't seem like that kind of girl, she looks pretty decent' He thought, surprised over the coincidence that this girl was going to the same place as him.

Fate- yes that's what it was- fate had led him to where she was, fate had given him the chance to help her- clearly she was in trouble. The running mascara, messy wet hair and dirty clothes had compelled him to stop for this lonely, helpless girl.

Was that the only reason though? Maybe the fact that he wasn't happy in his own life; therefore he was always taking the responsibility of solving other people's problems on his own shoulders. He was unable to do anything right for himself, so why not lend as hand to others? Isn't that why he had gone so far away from home- to do what he always did? Running away from his own life to immerse himself in other's lives was something he was best at.

Slowly, she opened her eyes. She did not realise that she had fallen asleep, and suddenly realised that it was not a dream, and that at this very moment she was sitting in the car of an unknown man. Daylight seeped through the windows, as the sun began to rise in the distant.

'Morning' he said sweetly, looking at her through the rear-view mirror.

She gave an awkward smile and said the same to him, staring out of the window at the rice fields that they drove past.

'So what were you doing in the middle of the night hitchhiking? In this weather as well- don't you have family to be with?' he asked.

'I don't think it would be right for me to talk to a stranger' she stated uncomfortably, playing with her fingers.

'Ohhh' he started sarcastically, 'So it's okay to get a lift from a stranger, but not okay to talk to them??' he said, whilst letting out a small laugh.

She remained quite, swathed in her dirty jacket, impassively staring at the speeding landscape. Though she wore no expression on her face, he could tell that she had gone through something somewhat…tragic.

'You know- there's still about four hours before we get to Mumbai, we've only just passed Pune- you can't just stay silent all the way!' he said, smiling.

For some reason, he was fascinated by this mannerism of hers. But, sooner or later she would talk to him. He smiled at himself and ran his fingers through his hair.

'Okay, you're wish' he said simply.

After a drive of an hour spent in awkwardness and quietness, he spotted a service station and decided to stop the car there to rest, eat and top up the gas in his car. He broke the silence between them.

'There's a gas (petrol) station over there. I'm gonna stop and refuel- my car AND myself!' he said, as he slowly pulled over into the station.

Getting out of the car, he began filling his car with gas (petrol). After topping up his car, he went and opened the back door and extended his hand to her.

'I'm going to get something to eat-Did you want to come for a bite- you must be pretty hungry?' he asked kindly.

'Ummm. No thanks, I'm okay. I'll just wait here.' She said without looking at him.

'Okay, whatever- but I'm hungry so I'm going to get something to eat' he said.

She watched as he turned away walking towards the fast food restaurant built in the gas station. She sat alone in the car, whilst placing a hand over her grumbling belly.

Ok, how did you find it? I will soon reveal why the girl ran away from home and who she actually is- But obviously you've guessed it, lol!! Will try to update soon!! Love Zahra xx

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Posted: 16 years ago
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yay!...I am first. it was awesome. Cute and funny at the same time cant wait for the next part. update soon 😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesum update
loved it
so heer is hungry too
soo cute
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey, awsome update.. i think the girl is heer..rite?? anyway,,, update soon, and take care,
~nikki
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey!

I just read both parts of your FF
and its awesome!
So the girl "Heer" ran away from home...can't to find out why!
xXx
Sunayna
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Aww Zahra, that was such a cute part. I loved how you described "Prem's" character, helping others out to get away form his own misery. That was really sweet. So now, they both have somthing miserable in there past... Hmm that really connects them. I wonder why "Heer" is so distant from "Prem". She shoudl give the stranger a chance... *cough* to win her heart. *grins*

I love how the story's shaping up. Can't wait to know more! Continue soon.

kimz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Amazing start.i loved your previous FF.I hope this will be also the best.Update soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey awesome update!!
yeah i think its Heer and the guy helping her is Prem and she is either running away from Rishabh or Manmeet.
Well gr8 gng...
do continue soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ghia

yay!...I am first. it was awesome. Cute and funny at the same time cant wait for the next part. update soon 😊

Thankoo!! Yeah I tried to put a positive spin on things, adding a bit of comedy as well as sadness!! I will update soon!! xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: pooji123456789

awesum update
loved it
so heer is hungry too
soo cute

Glad you liked it!! Yes, she is hungry too but hid it from 'the guy' 😆 as she felt awkward!! Keep reading!! xx

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