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Posted: 18 years ago
yey you've updated!great part, continue sn!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
thats really good
plz continue soon 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
great update kajal, plz continue soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
awesum fan fic! 😛 great update...do cont 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
thxx 4 all thos elovely comments guys.....here's the nxt part hope u lyk it...

recap: prem finds out abt mukti's departure...

later that day in the office...
prem goes to bajaj's cabin as he was called...
prem: yes dad..appne mujhe bulaya..
bajaj:..prem..mr.mehta , jo humhara panchmeswar ka office samalte hain, yo achanak bemar hogaya...doctor kehete hain ke he needs to rest for weeks...and there's no one to handle that office...here me and tushar r busy with another project ..so, i though..
prem: ok dad....i wil go...u don't worry...
bajaj: thxxx....and gd luck(forward his hand to shake while prem shakes his back) and ya...u will be leaving tonite...

in the airport..
prena: gd luck betta....as soon as u reach there...call us...
prem: mom..im not a kid nymore...i will be fine....but if calling u makes u feel betta then i will call u...saying this he hugs evryone and leaves....

in pachmeswar...
prem goes to his hotel and sleeps as he was tired and had to go office tomoro....

nxt morning...
he eats his breakfast and goes office......in the after noon..he decides to go in a restaurant for a quiet lunch....


he is in the restaurant , eating his lunch when a small kid holds his coat...
kid: uncle!uncle....didi ko bolo na mujhe ice-cream kinne ko...
prem is all confused as he had neva seen the kid b4 ...
kid: plzz bolo na uncle..
he is all shocked when he hears a voice...
girl: (talking at the kid)rohan..i told u not to go anywhere..and looks at prem to say sorry abt rohan's behavoiur....but when she looks at prem...she is all shocked cos the girl was none other than mukti...yes guys..and rohan was her chachi's daughter..
mukti: tum!!prem!! yaha?? kya??
prem: darasal...main yaha business ke silsile main aaya tha...
mukti: oh..ok...anywayzz i got to go..wanna come with us to meet my aunti..
prem: ya sure...

they reach to a small house...near the town...
mukti: chachi...bahar aao to..
chachi:(coming out) kya hain mukti...
and sees a young , dashing man/boy( 😳😳😳 what sud i call him..boy?? 😕 man?? 😕, she had neva seen in the town )
mukti: chachi...ye prem hain...jis ghar me baba kaam karte thi...wahi ghar ka malik ka beta...
prem:(smiling) nahi...malik ka beta nahi...mukti ka dost.. 😃
chachi: oh!! bohot sunna hain tumhara aur tumhara parivar ke bare main....andar aao na....

they all go inside and have a lovely talk....it was darkening...
prem: chachi..mujhe jana hain...
chachi: arre...bohot raat vhi ho chuka hain...ajj yehi behet lo..kal subha chale jana..
prem: thank u but i rly need to go...i will coem tomoro..
chachi:ok..gd nite...

prem leaves while mutki comes with him just to leave him until the roundway....but as they were walking ...it starts to rain...rain heavily.........they both quickly run to stay under the tree......they both r soaked....mukti was shivering as it was windy and cold...prem gently gives his wet coat to her...even though it's already wet he gives his coat.......



that's all guys......if there's any hindi sentence mistake then forgive me....plzzz leave comments and feel free to critisize.....

love
kajal
Edited by FrEnDs8 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
plzzz continue soon its GREATTT!!! 😊 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
really good kajal, cant wait for more!
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Posted: 18 years ago
thxx u guys...for the comments...will update soon...

kajal 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
hey guys.....did u rly didn't lyk the update...if not plzz tell me i will stop updating this fanfic....

anywayzz here's the update for today...

recap: it was raining and prem and mukti had to stay under the tree...

they stayed under the tree until it started drizzling..
prem: mukti!! mujhe lagta hai ke tumhe mere saat aana hoga..it's gonna rain hevily and it's getting dark as well..
mukti: par ..chachi...
prem: chachi ko hum hotel pochne ke baad khabar denge...
mukti: ok...

they got a cab but on their way to hotel the cab stopped...

prem: kya huwa guru ji?? appne kyuon roka??
guru ji: sorry saab...gadi waha se aage nahi ja sakte...flooding ka risk hain saab..
prem: par humhara hotel to wahi pass me hain..
guru ji: sorry saab...
prem: thik hain...we will walk...comon mutki...it's just round there....

so, they run upto the hotel.... and to the reception...

prem: hey!! cn i have one more room plzzz??? i have already booked for me...i need one more..
reception girl: no..sorry sir...we haven't got any left..all the rooms r full cos of the flooding , sir...
prem: r u sure there ain't any more??
R.G: yes sir...if there's nay..we will inform u straight away...
prem: ok...(looking at mukti) let's go...

they both go to prem's room and both r soaked.....mutki sits on the sofa uncomfortably while prem goes to the cupboard...gets towels...
prem: hey mukti..get dried or u will catch cold..(saying this he throws the towel at her and she catches..)

prem dets dried and makes some hot chocolate ..*yunmmy 😳 *...he also puts the fire on while mutki comes out of bathroom ....prem stares at her for a while and them gives one of the glasss to her...they spent the evening listening to music....

evening...
they were listening to radio and at evry station there was romantic songs playing....at last they sticked with "sunrise radio"..there were loads of lovely message frm their lovers as it was valentines day.....after sometym there was a song " ye aakhe , ye kajjal, ye bindiya , ye achal" frm the movie " chup chup ke"....prem put his cup down ...bent on his knee and asked...
prem: hey mutki...wanna dance??? and winked ad her.. 😉
mukti: hmmm...
prem: say yes...plzz don't break someone's heart on valentines day 😳 😳 ( i knoe ..i knoe....don't get up frm ur chair..it's just the begging yaar.. 😳 )
mukti:.....ok...

and then they danced .....
prem: that was fun...
mutki: ye..it was....
prem: happy valentines day mutki !!!
mukti: ha...(confused 😕 )
prem:...i mean...as a frend..
mukti:...ok ...thxxx 😃
prem:....i hope u find someone who loves u and give u loads of happiness....with whom u cn share ur joy and sorrow....
mukti: thxx prem.....i hope u do as well....

and then they have a tight hug and wishes each other gd nite and they have a gd nite sleep 😳 😳 mutki sleeps in bed while prem sleeps in the couch....

plzz comment guys....

love
kajal 😳
Edited by FrEnDs8 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
awwwww how cuteee plz continue soon 😳

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