Crumb by Crumb: MP/NA FF Pt5 Pg12 - Page 5

hey...just read the last two part...i like the way you write...going back and forward in time...also the way u describe the emotions within the characters...Its a very different style of writing...nonetheless I'm really enjoying it

Thanks 😊

Wow, really like the way you showed their emotions. I loved Ayesha's the most. Really interesting. Liking how your dealing with the PA.

gr8 part 👏 i especially love the neev/ayesha confrontation, i really feel sorry for them.

Ok this part is much more clear. I guess because by now i am used to what your characters are like and also used to your writing 😃

I love Ayesha. 😃
I love Neev. 😃
I love Milind. 😃
Prachi is still a mystery.
Can i guess that you love Neev out of all of them. 😃

I absolutely love Neesha in this FF. I think you understand Neev extremely well and Ayesha too makes a lot of sense ( 😕 ) The reasons why she does things...well she doesn't give an explanation but the way she is, you don't seem to need an explanation. I hope she comes out of her self destructive state soon.

Milind's amnesia is beautifully portrayed. His melancholy and frustration at not remembering anything...very nice. So Neev doesn't want to be friends anymore. Wonder what happened. Was it because Milind married Prachi and tortured her.

Awesome part. Loved it. I think the clarity also might have to do with the fact that its all in March 2008 😆

Till next time.
JC

omg ur FF is gr8!!! 😃 👏
love the way u skip through time! 👏 😃
i didnt think urs wud follow the same suit as kayamath but it somehow fits right in! 😃
i felt treally bad for neev and millind both seem soo defeated!! 😭 😭 😭
ayesha a witch as ever sort of surprising she has a heart (even if it is a tiny one) 😕
nice to see she does have a shred of humanity in her even if it is for a second!! 😊
i got 1 question to ask your titles for each chapter are they all lyrics from songs? cause i know chapter 3 is save a life from fray
anyway brill FF keep writing cant wait for the next chapter cont soon plz!! 😃

love ur ff...u have a very unique way of writing the characters and how they feel..
Absolutely brillaint!! 👏 👏

I think I feel pretty much like Milsi tonight absolutely dumbfounded. Thx for the great part hun atleast both timelines were in syc wat a relief. 😊 Update soon darling I like your Neev wish he'd spit out the truth in the serial too.

ok terribly late on the comment unlike the first time😆 ..but just OUTSTANDING...really. I just love the way you're writing...please update soon!! Just beautiful...what can I say? I hope you know that I mean that!! 😆 😳

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Originally posted by: devilangel

It was MP , yes. I was trying to write the almost rape scene, because I thought it was shown as really beautiful and it should've been an improvement to their relationship....I was trying to be not to explicit lol..and next time I'll add names to make it clearer :)

Thanks for liking it! Oh, and I just started reading your SP fic, and it's really nice too. (I felt a little silly commenting on how great the first part is on page 100 something so I'm saying it here lol)

Thanks for that hun...Re-Read it and felt foolish😳 lol...its o.k though! Loved it!!

and thank you for your comments...so sweet...deff not as intense as your ff but do give it a read. Pure Fluff 😆

DA...Sweetie..i really immersed myself when i read your ff..Brilliant piece...a totally unusual style of writing..i enjoyed it so much that I read the 3 parts almost 4 or 5 times...

I like the shift in timelines... 👏 👏 Very beautiful writng with a touch of the dark undertones..the subtleness of the flow is brilliant...

I hope you wouldn't mind if say that there was bit of a confusion when i read it the first time around. i had to reread it once more to figure out the correct timelines..but overall beautiful...