SS-Song of the Lark...(Part 17 Uptd) - Page 4

Sareeta,

Read that u r feeling unwell..Hope ur doing better now 😊

Read the FF..Sweetie the language is just mesmerising..Loved each and every word of it 👏

Milinds feelings for P is just so well written ..Each and every other emotion. Be it love ,or be the anxious feeling that he has for her or the lil bit of insecurity the creeps up on him.

and yes 'suniye' is reserved just for him ... 😊

Get well soon...

Part 4 updated...

@ Readers and the silent readers - I have been unable to reply to all comments, unfortuantely, as I am down in bed sick...

Do leave your comments, coz it gives me an idea of what aspect of the story , are you all able to relate and appreciate...

Sareeta, Looks like i am the first one to comment on Part - 4 😳

you have described the insecurity he feels when Neev is around with such brilliant words that it does not move away from the character of Milind. I really enjoyed the fact that he is vulnerable too and not just Prachi... 😳

When he returns from him trip and they are looking at each other...Milind's feeling that he has come home is apt. She is his destiny and his hoome.. 😊

Prachi speaking to him with her eyes and asking about him and him understanding what she is asking is awesome!! It feels like they are so one with each other.... 😃

But the insecurities and his feelings for her.. not yet understanding how to cross the threshold..That's the most beautiful part.... 😳 👏 👏

Their bedroom is their world.... That makes perfect sense as that were their private lives are held together.....

Awesome! Sareeta, you take care of yourself.. and i will wait for you post...but please post it at leisure once you get well... 😳

arre oh samba...

startin out on part 4...

crimson streak of dawn breaking into the fading night sky...i love the dawn breaking out...its a beautiphul sight. mere mann mein etched rahe gaa yeh line...each time im up at dawn..i'll rem.

her eyes on no one else but him..and still this dude has insecurities...!
kaisi ho...(dead hoon...!) ....main bhi...these 4 words are like tingly^infinity..answering her unvoiced question.
her eyes searching his, with an unmistakable glint of concern....aiyyyo...this chic is too cute man !

the one room , that had seemed to open a new world to him, a world , the belonged to him, to her… to them…. hamari duniya...so true...the room signifies somethin which no one else will be able to invade in. each corner will be filled with memories...of their world together.

khud he is marofying haan...dude...dont ! but i pyaar it tht hes so vulnerable...hes not brash and nothin affects him. hes THE man :D:D

shimmer of hope the new mornin is bringing him...nicely put..its providing some relief to his aching hrt...aiyyyoo..im eagerly awaiting..next part

ive reached all time height of craziness where im actually talkin to ur char thru my comments !!

part 5...

tere posts se zyaada lambe mere comments hai..but koi baat nahi...u have to read them...no solace phar u.

bachpana...hello...im also like this...tht doesnt mean im a kid ! she is so fascinated by the clock...and so cutely gets embarassed when he looks at her.

him lying to her...haila...pehle bolta hai der hogi..the moment she asks...der hogi...immediately...nahi...meeting cancel hogayi...lattu fella ! and hes perplexed...mujhse mill...i'll tell u why !

"main bhi na"....ammma !! uffff....su line likhech !!...bahu saras. he is so excited tht shes gonna wait for him...leaping hrt and all...aiyyo...sweethrt fellow he is yaar ! :D:D..

Part 5 has been updated .... 😊

sareeta.. hope you are feeling much better..! well.. i'm loving the whole fan fic.. Milind's perspective is a refreshing change.. he's insecurities about Prachi and Neev's friendship is so realistic..!and the way he describes thir bedroom as their pprivate world..! ah.. maar dala..! can't wait to read more..!

Sareeta darling,

How are you doing now dear??? Hope you are feeling much better dear and hope you get well soon😃.

My god...the play of words to describe Millis feelings....is just to good dear👏.....loved the description of dawn and the chirping of birds......too the cuckoo clock...the matching of the saree colur to the first rays of dawn...crimson....to his and Prachis.....bond...in which words are not necessary between these two at all.....and the way to describe their room as their own separate provate world ...where the outside ...doe snot intrude...it was just mindblowing dear....and wait to read what you have for us next.👏

Till then, take care & god bless.😃

Love

Krishna

Sareeta, How are you feeling now? Hope you are feeling much better.

The words you used to describe Milind's POV was too good. I especially liked the way he said "humari duniya".. haiii..*sigh*..

cukoo bird.. I too love cukoo bird. 😃 So janab Milind will come home earlier coz his beautiful wife will wait for him... hmmm... so sweet..

Mindblowing dear... beautiful parts.. Please continue.. 👏

Ah Sareeta you do not leave me any words hence am speechless at such remarkable perspectives .Such beautiful n thought provoking imagery from the dawn to the saree the colour wine red so dominative yet descriptive...Your stories leave me in an imaginary realm where I live, breathe and watch the same as the characters..Go through the same aspect of heart wrenching desires and warming pleasures ,to have such an effect on me the literary work shud be of a genius and am very pleased to say you are one.Just one request cud you forget Neev and Ayesha honestly I'd really love a free world for Milind at the moment where his love could soar as the lark ..... 😊 Will wait anxiously for the next part.

jaane kaise kab khaan par...ikraar ho gaya...hum sochte hi rehgaya...aur pyaar hogayaa...

parts 6,7,8,9:
all he wanted to do was see her smile..who wouldnt ?? dont blame him.

sun seeped through the drapes, shutting her eyes harder… pulling the comforter over her face … my kinda girl..sleep ko kuch bhi disturb na kare...
hes such a sweetheart...shutting the drapes so tht 'she' isnt disturbed.

on the table, and within minutes found himself lost in seemingly insignificant issues that mattered…


this line like i told u has a lovely paradoxical ring to it....found himself lost just adds to its feel...

she woke up late..and poor lil thing is so embarassed cos HE is up early and reading paper without the chai..
but meethadil tht he is...he puts her to ease saying nothin..but smiling to convey wht he wants to say...i like this a lot...smiling wala bit.

he opens door for her...she makes chai for him..english scenario se uthke aagaye :P

"Watching her, go about pick up his accessories that he effortlessly managed everyday to leave scattered all across the room…he smiled…finishing his tea…" this no...super...effortlessly managed everyday...:D:D:D

and she picks it up also everyday...as if its a chore she treasures doing...keepin everything ready for him..in place.

a careless glance towards the table...this one lil glance...usko kitna dard suddenly de raha hai...
wishing tht she drank one chotu cup of tea with him. just accompany him...if not for the purpose of drinking tea.

the desire to share little moments with her, to watch her smile… to feel her, around her… etched away into the lonely corners of his heart…

this desire is tugging at my hrt now...speak up dude..the things he wants to do...but somehow missing out on doing...bahut achi tarah u've brought tht across..etched away into lonely corners...corners he hasnt let her peek into..im sure if he did..it would change his life drastically...cos she doesnt speak much...as is her char...
and he'll silently try to live with it all...finding happiness in all wht he has...but still yearning for a tad bit more. hearts deepest desires...im not makin sense i kno...but...


parts 10-13

haha...i kno u'll search if ive commented...im doing chuha billi game. madame...hum intelligents hai...muhahhaha.

the poor soul...she shud just fling the paper off his hands na...kaka and his brilliant idea of lookin and givin it to him. "apparent disinterest in the breakfast"...this na...i really liked cos it conveys all her disappointment. mushkil se breakfast babaya and fella is dooboing in paper. not even chit chatting with her.

"Kuch kehna tha? "…he spoke softly… startling her, that he had been waiting for her continue…"
mucho brilliant...i love tht he has actually stopped to listen to her.. but since i know both of them i do kno wht a sweethrt this guy is. but shes startled by it..pleasantly surprised :D:D...
"nibbling away " lil rabbit kinds. no idea why this popped in my head.
"unable to resist stealing a glance at her"...kaisa hai yaar. dude utho and smell the dhokla !! but next instant feels guilty also...hai khud ko y is he torturing so !

"he felt a tug deep inside, the unmistakable glint of disappointment in her eye, that didn't miss his…"

nothin misses his eye na. but i kaadhal(this is tamil) this line absolutely. her disappointment all too apparent to him...but not the reason...hint doon doofus !!

the fact that he completes her sentence before she asks the question. perfect...this is wht soulmates are na ? bus thodi finetuning chahiye.

he immediately tries to put her at ease when he sees tht she is sorry to called out to him peeche se...haii..

again he remembers the party...isnt her smiling face like a hoarding ??
his confusion and happiness are just clashin with each other. one side of his hrt is pullin him towards her the other away from her. she doesnt say...he wont ever voice his doubts...they are stuck in a vicious circle thts just eating him up !

"Haan , lagta tho aisa hi hai …Neev " he smiled warmly… with a glint of mischief in his eyes…"

hai...masti bhi hai...par cloud ho jata hai kabhi kabhi...but i really like the way he behaves with neev. its respect for him and it totally masks whtever crap he may feel in tht bumble bee bitten head of his.

sudden tingle of hope, tickled his heart, as he smiled puzzled … at his own reactions… softly replying…"Ok… kab?"…
haila....so cute...softly replying. this is best part abt him.. thruout the ff u've written this...and i totally adore that. softspoken which completely puts everyone around at ease...esp her...

hurray for neev....hes takin him on an outing. hurray hurray. tick tock tick tock...aage jaa cuckoo bird is wht hes sayin :D