FF: Hostage [NOTE- page 34] *discontinued* - Page 18

Originally posted by: rag-ran4ever

awesome...prems starting to have feelings lol...

Originally posted by: miss_hyper

loved it

Originally posted by: Pyari_Zahra

Yayayyayayayayayayay!! Okay I am losing it, but yaaaayyy- I knew it would be Kinshuk, I am so glad it is Kinshuk- he is such a cutie- I just love him!!!!!!!!! Thank you for adding him in your FF, have you been watching Bidaai lately- he looks so gorgeous as a dulha- mwah!!!! Sorry Heer, you have Prem, Ranvir is all mineeeeee!! 😆😆😆 Anyway, I will regain my senses now and give a proper comment on the update!! I really loved how you started the chapter, Prem giving himself the mental talk- reminding himself how to breath properly, lol!! Really well written!! And the bit about Heer hitting him in places he would rather she didn't have, was just hilarious!! :P Gosh, sparks are flying between these two even while she is asleep, lol, love how Prem can't really control himself around her and is getting engrossed and mesmerised by her so soon, I just love it!! It's getting really exciting now- can't wait to read what happens next, I wonder if Heer's father will meet Prem's demands as soon as Prem wants, as poor Preet is on life support now- so sad!!!! But will dashing Ranvir be coming to try and rescue Heer, thus wrecking Prem's plans? As much as I love Ranvir, Heer is Prem's and Prem's only, lol!! Great update Shabz, loved every bit of it!! xx

Originally posted by: zaibun

omg dat was fab bravo *claps*

luved it

update soon

luv ya

tc

Originally posted by: *Shifali*

Lovely FF Shabz..Amazing..Thanks so much di!😃

I really am out of words...Prem's situation with trying to save his brother seems so realistic but for that he kidnapped Heer? That was a lil...out of control!Yea I know, but I eally wanted Prem to kidnap heer and Prem would never do that so I was like ok I need a good reason...a lil whack but it works....kinda.😆

The quotes that Meera picked are Hahaha and Olaalaalaa...and the reactions you know Shabz!--such a typical shifz comment but thanks!

Amazing FF...thank oo!😊

Don't consider me one of your loyal readers...you know me...so will pop in once in a while *Hides behind a couch*Hmhmm don't worry I don;t. Drop in whenever, with whatever!😉

~Shifu
--shabz

Originally posted by: ~nikki1992~

hey, thanks for the PM. thnak god ur Boyfriend's grandfater is okay. and update wenever uc an no need for a rush.. education is important. so about the update.. prem i s feeling a pull toward heer... nice!! its like -keeche mujhe koi dor teri ore-😆. awsome update. do update wen u get a chance.. and take care

~nikki😳

Originally posted by: ~Rinki~

IM here!! 😎 yes yes be pleased 😆so pleased! thanks!🤗

tsk tsk school sucks! i feel ur pain...and congo's for gramps being released nd ur training starting again, have fun and try not to get injured too much please? yups and SAVE TE LECTURE! plz...like i havent heard it like a million times already!😆*sigh* Prem saying shit three times...wah wah! lolz, loved it! aww poor guy getting kicked by heer! 😆 haii the burning intensity he felt...😍 damn u for describing it so beautifully! *glares* hehe he's soo cute! first poking her and then picking her up *sigh* too cute! loved this part!!LMAO, I know you would, i was rememering u while I wrote the kicking part cuz i was like thats such a rinks reactio!😆

aww heh, lookie here! heer is line maarying on prem when she's asleep! 🤣 ahh too funny! but this prt was rlly sweet, how she became calm when he held her...EEEEKKK!!! the phaandooh!!! 😍😍😍 tht was described soo well, i could see it playing out in front of my eyes 😍 LMAO I know naa...phandooh...i swear i didnt plan it...it just HAPPENED!

........you placed preet on life-support now? *sigh* i am not going to say anything on this part, on purpose too! kimz knows my reason rlly well...🥱yesh i know, and im going to give u reason enough to hate the docotor....i got plans for preet...but no death i PROMISW!😊

ranvir's worry was rlly endearing, lets see wht he does now.
yupsyupsyups..lets see!

-Rinki

ps- im bored! 😆 i just wanted to say tht...after like hours of commenting 😆 idk why...hmm
go play with ur dog. oh wait. its ravs with the dog not u. ignore that😛😊

Originally posted by: Ghia

hey
that was awesome 👏 cant wait to know wht happens next...update soon 😊

Originally posted by: pooji123456789

awesum update
prem getting attractive to heer
wonder what will happen
thanks for pm

Originally posted by: sonali09

*panting* im heree!!!! aaahhh....hai! what an amazing updateee!!!👏 it was out of this world....seriously!😆😳😳

tsk tsk...*shakes head* bechara prem...heer kicking him and all....heer's bothering him alot na?!😆 ooohhh prem picking up heer and feeling so attracted to her was just......beauitfully written!😍☺️👏 their chemistry is out of this worlddd!!!!☺️☺️ (even if heer's sleeping!😆)

haila! preet's on life-support?!😲 *nodding head* shabz...this isnt fair!😆 really really hope he gets better soon!

haii....*drooling* simply adore ranvir...(kinshuk) eeeh im so happy that its him! he's such a cutie pie....but sorry ranvir....heer's already taken!😆😉

overall, superb updateee!!!!!⭐️ will be waiting for the next update!😛

~sonali😊😊😊

Originally posted by: Intellienough

i totally loved this part.Its so different from other FF.Mind blowing> i wish apna prem bhi pane show mein kuch aisa hi kare .Kitna maaza ayega.

Originally posted by: Iqra238

Awesome update!!!!...soo prem is falling for heer!!!...can't wait for the next update...plz continue soon...only when you are free!!

Originally posted by: sonu0511

hey good one...

prem will fall for heer...

this is a different ff..

loved it..............

Originally posted by: blue_girl

hi shabo.wow another super update..

prem is great brother!! kidnnaping a girl for his brother..............cool

update soon

Originally posted by: ashmii

shabooooooo!!😆😆 first of all my apologies for getting here soo lateeee😆asmoo! no problem man, it hapens to the best of us!😆

and ure bf grandfather gt discharged thats great!😃yups it is!!!

well i jus read all 3 parts of ure ff annd my mouth is still😆 it was amazingggggggggggggg!!☺️😆 seriously i love ure writing style its sooo additcing i wanted to read more n more!😲😆😆aww asma thats so sweet of you thanks!😃

hmmmm premm haiii chooooo chweeeet hes doing so much for his brother😭😳😆 heer seems like a sweet girl😆😆 and the 3rd part ufff prem fell for heeer staright awayy haiii!☺️☺️ and u described the scene with so much passion😃😆😆 i almost could jus visualise the scenee prem and heer heer sleeping and prem just staring at herrrr☺️😍 i like the way u write it in different POV it kinda shows us what each character is thinking😳😆😆 and the character ranvir as much as i dont like him i like himmm😆😆( if that makes sense😆) hes quite a humorous character😆yups prem doing htis all for preetu! *pinches cheeks* and heer is an overall sweet girl..can be a bit of a b*tch yll see what i mean soon! =] hmmmm yes tons of mixed feeling for ranvir...hopefully ull be bale to see his real side soon =]

great FF! ill try to read ure updates on time now ( im sure u knw wat i mean)😳😆😆yups now what u mean!

do update soon cant wait to read moree!!😃😆😆yeaa ill try!

do add me to the pm list i need reminding😆😆added!😆

Love Asma🤗

--luv shabz

Originally posted by: shabo24