FANFIC : Safar - The Journey-COMPLETED - Page 3

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Dats Awmazing 👏

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Debo & Pream 🤢

How Can U Think Abt It

Den What Happen 2 My SweetMUKTI

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Plz Plz Plz Plz Plz Plz Don't Do Dis Don't

Change UR Mind

Continue Soooooooon Plz 😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
#22
Prem and debo?nahin plz.. 🤢
Anyway it was fantastic! 👏
plz update soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#23
You'r fanfic is really different. It's very good. Please continue soon. 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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You're fanfic is great..please continue soon!!!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! 😭
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Prem sits in his room all morning thinking….

Prem goes to talk to the ship crew

CREW: In 10 mins we will reach one small island. We will have 10 minutes halt. From there the main destination is 8 hrs.

Prem: Whats the next halt from there?

CREW: One island….it will stop for hr.

Prem: are there any temples on that island?

CREW: ofcourse…

Prem: I will tell you one thing. Will you do it?

Crew: what is it?

Prem: it's a huge matter. You have to do it carefully. Will you do it?

Crew: ok what about my work?

Prem: I will pay you.

Crew: ok sure

Prem: I am getting off in this island. Next island halt, you have to get off with debo there. I will send directions with a boy. You both come there. Be careful ok.

Prem gets off at the Island.


The phone rings in the Crew room

The guy who is suppose to help Debo gets a call from his home about some ugent matter. He sits at the deck thinking what do to do about Prem and Debo when Mukti comes there. He sees Mukti and realizes that she is friends with Prem. He goes up to her.

Crew: You are Prem's friend right?

Mukti: yes?
Crew: can you do me a huge favor? You shouldn't mention it to anything.

Mukti: ok? What is it?

Crew: Mr.Prem and Debonita are getting married at the next stop. All you have to do is be with debo and help her off the ship and prem will send the directions.

Mukti is shocked and has no words. She feels heartbroken. Mukti walks around the ship to forget everything but she feels depressed.

Mukti (to herself): kya prem pagal ho gaya hai? Who debo se kaisa shaadi kar sakta hai? Who stupid crew member…mein kyu help karu?

Mukti and Chintu are sitting on the deck

Mukti: chintu mein kya karu? Whats this marriage eloping? And mein debo kyu le jao? Yeh sab bahut filmi lag raha hai…prem bahut baga galthi kar raha hai. Debo uske liye teek nahi hai…kal shaadi ke baadh patha chalega….uske baadh zindagi bar rothey rahega….stupid fellow…chintu kuch karna padega…yeh sab kya hai….aur yeh karan kya kar raha hai?

Mukti sees Prerna and goes and sits next to her.

Prerna: mukti? Kya hua?

Mukti: kuch nahi chotima….mujhe mom bahut yaad aa rahi hai

Prerna: yeh kya bacho ki tarha….mein hoon na..

Mukti hugs prerna and cries.

The ship stops at the island….

A boy comes to Mukti and gives her a small paper in which prem gave directions

Mukti goes on the deck and sees debo

Mukti: debo, come here, mujhe sab patha lag gaya hai. Main tumhare liye door par wait karungi tum aa jana ok. We don't have much time, come soon ok.

Debo: mukti? Is this ok? Me and prem? Is this right?

Mukti to herself : ab yeh doubt kar rahi hai…besharam…

Mukti: are you having second thoughts?

Debo: no no….i have decided…

Mukti: tho problem kya hai? Lets go…

Mukti and Chintu are at the door waiting for Debo

Mukti: is everything ok? Last minute pe bhi doubts hai us besharam ko..Aisi ladki ke saath who hero…apna career banayega? Karne degi…do marke ghar pe bitakar apne business salaane ke liye kehegi. Chintu tum kaho? Is this right match? Us ladki ko kuch decide karna nahi aatha…and she wants prem? Please…….first of all prem ko do marna chahiye…he can't differentiate between anything. Chance mille tho…lecture start kar letha hai. Chintu kuch bolo na…please help…prem tumhara bext friend haina..

Chintu listen to all this goes up to mukti….GRABS the paper in which the directions are written and sallows it.

Mukti: chintu…god kya kar rahe ho….get it out please…chintu…yeh tumne kya kiya?

Just then debo comes

Debo: mukti challe?

Mukti: yea…ok…lets go..

They get off and wait for prem at the beach.

Mukti is confused because she has no idea what that paper said.

They wait a long time…

Debo: mukti, kya hua? Where is prem?

Mukti: ayega…

They wait until nightfall

Debo: prem aisa hi hai….he doesn't do anything properly. This is what happens when I depend on him. I did a big mistake mukti. Prem pe depend karne maine bahut badi lagthi ki. Agar papa ko patha challa ko mujhe mar ladalenge…aur karan?

Mukti: debo, jan se aaye hai mein tumhe dekh rahi hoon. Tum prem ko blame kar rahi ho. Even once did you think if he was in some kind of a danger and that's why he didn't come?

Debo: I am not in a position to think like that. You won't understand. You have no idea how much risk I took. Prem ne mujhe dhokha diya. I can never trust prem again in prem.

Mukti: debo I have to tell you something.

Just then they hear the ship coming towards them.

Debo: oh god, the ship is back. Mukti can you forget about everything which happened? Please don't tell anyone ok.

Mukti: debo, listen to me…prem sent those direction but…

Debo: whatever mukti, leave it…don't mention it to anyone. Just tell that when got off the ship and by the time we came back the ship left. Please.

Mukti: par…debo

Debo goes towards the ship and gets on.


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Posted: 18 years ago
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thankssss alot for the update!!!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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PLease continue soon! it very interesting!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Mukti is in her room….

Mukti writing her diary

Mukti: This is the last entry on this ship I never thought would be so sad. I don't understand this sad and depressed feelings. Is that….he said yes to debo and broke my heart or because of me his marriage was not able to happen or is it that he broke my heart? If he asks me why I did this….out of fear…will I have to tell him the truth that I love him? I don't understand anything.


Prem gets back on the ship with the help of a life boat.

Prem goes to see debo but debo gives him a cold look. Prem goes away from there.

He tries to talk to mukti but she walks away from him. He has no idea why mukti is giving her a cold treatment.

Prem goes to Mukti's room but she doesn't open the door.

Mukti avoids Prem at all levels.

The island comes and she packs all her belongings. She looks at the room one last time and before she stes out she trips a bit. She turns around looks at the room again with tears and leaves.

Captain: Mukti, you have a return ticket too

Mukti: captain, I have some urgent work. I am taking a flight home from here. Thank you so much for everything.

Mukti goes to Prerna and touches her feet

Prerna: kuch raho, apna address prem ko dethey jana. Hum Mumbai mein phir milenge.

Mukti looks at prem and walks away

Prem: mukti, please one min

Mukti doesn't turn around and leaves from there.

Debo and Karan say their good byes to Mukti.

At the Island airport

Prem comes to the airport to meet mukti

Prem: mukti, please can I talk to you?

Mukti: no

Prem: mukti, please…what happen?

Prem tries to hold her hand but mukti pulls in away.

Mukti walks away and then turns around and comes back.

Mukti: listen, give me my scarf back.

Prem: what?

Mukti: my scarf.

Prem gives mukti back and scraf.

Mukti leaves for Mumbai.


Mukti reaches Home

Maya : hey look who here…mom di is back.

Anurag: mukti, trip kaisa tha?

Mukti: good

Maya: di, what did you get for me? First go give the taxi guy the change.

Sam: mukti, waha kuch khaya nahi kya…tumhara chera uthra hua hai.

Mukti ignores all the questions, she her bags and go to her room.

Sam: how was he trip?

Mukti: everything was good mom

Maya: where is my stuff?

Mukti: there you go

Sam: take this milk, kya hua? Aisi kyu ho?

Mukti: flight was horrible, I am tired I will sleep

Sam: ok fine…take a shower and sleep

Anurag: did you get those stuff I asked you?

Mukti: yeaaaaaa

Sam: eat something and sleep

Mukti: oh god, I will ….can you all leave me alone?

Anurag: esse kya hua?

Sam: beti tumhari hai..tum pooch

Mukti comes down to have dinner

Anurag: oh yea…tumhare liye kuch calls ayethey. You got some consignments for the boutique. They want to meet you. I wrote all the numbers. There you go.

Sam: kya hua mukti? Tum tho bahut bhak bhak karthi thi

Mukti: god mujhe chup rehne na right bhi nahi hai kya?

She gets up from the table and leaves


The next few days Mukti is busy with her projects. But all she can think about is Prem. She feels heartbroken and sad.

Prem on the other hand misses Mukti a lot on her cruise back to Mumbai. He doesn't understand why Mukti didn't want to interact with him.

Prem goes into Mukti's room and looks around just to atleast feel her presence but guess what he finds…………"MUKTI'S DIARY"

Prem opens the diary to see a picture of Anurag, Sampata, Mukti and Maya

He looks at the sweet family and smiles. He turns to the next page and he reads the whole diary.


Nights seem longer for Mukti day by day. Even though she tried to make herself busy with work, she can't get Prem out of her mind.

Its late at night when Mukti decides to atleast watch tv, instead of thinking of Prem.

Sam comes and sits next to her.

Sam: mukti, kya hua? Needh nahi aa rahi?

Mukti puts her head on sam's shoulder and starts crying.

Sam: kya hua? Kyu ro rahi ho? Mein tumhari dost hu na? tell me.

Mukti: everything was good mom, par ek useless fellow cruise pe milla tha. Bahut idiotic tha. Usse bahut marna chahiye. Uspe uthna gussa aa raha hai.

Sam: tumhare saath kuch misbehave kiya usne?

Mukti: nahi mom, acha ladka hai, par he is a heartless fellow.

Sam: first tell me what happen

Mukti tells sam everything what happen on the cruise.

Sam: ok ok, sab teek hai. Ab tumhara problem kya hai? Us debo ka shaadi karan se hogayi hai na….tho tum aisi kyu ho? Devdas jaisi?

Mukti: mujhe koyi problem nahi hai. Par uspe gussa aa raha hai. How could he think of getting married to debo? Who ladki pagal hai…par eske brain ko kya hua? IDIOT FOOL

Sam: vaise bhi…agar tum debo ke ship utharne se pehle sach bodethi tho…prem par uthna gussa nahi aatha debo ko…

Mukti: debo ko prem suit nahi kartha…mein dono ko janthi hoon

Sam: decide karne ke liye tum kaun hothi ho? Tum prem se pyaar karthi ho?

Mukti: pyaar? I will kill him. Mein usse pyaar kyu karungi. Mujhe dekhne ke baadh bhi us debo ke saath…

Sam: kuch bhi ho. Bachpan se lekar ab thak kissi ladke ke barre mein tumne ithna nahi kaha. This prem should be something special. Mein dad se kahu?

Mukti: koyi zaroorat nahi hai.

Sam: waise bhi...ab mein so rahi ho…tum pyaar vyaar kuch nahi hai?

Mukti: yea whatever…jokes band karo mom….do din mein everything will be history.

Mukti flips channels when she sees the titanic scene….

Mukti: god……..yeh stupid idiot prem

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Posted: 18 years ago
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He read her diary? Wow! I would kill whoever read mine 😆 So now he knows how she feels about him.. I can't wait, please continue soon!! 👏

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