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Posted: 16 years ago
Hello all...happy halloween!!🤗
I am glad that you all enjoyed the last chapter. It was fun wasn't it..😉
Well, lana requested that I post early...considering the trick or treaters would bother her later...😃 and fj08 said that she can't do justice to my chapter when she is sleepy...😆..and for all you readers who have been waiting soooo impatiently...enjoy!!
I am not sure if I can post this early often...I will when I can.
P.S Amana - I hope ur test went well...yeah 2+2 = 4

Chapter 16

Prem, thankfully, did not keep her waiting. His hair was ruffled as if he had been running his fingers through them more than once. His tie was loosened and his jacket was missing. Her heart skipped a beat when she saw him smile at her, to be immediately replaced with a swooping feeling in her stomach when he took her hand. "Hi," he said. "I am sorry, but would you mind waiting for a few minutes?" He tugged at her hand and they walked back to his office, her hand firmly clasped in his. Diya sighed. "Isn't that sweet? He had eyes only for her…" another sigh. Anita shot her a venomous look and strode away. Heer freed her hand when they reached his office, not looking at him. She could still feel the warmth of his fingers lingering on her skin. Wanting to quell the awkwardness, she walked over to the large window that covered the entire wall. It had a great view of the ocean from this vantage. Tiny specks dotted the horizon, fishermen returning home after a day at sea. She felt Prem come up to stand behind her and the back of her neck prickled with anticipation. "Prem, I wanted to talk…" she said turning and the words were lost in her throat. Prem was looking at her with such intensity that it sent shiver up her spine. She recognized it to be the same look he had had the night he had kissed her. What she had failed to realize then came to her now. He wanted her. He desired her…for it was desire that was blazing out of his eyes. A part of her was afraid, but she was unable to look away. Heer knew what was going to happen, but was powerless to stop it. She did not want to stop it. Her body had taken over her mind, for she wanted Prem to kiss her again. Wanted to experience what she felt in his arms again. Prem cupped her face in his hands and leaned to place a kiss at the corner of her mouth. "I have been thinking about you all day," he said softly. His thumb came up to run over her lower lip. "You are driving me crazy." "Prem…" was all she said before his mouth came down on hers. It was like instant combustion…just like last time, yet so different. That night she had been taken by surprise, but today she was ready. Her lips moved against his, her hands clutching at his shoulders for support and her eyes closed as she let the feelings take over. Heer felt his hands shift to her waist as he pulled her closer to him. At that moment everything just ceased to exist, but him. He eased his lips from hers and she opened her eyes. "This is a problem, isn't it?" he whispered against her cheek and she nodded in acknowledgement. He laughed softly and kissed her nose. "What are we going to do Heer, hmm?" Her answer was to bury her face against his throat. She felt him rest his cheek on her head as he held her close and she knew that the question he had asked was rhetorical. Heer knew that she needed to move away and put some distance between them, but could not seem to find the strength to do it just yet. The heady scent of his cologne was filling her nostrils and she breathed in deep. I can stay here forever for some reason that scared her.
"Heer…I" She never found out what he wanted to say. A knock sounded on the door. She jumped and moved away from him, staring out the window. "Come in," Prem called and she could hear the irritation in his tone. It was Anita. "I wanted to drop these off," she said pointing at a sheaf of paper. "It could have waited," he bit out. Anita's eyes widened in surprise, "But you said you needed these by four." Prem sighed and ran his fingers through his hair. "Yes…yes…fine. You can leave them on my desk." "I believe congratulations are in order," Anita said as she put the papers on the desk. Heer was mortified. She had been going to explain all that to Prem, but she had been sidetracked. She glanced over to him and saw the incomprehension on his face. "You got engaged, right…to Heer?" Heer groaned inwardly, not wanting to see Prem's reaction, yet unable to look away. If Prem was shocked, he did not show it. Instead, he walked up to Heer and put his arm around her shoulders and smiled. "Yes. Thank you." Heer was not sure who was more surprised, she or Anita. "Oh…well, I'll get going then," she said and left, closing the door behind her. "I had to say that…you see they weren't letting…" Heer hastened to explain. Prem looked down at her and said quietly, "I did not ask for an explanation, Heer." She moved away from him. "I was going to explain, anyway. What will you tell them when…when they find out it is not true?" Her voice was barely a whisper, her heart aching at the thought. Prem gave a sardonic laugh and looked away. "I am sure I will come up with something." "I…I need to freshen up," Heer muttered and Prem pointed to the door leading to the washroom. Once inside, she locked the door and leaned against it. Coming here and agreeing to help Prem had been a bad idea. Heer had forgotten that her senses took over when Prem was around. Or had she? She looked herself in the mirror and saw the flushed cheeks and the drowsiness in her eyes and was horrified. She had spent the last week essentially blaming Prem for kissing her, but what would have been her excuse today? Had she protested? Oh no, she had willingly accepted, even reveled in his desire for her. Where did they go from here, she wanted to ask Prem. Was it just a physical attraction for him? Heer was not so sure she wanted to know the answer, lest it was something she did not like.

He had almost told her that he loved her. And what a disaster that would have been, Prem thought to himself. For a moment he wondered what she would have done if he had indeed confessed his love for her. And sure enough he had no clue what she would have said. He had always prided himself for being able to read people, but Heer twisted him in knots till he was not able to think. He should have known what would happen if he kissed her. He had thought about her all day and when she had stood there gazing up at him, he had not been able to resist tasting her again. She had no idea what her innocent eyes did to him. Prem ran a hand over his face and leaned on the edge of his desk, staring out the window. Things were getting more complicated than he had imagined. His father thought that his marriage to Heer was a done deal, after, of course, waiting the three months that Heer had asked for. Prem would have married her tomorrow, if he could arrange it. All he'd have to do is walk up to his father and say he was ready to marry Heer. He was dead sure that Heer would never go against his dad's wishes. But, Prem wanted her to want to marry him…because she loved him. And there came the crux. How did you make someone fall in love with you? You couldn't. He was not certain if what Heer was feeling was just an intense reaction to the passion between them or something much deeper. Given time, he would find out. Till then, he'd have to tread very carefully.

Next update on Monday! Hope you guys have a good weekend. And like always, I am eager to know what you thought of this chapter....😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey Smitha,beautiful updates I must say..I really liked the words u use to describe a situation..really good control over language which I like very much!!
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Posted: 16 years ago

Hey

i loved it!! so intense! wow, loved prem, the way u described it all, was amazing, very realistic
cant wait till next update!!! plzzzzz do it soon lol
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Posted: 16 years ago
thanks a lot smita for the early update, now i can read it with my full attention 😉
hey Smita, i have been watching nach baliye this season and in it karishma kapoor gives her fav performance three claps, i think this update deserves five claps....
it was wonderful, i love reading fiction that gives me tingles reading abt little gestures leading upto a kiss and not all of them do but ur descriptions have been perfect.... and then imagining harshad and aditi in these roles makes them 'more perfect' if thats possible and the best part is i can reread it later and still feel the same tingling...
so she thinks it s only passion, she has always lost her senses when she is near him..... the swooping feeling... see thats the difference between a writer like u and me, i cant even describe how happy i am reading ur words, people at the office are looking at me as if i am crazy but i cant seem to take the stupid grin off my face
loved the way prem handled anita and heer s explanation.... why does she think that prem could be only interested in her physically, does she not know prem??? why did prem say 'this is a problem" i mean they are attracted to each other...why is that a problem?
why is heer so afraid of her feelings for prem? does she already realise how much she loves him and thats why?? ok u know these are all rhetorical questions, dont expect u to answer them....
however, how far will this news travel thru diya and anita, that is more interesting, when will preet or harman know of prems engagement and ask him why they havent been told or meher or ash for that matter, these you'll have to get to soon :)
monday seems too far away, hope u have a great weekend and thanks again for making my friday 😃
Edited by fj08 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
awesome, smita u totally rock. ive been manning IF in the hope of seeing urt pdate. infact throughtout skool and even during my math test i was hyper bout coming home and reading ur update. u totally made my day. heer seriously needs to get her brain cells working. shes in freaking love with prem and hasnt completely realised it. and hell which womans senses would work in the presence of prem, so heer dont worry its not just you.........lol!!
smarty pants prem better do something really fast and make heer realise that shes in love with him and in the process tell her that he loved her too. ur ff is tooooooooo addictive. ican never forgo my daily read of it even if u havnt updated.
pls update with a llooooooooong part.
cant wait for monday
amana
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Posted: 16 years ago
Uuuuffff Smita, for once I am speechless, seriously I don't know where to start! First of all thank u for keeping my request! I can assure u when kids come today they are all going to get extra candies with a beaming smile! Hope they don't think I am a lunatic!
If & only if they showed in the show 1/4 of what you have written here this forum would have been renamed 'kis desh mein hai mera neend', it would be a group of zombies suffering from insomnia! Atleast I went through sleepless nights for the entire weekend after 19th June that rain drenched look while taking the towel & also after 11th September, the special almost kiss scene followed by anda therapy & will go through again sleepless nights waiting patiently for Monday because of your story. My mind will work overtime again thinking of all little little scenarios about 'what if', 'buts' & 'oh lala'! :-))
Believe me out of habit I keep checking whether u have posted or not every 1 hr every Mon, Wed, & Fri & just like that I checked today when u didn't even updated in the forum page that u have updated & I got my bonus! I read 1st time & was transferred to Lala land, 2nd time reread & went further into the middle of lala land & 3rd time rereading it there was no coming back! It was that good!
What I loved was the insight into Heer's mind. We r so crazy about Prem that even being a woman we always think from his standpoint but it was wonderful to know the instabilty of her mental state as well! Her body empowers her mind, there is no surprise there, afterall its Prem we r talking about! I am waiting for the moment when the realisation will dawn on her that she loves him! Prem thinks its a problem, then think about us Prem, atleast u r involved in this personally but we outsiders, third party, just reading & fantacising about u both have driven us to the path of disorientation!
Anita I have to say doesn't give up so easily, just to check whether Heer said the truth or not took the clarification from Prem himself & can imagine her face falling in getting a confirmation from him.
Loved Prem's 'I did not ask for explanation, Heer' when Heer wanted to explain, showed his faith & trust on her, he knew Heer wouldn't flaunt their relationship to anybody just like that unless & untill it was absolutely necessary! I just love this stage of any relationship, they both r at tenterhooks thinking about what the other is thinking, is nervous around each other, is concious of each other, is awkward to some extent......just love it. Keep this phase on for as long as u can, please! So Prem was on the verge to confess, was he? Would have loved to see Heer's reaction but then the story would have kind of ended if both of them knew about each other's feelings!
Smita I sincerely wish I knew someone in the Balaji camp, then the 1st thing I would have asked them was to get Prem back in the show & 2nd would have been to hire u as this show's creative head & scriptwriter. The show would have reached unimaginable heights by now! Each & every word projects the scene so vividly in front of ur eyes that u don't even need to see it visually & then it keeps us on our toes thinking, reminiscing, remembering about it the whole day & thinking about all possible scenarios, events that can or might occur next. U r simply tooooo good, any day u can compete with those M&B writers.
Seriously, I am not just saying it, very few fiction moves me the way urs did.
Will wait for the shopping spree now, please keep Prem-Heer in all ur chapters, other characters r good but these 2 r appetisers, entree & desserts all combined together! :-)
As usual wish this weekend will be over tomorrow & my eyes will open to Monday waiting for ur next. Just think u r that good! Just keep it up!
Again sorry for the long post, had to write it with time in hand finishing all my chores, couldn't have done justice otherwise.
Lana.
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Posted: 16 years ago
awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!!!👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
Smitha Di, loved the way you expressed both sides of the story. Both are so uncertain of what the other feels for them, and so aware of all the chemistry and passion between them, it makes reading your story all the more enjoyable. Now I cannot wait to see how Prem goes about trying to make Heer fall in love with him (and Heer being already in love with him is going to get so confused)..
Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
WoW Smita!!!Tht was splendid👏cant xpress how does it feels im sooooooooo thrilled by reading this part tht was superb.loved the way prem xpressed his feeling,If Prem could feel it then whts Her probs?Dont she felt tht she is in love with him?at least i think so,i m just waiting for tht day whn she ll realise she is in love with none other than PREM!!When ll she??if she had felt the scare to lose him then she,wont she?cant wait to read the next part oh!!!!!! Ye Monday kab ayega??TakeCare

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