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Posted: 18 years ago
#71
nice part
continue soon
i love this fanfic 😆



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Posted: 18 years ago
#72
Navneet,

Too Good!!! I totally love the basic story of this fanfic!!! OMG, K is going to be so shocked when she knows about this!!!!! But the worst part is what will happen when she comes to know that it started as a bet!!
OMG, don't want to think about it!!!! Good Luck, Navneet!!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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K guys sorry for making u guys wait so long for the update but I was in calgary and am still here so yea…neways hope u guys like it =) and hopefully u remember whts going out =)

Part 16

OUTSIDE

*Still at Kasturi's house and is the day robbie and raunak + family is about to leave, and so robbie takes a walk outside to clear his head and is so shocked at his luck that kasturi hasn't even found out the truth (mainly because kas and raunak didn't get time alone so they didn't really discuss nething.)*

*While walking around outside he thinks about how it is his last day here and how he told Navneet that he would tell Kasturi but still doesn't know what he will do about it (oh the dilema.) As he is lost in his thought he begins to walk in the middle of the road, but the road is pretty empty so its nothing really to fear, but all of a sudden a car driver is on his phone not noticing robbie and speeding along. Kasturi pops out from behind coming out of the mandir and sees that robbie is walking past it and sees the car speeding towards him. She runs up to him and yells his name and pushes him out of the way and both of them going tumbling off to the side, robbie looks up and sees the car speeding right past them.

Robbie: kya idiot driver hai * gets himself up and gives kasturi his hand and she gets up and they both wipe themselves and take the dirt off *

* Robbie then looks at Kasturi and is so baffled by the fact that kasturi who doesn't even know him that well just risked her life to save his and they look at each other for a long time *

Robbie: kasturi woh…main tumse kya kahun…tumne tho meri jaan bachayee aur apni jaan ko kathra main daal kar

Kasturi: aara mujhe thanks kehna ki koi zaroorat nahin, yeh tho mera insaaniyat ka farz tha…aur aap tho mera dost hain, main tumari jaan kyun nahin bachaun gi

Robbie: kasturi tum kitni achi ho, sach main, tumara yeh ehsaan ko main kaisa…

Kasturi: * puts up her hand * nahin, kuch math kahiya mujhe malum hai ka aap mera liye bi aisa hi kartha

Robbie: * seems to be so sad and distressed, he cant understand how someone can be so good and how he could lie to her for so long, he turns around and there is a very dead, dull and sad expression in his eyes and he looks back at kasturi* saab tumara jaisa acha nahin hotha kasturi…sach main tum bohoth achi ho

Kasturi: aap aisi batha kyun kar rahan hai…saab main achi bath hothi hai…

Robbie: nahin kasturi…mujh main koi achi bath nahin hai

Kasturi: yeh sach nahin hai…tum bohoth acha ho…jaab woh cricket match main mera chot (hurt) lagi thi tho tumne mera itna kayal kiya (u took so much care of me)

Robbie: nahin kasturi…woh tho bus mera guilty conscience ko clear karna ka rastha tha…varna

Kasturi: nahin main nahin maan thi

Robbie: tum mujhe sachi jaan thi nahin hi

Kasturi: likyan main jaan thi hun…

Robbie: * all of a sudden curious * acha?

Kasturi: hain…mujhe malum hai ka tum ek aisa insaan ho jo apni feelings hide kartha ho…aur dusra lokon (people) ka liye tum ek tough guy ka natak karth tha ho…par mujhe malum hai ka aandar sa tum ek sensitive aadmi ho…ek bachpaana hain tumara aandar

Robbie: * is really shocked at how much she understands him and is speechless and doesn't know what to say, doesn't know is he should smile or not say nething at all but before he could answer kasturi tugs his shirt and he looks at her, and for that moment he thinks hes never noticed how very beautiful she is…how her eyes light up, how her smile lights up everything around her*

Kasturi: kya hua? Kahan ko gaya?

Robbie: who main bus…

Kasturi: acha kuch bath nahin…chalo ghar chal tha hain

* Before they leave robbie turns kasturi towards him and puts his hand on her shoulders*

Robbie: thanks, mera pas thanks kehna ka liye kuch nahin hai

Kasturi: * smiles * agar mujhe dost samaj tha ho tho yeh thanks karna choriya

* Both of them leave *

ROBBIES ROOM WHILE HE PACKS HIS CLOTHES LATER ON THAT EVENING

* Robbie packs his clothes and for some reason kasturi face keeps popping inside of his head, her smile, her eyes, her facial structure, he remembers every detail and it makes him smile, and then a pang of sadness hits him because they are leaving today just then kas walks in *

Kasturi: hi robbie, woh tumara papa na kaha tha ka main tume kahun ka time ho gaya hai leave karna ka aur tum jaldi neecha aajana

Robbie: yeh sure

Kasturi: * pulls out the book that robbie lent her * aur yeh tumari book

Robbie: thanks…tum rakh lo likyan

Kasturi: thanks

* Kasturi then leaves the room and looks back at robbie who smiles and closes his bag and walks downstairs with her *

* Outside kasturi looks for raunak and finally finds him and taps him on the shoulder he turns around and smiles at her *

Kasturi: woh raunak, aap ka paas agar 2 minute ho tho main tume kuch kehna chathi hun

Raunak: aara tumara liye mera paas 5 minute bi hain

* Both laff and walk to the side of the house and kasturi says calms herself down because she decided if she couldn't tell her feelings to raunak now she never could, she finally closes her eyes, and thinks about all the stuff that she prepared to say because she really doesn't know how to say it even though she practiced all day long and even prayed about it in the mandir *

Kasturi: raunak…woh main tume sirf yeh kehna chathi thi…kya…malum nahin kaisa kahun

Raunak: jaldi bathao, kahin yeh na ho ka main chala jahun aur tumne aapni dil ki bath na kahi ho

Kasturi: woh…okay.

Devika: aara jaldi karo saab lok!

Raunak: jaldi!

Kasturi: woh…jaab main tume pehli bar mili thi tho tum mujhe kaafi acha laga tha…aur jaab hum na itni chir bathein ki tho mujhe tumari personality bohoth achi lagi

Raunak: itni chir bathein ki???? Main kuch samaj nahin

Kasturi: woh * smiles as she gets shy * woh saab email

Raunak: emails????? Kya?

Kasturi: * is confused, and thinks maybe raunak is just joking with her * hain

Devika: Raunak! Come here! Humara jaana ka waqt aagaya

Raunak: aaya!

Devika: raunak abhi!

Raunak: sorry kasturi * walks off *

* Kasturi walks up behind him and everyone starts getting into their cars and says their last good byes, robbie pops out of the house and puts his bag into the back of the jeep and kasturi comes up behind him *

Kasturi: bye robbie, aap sa milka bi mujhe bohoth acha laga

Robbie: yeh…neways bye

Devika: ROBBIE! Aab main kis kis ko kahun ka jaana ka waqt aa gaya hai!

Robbie: sorry mom…chalo

* Everyone gets into the car and raunak pops his head out of the window and waves at kasturi she smiles and waves back but is still confused as to why raunak was acting so confused about the emails and everything, then kasturi sees robbie driving away in the jeep and she waves at him too and he waves back and everyone is gone *

Navneet: KASTURI DI! * running out of the house *

Kasturi: kya hua?

Navneet: woh robbie saab itni jaldi chala gaaya

Kasturi: hain par tume kya hua

Navneet: Robbie na tume kuch nahin kaha

Kasturi: kya?

Navneet: us na mujhe kaha tha ka woh tume saab batha tha ga

Kasturi: yeh tum kya ka rahi ho mujhe kuch samaj nahin aara

Navneet: aara di! * starts explaining the whole story to kasturi at the side of the house (imagine a bunch of shocked and confused faces) *

Kasturi: iska matlab….iska matlab…

Navneet: HAIN! Ka woh idiot robbie hi raunak tha!

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Posted: 18 years ago
#74
CanadianAddict,

Awesome 👏 👏 👏.... lovely part....
I was wondering whr were you?? Don't worry we understand.... I loved the part and Navneet telling her the truth... superb!!!

RK rocks together... So nice that Kasturi got to know the truth before she confessed her feelings to Raunak!!!!

Continue soon 😃

Sonia
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Posted: 18 years ago
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sorry double post

Edited by sonia_s11 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#76
thanks yea i didnt want raunak to know 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: CanadianAddict

thanks yea i didnt want raunak to know 😆



Good that you did not learn anything from Kekta maayi...😆..

BTW, nice episode yet again..The story is going in the right direction...Are you going to give us any bonuses, for disappearing suddenly and leaving us all hanging???

J/K, I know you must be busy and its absolutely fine..Take your time sweety...I used to write fan-fics and I know how tough it is to write these...

Raksha

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Posted: 18 years ago
#78
yeh my cuzin wanted me to right more cuz she wants to help 😆

but yea neways thanks for reading raksha 😃 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: CanadianAddict

yeh my cuzin wanted me to right more cuz she wants to help 😆

but yea neways thanks for reading raksha 😃 😳



Hey pleasure is mine Nav...

So are you writing more now??? 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
#80
hey canadian
great part
continue soon
i just love it
just wanted to know what is your real name 😊

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