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sshekar thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
wow!! smithaaaaaaaa that was absolutely fantabulous...lovd it...
felt like i was reading an M&B
awsome yaar...awsome!!
have no words...
thanku sooo much 4 dat update..
n if u give us early updtes are always welcome yaar..i am happy if u update frequently...lolzzz

LOL! i have been a huge m&b fan for years!!! it's as good uh? wohoo..thanks a lot!
more prem-heer all of next week....i am sure u will not complain....😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
awesome update loved it.hopefully by the time they solve harmans problem they confess to each about their feelings.but as always loved the update
hi there!! u are about right...and let's not forget preet....😉
but prem-heer will confess before...that i can promise.
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Posted: 16 years ago
Smitha , simply mindblowing...thanks!
a full PH part, and that too with a kiss, what more do we want...😍
i know...right? can anything be more perfect than this....????
hmmm , no we want more...😉😆
First , I loved the way Prem took Heer to his cabin...and then you brought out what was going on in Heer's mind very brilliantly...She has to be in that state as it is THE PREM passionately gazing at her...and then the way Prem came up to her and kissed her, and their little moment together...and then how the jealous Anita dropped in to confirm if her handsome boss was actually taken and loved the way Prem reacted to her and handled the situation....and finally we find out that Prem is in love with Heer and is ready to marry her any moment, but is confused about her feelings...And Heer, though is already in love with him but not sure of her own feelings is confused about his feelings towards her...
love the way your fiction is progressing and the way PH relation is progressing...this phase of their relation is very interesting- the intense attraction, passion,love, confusion and uncertainity about each others feelings , awkwardness everything....
eagerly waiting for mon...that too will be a full PH part rite?
Luv
Angie
all of next week will be full PH parts!! i am just getting u guys all stocked up 😉 for when i will have to bring in the other people stories...but there will always be prem/ heer/ premheer...so don't say i did't warn u!!😃
hope u like the next part!
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sshekar

we'll all i can say is there are lot more tingling things in store...
YES..... and its all really great that u have a schedule abt ur updates, makes it easier knowing ok mon, wed, fri.... and dont spend too much time thinking about where the story could go because a day later we know :)
we'll when prem said problem...he did not mean the attraction part itself...more so referred to his intense reaction to her and to the fact that he has a hard time controlling himself when she is near him...and Heer as much admitted to him the same.....😉
thats interesting, i didnt think about that.....

oooh...u'll find answers to all this in the coming chapters...and yes, u did get it right. Heer will be pretty soon regretting that slip of tongue...😉
AAAHHH thats going to be fun.... different side of presonalities, wonder what that could be, oh well monday is now only a day away :)


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Posted: 16 years ago
you read it 3 times?? wow! i know this was one of my favorite parts too...it just felt so natural that prem had been thinking of Heer all day and the moment he sees her he had to kiss her...and heer...brains fried to mush..😆
Smita 3 times? I have lost count of how many times I have re-read it & thought of so many scenarios about this pair in your story. Believe me everytime it seems like I am reading it for the 1st time & that thrill never even diminishes an ounce! With this nature of Prem's I can well imagine that he would just do this innumerable times even in future. He already said it himself 'given a chance he will kiss her again, so get used to it', Good for us! :-))

oh...trust me they are not confessing their love anytime soon...well i have big plans for when and how prem will say it...u are right...this is the best part in any relationship, when they are nervous and awkward around each other....

I am happy to know about this. This phase of their relationship will continue for long that is! I can imagine 2 sureshots situation of Heer's realising that she is in love with Prem. If Prem goes on some tour & as we all know 'distance makes a heart grow fonder' Heer will soon realise she is missing him in every little little things & bingo, the enlightenment will occur, she is in love & that too with Prem! 2nd option is ofcourse when & if Prem flirts or pays attention to someone of the opposite sex, Heer will be all green with J & suddenly she will realise the cause of her feeling such, yes, she is in love with Prem! This r all my work of my overwrought imagination.

Smita u can't even imagine about the innumerable scenarios that comes to my mind with these 2 in your story. Really these 2 along with u have killed me for good!

thank you...this is the highest compliment you could give me and it means a lot. i had tears when read this, had no idea that i could move u so much...thanks again.
Smita u deserve each & every word I wrote, infact more! Imagine how we all can picturise all your scenes right in front of our eyes reading ur description, u deserve all the praise! If I close my eyes & can think of only scenarios about Prem & Heer in ur story then the credit goes all to u. How they steal glances at each other in front of the family, how Prem indirectly says something in general like in response to Gayatri whether he wants to eat anything & how he will say looking at Heer 'yeah I am very hungry', or Prem making faces at Preet when all of them r going to watch some Hindi movie saying he is off to bed & just as Heer enters the room he is all glued to the couch. When Preet asks him 'won't u go to bed?', Prem's answer looking at Heer sideways 'ab neend kahan aanewala hai' & then recovering will make up something like 'ok will give it a shot with u guys',..........oh god shoot me, there is so much more that comes to my mind & u r responsible for it alongwith these 2! :-))
please...post as long as u want and as often as u want...i love to hear your point of view...believe me u gave me insight to many things i had missed that i am careful to include. i spent two days reviewing my work and making frantic changes...and i am happy with the results...u'll see 😃
aww...monday will be here soon!!

Can't wait for Monday now. Yeah keep giving all the minute details possible, just love to read & re-read all over again with scenarios popping up in my mind like mushrooms!

U r really awesome, words fall short in praising ur talent!
Lana.

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sshekar

thanks dear!!
yeah...heer is in love with prem...she finds that out at the end of the day...how...u read...😉
i hope u like all the next week prem-heer scenes.

Now u r testing my patient!!!!Cant wait to read the next Part,Heer is going to confess OMG!!!!!cant wait till monday😃ll b waiting for the update eagerly&impatietly😳TakeCare
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sshekar

wow!! smithaaaaaaaa that was absolutely fantabulous...lovd it...

felt like i was reading an M&B
awsome yaar...awsome!!
have no words...
thanku sooo much 4 dat update..
n if u give us early updtes are always welcome yaar..i am happy if u update frequently...lolzzz

LOL! i have been a huge m&b fan for years!!! it's as good uh? wohoo..thanks a lot!
more prem-heer all of next week....i am sure u will not complain....😃

yaaa definitely..its sooo good smitha..u rock!
oh..more ph next week?? thanku soooo much
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Posted: 16 years ago
Smitaaaaa :-( I'm waiting to read the update before going to bed! Yaaaaaaaaaaawn!
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hello dears! Happy Monday! 🤗
I had a couple minutes so I thought I'd post my update...for all the sleepyheads who need some Prem-Heer before going to sleep😉. And for all the wide awake ones too...what the hell!! 😃
Do let me know what you thought....

Chapter 17

Heer came out of the washroom, hoping that at least she looked calm and composed, even if that was the last thing she was feeling right now. Her eyes immediately found him, standing by the desk and poring over the papers that Anita had left. He looked up and smiled at her. "Ready to leave?" he asked, stowing the papers in his briefcase.

She nodded and followed him. Relief seeped into her as she realized that he was not going to talk about what had happened, any of it. Maybe it was the coward's way out, but right this minute, Heer felt totally inadequate to deal with the situation. They walked past the foyer and out the door when she remembered and walked back to the reception desk.

"Thank you," Heer said, "for your help back there." Diya gave her a wide smile and nodded.

Prem was eyeing her speculatively. "What was all that about?" he asked her.

"Nothing. So, do you have an idea of what you want to buy for ma?" she asked as they waited for the elevator.

"No…I am all yours," he said.

Heer looked at him sharply. "What is that supposed to mean?"

"That I have no idea what to give my mom and that I leave myself to your capable hands." He glanced at her a little too innocently. "Why, what did you think I meant?"

She turned her head to hide her smile. "Oh, let's just take the stairs," she said, tugging his arm.

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"So, where are we going again?" Prem asked Heer, as he negotiated through the rush hour traffic.

"Well, you have to pick something special. So I know this old antique shop that has great stuff. It is in…umm…Chor Baazaar."

Prem turned to stare at her incredulously. "You are joking, right? I am going to buy my mom's gift in…Chor Baazaar?"

"Oh, don't be such a snob. Everyone who visits Mumbai goes to Chor Baazaar …it's practically a tourist haunt. Trust me," she said smiling.

"Famous last words," Prem muttered. "Look, couldn't we just go to the mall or something?"

"Do you or do you not want her gift to be special or not?"

"Yes. But, Heer…Chor Baazaar? The name sounds really dodgy."

"Fine." Heer folded her arms and looked straight. "Let's go to the mall. You should have done that in the first place instead of bothering with me. I am sure you can find lots of things that hundreds of people buy everyday. Then her gift will be just like everyone else's."

"What happened to the quiet, clumsy Heer that I used to know, uh?" he was smiling when he glanced at her.

"Well you didn't really know me, did you?" she said, a little huffily.

"Apparently not," he muttered and glanced at her sideways. "Ok. How do we get there?"

The smile that lit up her face was brilliant. "Are you serious?" and smiling at his resigned expression, she directed him.

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The place was nothing like Prem had ever seen before. He could not believe a place like this in Mumbai could exist. He, it seemed, had only seen the ritzy side of the city which was a far cry from what he was looking at. The roads were bustling with so much traffic that he was amazed there wasn't an accident in every corner. Heer asked him to pull into a side street and told him to park his car.

Prem noticed a Police station nearby. Good landmark, he thought and made a mental note in case they missed their way, for he had serious doubts about this expedition.

"We'll walk from here," Heer said and got out. She looked at Prem and had to hide a smile. He looked so uncomfortable and totally out of place, in his suit and well polished shoes.

"This won't do," she told him and when he looked at her blankly, pointed at his suit jacket. "You need to take that off and your tie as well. Not at all appropriate," she said.

"Yeah, well I didn't think I'd be talking a hike down Chor Bazaar today. So, excuse me if I am not dressed for the part," he muttered as he shrugged off his jacked and yanked off his tie. "Do I take my shirt off too? I am sure I spotted a few bare chests back there. I'd really blend in," he said sarcastically.

Heer giggled. "No, you can keep your shirt on."

Prem threw the jacket and tie in the car and pulled back the sleeves of his grey shirt. Heer's heart skipped a beat as she stared at his annoyed face

She held out her hand. "Your wallet."

Prem raised his eyebrows. "Isn't this a little premature? I mean we are not married yet."

"Oh, please. Cut out the sarcasm. I just want to make sure you don't…er…lose it."

"I am not that helpless, you know." Prem said exasperated, but handed her his wallet anyway.

"I know," she said and stuffed his wallet into her purse. "Let's go."

Heer saw Prem give his car one last look, as if hoping it would still be here when they got back, and bit back a grin. He already seemed on the edge a little and now would not be the time to tease him, she thought.

She felt Prem reach out and grasp her hand. Heer saw their linked fingers and looked up, surprised. "I don't want to get lost," was all he said and tagged along with her.

Chor Bazaar was a stretch of narrow shop lined street which were bursting at the seams with every imaginable thing for sale. The tiny street that Heer led them to was off of the main road. It was flanked by rows of little antique shops that looked like musty attics that sold just about anything from old ship parts, grandfather clocks and gramophones, to crystal chandeliers and old English tea sets. Prem was fascinated, despite himself. He kept stopping to peer into one of the shops or stand and admire a Victorian armchair. Heer had to keep dragging him away, shaking her head.

"What was wrong with those coins?" he was asking as Heer pulled him away from yet another shop. This time, he had been all ready to buy a set of silver coins that the seller claimed to belong to the era of Portuguese settlement. She had refused to hand him his wallet and the shopkeeper had looked at her oddly. "He's probably thinking that I have a shrew for a wife," he grumbled.

"You'll need one won't you, considering that you can so easily be ripped off? Those coins were fake."

"How do you know?" he insisted stubbornly.

"I just know, ok?"

It had been a long time since she had been here the last time when they had moved to Mumbai, to tell Ismail chacha about her parents' death. It had been tough and she had never had the courage to come back again. She was not sure why she had brought Prem here, to share this place that was so special to her. Heer glanced up at him and realized that all through their long walk here, he had not once let go of her hand.

Next update, as usual on Wednesday! Take care!

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Posted: 16 years ago
awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggg for next asap.

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