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Posted: 18 years ago
#31
+ can u all just tell me if my hindi stinks cuz im punjabi so its not all that great 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
#32
Just started reading it and must say good one 😛

Luv,

Shagun
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Posted: 18 years ago
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thanks...even tho i have yash raj to thank for the concept 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Continuing on…from when they get the phone call that raunak is comin, if ur lookin for the last part it is on page 5

Part 12
STILL AT KASTURI HOUSE

*Kasturi cant sleep thinking about the fact that raunak may actually be coming, and she speaks inside her mind*

Kasturi: kyun aaj mujhe itni khushi ho rahi hai raunak ka aana ki kabar par? Yeh ehsaas tho mujhe chaan sa sauna bi nahin thatha…kitna dino bath uska chehra thakun gi, uska saath hun gi…woh insaan jisa main itna connect karthi hun…hai bhagwan yeh rath kaisa beetha gi...

*Robbie is in his room pacing up and down the room and wondering what he can do*

Robbie: *to himself* sach tho samna ayi jaaya ga, aur phir mera saab kiya karaya par paani par jaaya ga…main kasa raunak sa rokun yahein aana pa…aur agar woh aa bi gaya tho main usa kasturi sa pura time alug tho nahin rakh sak tha, yeh sach tho bar ahi jaaya ga…

THE NEXT MORNING

*Kasturi gets up early in the morning to go for pooja at the mandir near their house, not the one that was so far away like yesterday and Robbie forces himself to wake up that early and join her. He decided over night that he should just tell kasturi the truth, that it was not raunak but him that she was talking to for the last couple of months, because either way he realized the truth will come out and he didn't want kasturi to get angry after she found out his lie. Kasturi at first is hesitant to take Robbie along but JP sees her hesitation and convinces her that its okay, and that she should just take Robbie along*

*They walk off to the mandir in silence both lost in thought*

Kasturi: *thinking* aaj raunak aara ha mukhe tho yakeen hi nahin hotha, aisa laga ka woh rath kabhi nahin katham ho gi, shayad jab woh aaya ga, tho mujh main itni himtat bi hogi ka main usa mera feelings ka bara main batha sakoon

Robbie: *thinking* kasturi aaj main tumhe jo bathana wala hunt um usa sun ka kafi naraz ho jao gi, likyan yeh sach ko main nahin chupa sak tha…aara yeh saab maina bet ka liye kiya tha, agar kisi ki feelings hurt ho gayi…bas main woh nahin chatha…aaj main saab batha thu ga…ka maina tho sirf tume ek dost maina aur tum malum nahin kya sapne thak rahi ho…par bure laga ga tume yeh batha kar ka tum mera liye sirf ek bet thi

*They reach the mandir and start to pray, finally after praying kasturi is about to walk down the stairs of the mandir when Robbie touches her shoulder, she turns around and gives him a confused look and backs away*

Robbie: kasturi woh actually maina tumko ek bath bathani thi, aur is liye main tumara sath mandir main aaya

Kasturi: aisi kya bath ho sakthi hai, ka tume majboor kartha mera saath mandir main jaana main aur who bi itni suba ko?

Robbie: kasturi…mujhe malum hai ka tum Raunak ko kafi pasand kart hi ho aur…

*Kasturi looks confused, but is still a bit shy and trys to speak when Robbie puts up his hand*

Robbie: jisa tum raunak samaj thi ho who insaan-

Navneet: *running towards kasturi like crazy* KASTURI DI! RAUNAK AAYA HAI! CHALO CHALO GHAR CHALO!

Kasturi: KYA?! *begins to run but stops and looks at Robbie, Robbie all of a sudden chickens out*

Robbie: kuch kas bath nahin thi…chalo…raunak is here!

*They all go to the house, kasturi runs into the house and stops abruptly at the door raunak and everyone turn around, Raunak gets excited to see kasturi and she shyly looks down at the floor, Robbie follows just behind*

Raunak: Robbie!

Robbie: raunak! *goes over to raunak and gives him a BIG brotherly hug* kaisa raha tumara trip yaar?

Raunak: first class

Robbie: good good

Kaushalya: acha raunak tum thak gaya ho ga, aram karo, main tume tumara kamara dikha thi hun

Tanu: Ma! Aap takleef math ki jiya, kasturi thi aap raunak ko kamara dikha tho *winks at kasturi and kasturi smiles and looks at the floor*

Kasturi: ji aao

Raunak: *smiles* sure

*Kasturi and raunak go upstairs and kasturi keeps gazing at raunak, and he keeps looking at her too, they both smile at each other and are kind of shy and look at each other passionately, Robbie watches them go up the stairs in dismay*

Robbie: aab kya hoga?
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Posted: 18 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: CanadianAddict

+ can u all just tell me if my hindi stinks cuz im punjabi so its not all that great 😆


i'm punjabi too and my hindi is great not either,😆 one more thing that i'm also from canada, originally from india.😛 .
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Posted: 18 years ago
#36
o cool, canada rox, i lived in india for a while too when i was really young.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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CanadianAddict,

Great parts! Loved them!!!! Shall I tell you the truth? Your Hindi is good but the spellings sometimes are confusing making it a little tough to understand!!!

But don't you worry, we are RK fans, kaise bhi samajh lenge!!! 😆
Edited by pragalbha - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#38
heyyyyyy that was a really good part n it seems lik u've given us a bonus 1 extra...hummmm i guess its buy 1 get 1 free...hehe..lol. 😆 well continue soonnnnnnnnnnn its getting really intersting 😃
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Posted: 18 years ago
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good work canadianaddict.
waitin 4 next . i knw u gonna com up wid it as early as possible .u never keep us waiting 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Okay Continuing on because im bored and waiting to go our with my friends...
Part 13
IN KASTURI'S HOUSE

*Kasturi shows Raunak his room, and he thanks here, the thought of telling him her feelings crosses her mind so she stands there doing nothing, he finally sees her looking and smiles and walks up to her*

Raunak: Kasturi kya hua? kuch kehna tha?

Kasturi: nahin woh bus...actually kuch kehna tho tha likyan malum nahin kaisa kahun

Raunak: aara, dont be shy, jo baath hai woh bathao

Kasturi: likyan, itna ehsaan nahin hai

Raunak: acha? tho ek kam kartha hun, ill turn around and you can tell me okay?

Kasturi: hai...yeh teek raha ga

*Raunak turns around and smiles, kasturi just stares at the back of his head for a minute and closes her eyes*

Kasturi: woh, jab sa na...patha nahin kahan sa shura hun...woh tumse maina, woh main...pasand...main tume pasand

*Robbie walks in*

Robbie: Raunak buddy!

*Raunak turns around and so does kasturi to look at robbie, raunak smiles and motions him to come in, raunak looks at kasturi who looks at the ground dissapointed and raunak gives her a dissapointed look*

Robbie: raunak chal na yaar, lets go have fun! maina tume kitna dino bath dekha

raunak: hai likyan robbie...

robbie: likyan kuch nahin, chalo mera sath

raunak: ek minute, let me get my jacket

*Robbie walks out but waits by the door, he purposely stepped in on raunak and kas so kas couldnt say nething*

Raunak: kasturi woh tume kya kehna tha?

Kasturi: *still looking at ground* kuch nahin, phir kabhi

Raunak: *puts his hand on kasturi's shoulder and nods and then walks off*

*Kasturi sees him walking away and sighs and looks at her shoulder where raunak touched and smiles, and then giggles and leaves the room. Robbie, sees her running happily down the hall when he was goin down teh stairs and for some reason gets some strange feeling in his gut*

*Later that evening after dinner, the family is sitting outside and navneet, tanu, kasturi, robbie, raunak and reluctantly pooja decide to play cricket. Its Kasturi's turn to bat and she doesnt really know how*

Raunak: come on kasturi! Oi robbie, zor sa math marna

Robbie: *rolls his eyes at raunak since hes competetive but since he cant throw the ball too hard since kasturi isn't that good at cricket*

*Kasturi goes up to the plate and misses two balls, and robbie says maybe they should have another batter but raunak tells robbie to hold on a minute and goes to kasturi himself*

Raunak: kasturi tumari position teek nahin hai...lo main tume sika tha hun kaisa batting kar tha haan

*Raunak shows kasturi how to hold the bat and tells her some tips on how to hit the coming ball, robbie gets frustrated and so does navneet and they start complaining to continue the game. Kasturi holds the bat again and its the wrong position again, and raunak laughs, navneet grunts and robbie rolls his eyes again while Tanu giggles like crazy and pooja looks at her nails*

*Then Raunak goes up to kasturi and asks if he can show her, he says only if she trusts him, she looks at him for a while and they stare at each with so much passion and she just nods and then he takes her hands into his and they both hold the bat and he shows her how to swing it, kasturi turns around to look at raunak's face which is so close to her and raunak notices everyone else looking and tells her shes good to go.*

*Meanwhile Robbie watching all this for some reason gets kind of angry and the game begins again, and for some reason he throws the ball as quick as possible venting his anger on the ball and it goes flying and hits kasturi's leg and she screams*

Navneet: Kasturi di!

Pooja: wow!

*Everyone looks at Pooja*

Pooja: i mean wow, zaada chot tho nahin lagi?

*Kasturi sits on the ground holding her leg and Robbie and raunak rush over, robbie kneels on the ground beside her*

robbie: sorry kasturi woh, patha nahin kaisa...

Kasturi: dont worry, bus aab mujhe nahin lagtha ka main kaad paun gi (i wont be able to play)

Tanu: chalo kasturi di

*Kasturi tries to get up but is still a little weak in the knees and raunak lends him her hand and put her arm around his shoulder and helps her walk to the house, she looks at him and he looks at her and while they walk they keep staring*

Navneet: chalo robbie, game phir sa shuru kara

Robbie: nahin mood nahin hai *robbie walks off towards the house and navneet looks sadly at the empty ground and runs to the house with everyone else*

LATER THAT NIGHT IN KASTURIS ROOM

*Robbie walks in and kasturi is lying on her bed reading, he knocks on the door*

Kasturi: robbie, aao andar

robbie: kasturi woh, sorry patha nahin

kasturi: kuch nahin hotha, accident tho hotha ratha hain

robbie: yea likyan tumko kafi chot lagi hai

kasturi: kuch nahin, doctor katha hain, ek do din main teek ho jaya gi

robbie: actually mom na mujhe yeh cream thi hai tumara liye, she feels really bad

kasturi: thanks

robbie: yeh meri book par rahi ho

kasturi: yea kafi achi hai

robbie: acha

*Looks around the room and finds and picture of kasturi when she was young and starts laughing*

kasturi: kya hua?

robbie: tum kafi moti hothi thi

kasturi: *grabs the picture*

robbie: *still laughing and blows up his face to make it look fatter and then kasturi starts laughing too*

*Right then Navneet walks in and puts kasturi's food (which kasturi wanted because she skipped dinner) and runs off yelling shes going to miss the cricket match, kasturi laughs at her excitement and begins eating, robbie watches her, her hair strand keeps coming in her face and kasturi who has gotten her hands dirty with the chawl (she likes to eat them with her hands old school style 😆 ) cant move the hair so she keep flipping it back but its goes in the front again. Robbie laughs and then takes the strand and tucks it behing her ear for her, kasturi looks up at robbie and they both stare at each other for a moment*

*Suddenly Raunak walks in*

Raunak: hey guys, woh saab lok mujhe meri trip ka bara main itna poochi gaya...tum saab kya kar raha ho

Kasturi: kuch nahin, aao na raunak

*Raunak walks up and sits beside kasturi on the bed, and she looks at him and smiles and he does back. Robbie feeling a bit unwelcomed gets up and begins to walk off.*

Raunak: robbie tum kahan ja raha ho?

Robbie: woh bus, kuch phone call karni thi

*Robbie leaves*

Raunak: acha, tho aab bathao ka tum mujhe aaj suba kya kehna chathi thi

kasturi: *shakes her head* kuch nahin

raunak: come on kasturi, kya hai?

kasturi: *looks down at the bed her cheeks turning a bit red* woh...nahin main nahin batha thi

raunak: come on kasturi

kasturi: nahin nahin nahin!

Alka: RAUNAK BETA! *shouts from downstairs*

Raunak: chalo phir kabhi tumse yeh bath nikaal lun ga (ill get it out of you another time)

Kasturi: *smiles as raunak heads up the stairs and then heres an old hindi song playing, one of her favouritea actually and she gets up with and drags herself out of the bed to see where the music was coming from, she followed the music and it lead her to none other than Mr.Robbies room*

Kasturi: yeh ghana kitna acha hai na?

Robbie: *notices kasturi and turns down the music* hain one of my favourites

kasturi: tumara bi! mera bi...aur raunak ka bi

robbie: *fake smiles at kasturi because he knows this is not one of raunak's favourite songs nor is he really into old music*

*Then Robbie makes kasturi sit on the couch in the room and asks about her leg several times before she keeps insisting its okay, and then robbie becomes his joker self and makes kasturi laugh alot and she cracks funny jokes that make him laugh alot too because most of the other girls he is usually with are just boring and cant really hold a conversation if it isnt about make up or the latest dance track or why they think he looks so handsome, finally she leaves.*

NEXT MORNING

*Kaushalya serves everyone breakfast along with kasturi and then later after everyone is done, she brings gajar ka halwa. kasturi smiles because its her favourite dish, and its is also raunaks (which is actually robbie DUH?!) and kaushalya serves it to everyone*

Raunak: nahin aunty mujhe na thana, woh main pehla sa hi full hun

Devika: likyan behenji aap robbie ko zaroor thi jiya ga, robbies favourite food is this, ever since he was young, uska pat (stomach) main gajar ka halwa ka liye tho hamasha room tha!

*Everyone laughs and Kaushalya says kasturi also loves it*

Raunak: *whispers to kasturi* meeti cheez meeta lokon (people) ka liye

*Kasturi smiles at the comment, and looks at robbie literally stuffing it down his mouth and giggles*
Edited by CanadianAddict - 18 years ago

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