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Umar

@Shotz

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Posted: 18 years ago

#91

great stuf... plz cont soon!!! cnt wait!!! 👏 👏

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Robin

@Robin_M

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Posted: 18 years ago

#92

kajal hun that was awsome! please keep going!

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kajal

@Peanutt Butterr

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Posted: 18 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: Robin_M
kajal hun that was awsome! please keep going!

thxx robin.....glad u lyked it...

Originally posted by: brainychild92
that was wiked..

i thought it w ould be like the hospital scene when prem got injured and she's like AGAR TUME KUCH HO JATA TO.. and prem is like AGR MUJHE KUCH HOJATA TO KYA, BASANTII.

to baad it wasnt like that..

o well u came up with an original scene rather than copying her..

continue soooooooooooooooooonnn

hahha...that was rly nice scne...thxxx4 ur comment...😳😳

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jenny

@badgal4eva

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Posted: 18 years ago

#94

Awwww ur fanfic is so sweeeeeeeeeet 👏 👏 👏

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karen

@karen singh

Inactive

Posted: 18 years ago

#95

thats really good u have to continue soon
i love how prem keeps on makin those mistakes and mukti is so confused lol its so cuteeeeeeee 😳

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kajal

@Peanutt Butterr

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Posted: 18 years ago

#96

thxxx 4 the comments....and sorry for the delay...here goes the nxt part...hopefully u will enjoy.....

mukti is in her bed....suddenly her phone rings......
mukti: hello!!!!what????(tears slowly roll down her cheeks)....the phone drops frm her hand....she starts crying.....the room-service hears her crying ....
RS: (knock knock)...excuse me!!! is evrything ok in dere???
mukti doesn't reply...all she does is cry....the maid goes to inform prem....prem hurriedly comes to her room...
prem: mukti...what's rong??? why u crying??? did u have a nightmare or sumthing???
mukti: baba.....baba ne mujhe chod kar......(hugs prem and starts crying more)
prem: i m so sorry jaan.....
mukti stands up suddenly and starts packing.....
prem: what u doing??
mukti: cn't u c i m packing.....i m going now.....
prem: r u nuts???? u cn't go now.....we haven't even booked our tickets....
mukti: i don't care.....i need to go now....my dad needs me rite now...
prem grabs her hand and hugs her......he tries to console her...
prem: mukti....chup...chup...suno mere baat ko....baba ab is duneya me nahi hai......we cn't do anything abt it.....me india wapas jane ka intazaam karta hu...u stay here.....mukti just cries helplessly.....

afternoon
prem comes to mukti's room....gets her luggage and takes off to the airport......mukti doesn't say a word in the plane.....she just sits there not uttering a word....this worries prem...he tells her to eat some food or drink but she refuses........

back in india
they reach home....prena gives a tight hug to mukti and she hugs her back to her choti maa who has been lyk a mother to her.....

mutki's room....
she sees her baba's picture...
mukti: kyuon baba??? kyon?? kyon mujhe chod kar chale gaya....baba....she hugs his picture and cries......
sneha sees this while passing to her room...
sneha: mutki....i m rly sorry abt ur dad....do u kne what was the last thing ur dad said to me????he said that he's rly proud of his daughter......and will alwayzzz be....
this makes mutki rly sad and she cries even more.....she hugs sneha.......
sneha: ab chalo...sone ka waqt hogaya hain....if u need anything just call me ok.....gd nite...
mukti: gd nite.....

preview:prem: why??why do i feel that i miss somthing......or some one???

plzz leave comments and feel free to critisize if u didn't lyk it!!!!!!

love
kajal

Edited by FrEnDs8 - 18 years ago

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ajeebhotum

@ajeebhotum

Sparkler

Posted: 18 years ago

#97

👏
wowwww!!!
the update was just awsome Kajal jaani! 👏 👏
keep it up!!...ur a fab writer! 😃

cont. soon...can;t waitt till d nextt updatee! 😛

~Rachna 😳

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Robin

@Robin_M

Rocker

Posted: 18 years ago

#98

great update kajal! you havent updated in a while, but i still love your fanfic. i feel really bad for mukti. continue soon.

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kajal

@Peanutt Butterr

Inactive

Posted: 18 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: Robin_M
great update kajal! you havent updated in a while, but i still love your fanfic. i feel really bad for mukti. continue soon.

thxx robin....

Originally posted by: indianhomey1992
👏
wowwww!!!
the update was just awsome Kajal jaani! 👏 👏
keep it up!!...ur a fab writer! 😃

cont. soon...can;t waitt till d nextt updatee! 😛

~Rachna 😳

glad u lyked it rachna....and thxx 4 the comment...

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kajal

@Peanutt Butterr

Inactive

Posted: 18 years ago

#100

thxx guys...here come the nxt part....

nxt morning..
prem , doing his shrit buttons and coming downstairs....
prem: (singing)smack that...all on the floor..smack that we need some more.....(sees birju kaka) hellooo kaka....jaldi nasta lagaeye plzzz.....muje der horaha hain...
birju kaka: thik ye saab....

he quickly eats his breakfast and leaves for office....after some time all the family comes downstairs....
prena: sab log..nasta tayar hain....arre prem kaha hain??
birju kaka: saab to subha subha office chalegaye...
prena: arre prem or office....itna subha subha..pata nahi ajj kya hone wala hai(sarcasticly)
evryone laughs...
bajaj: that's gd that he's giving attention in his work...
they were all eating breakfast...when prena notices someone....mukti with her suitcase....
prena: arre mukti beta...tum ..kaha jarahe ho??
mukti: choti maa....main kuch din ke liya appna aunty ke pas jarahe hoon..
prena: paar...
mukti: plzz chotimaa...rook na maat...
prena: think hain..par tumhara ye aunty rehete hain kaha??
mukti: panchmewar par...me ek hafte ke baad lot jaunge..
prena: think hain...waha pauchne ke baad ...hume phone karlena think hain.....
mutki: ok...

she hugs evryone gd bye...gets blessing frm her sir and chotimaa and leaves....

in office...
prem is in his cabin looking at some files....he picks up his fone and tells his assistant..
prem: miss mukti ko mere cabin me vej dena...
assis..: sir...she hasn't arrived yet...
prem: what do u mean..she hasn't arrived yet???
assis: sir...
prem: ok...(keeps the fone down)

he is woried + angry so,he calles home....sneha picks up the fone..
prem: sneha...mutki kaha hain...yo office aaye kyon nahi...
sneha: yo to subha panchmewar chali gaye...
prem: what??? ese kaise ja sakti hain...ok...thaxx ...

(prem to himself....what's wrong wid her??? how dare she leave without informing me?? but who m i for her to inform??? and why m i worring if she's gone...i cn get lots of gal lyk her.....but ...not her.....)

that's all for today..plzz comment and feell free to critisize if u didn't lyk it...

xxxx
--kajal--

Edited by FrEnDs8 - 18 years ago