FANFIC : Safar - The Journey-COMPLETED - Page 2

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Posted: 18 years ago
#11
continue soon i luv da fact dat mukti is both rich n really outgoin 😉 she jus says watever she wants lookin 4ward 2 da next part n could u make prem more confident n a risk taker jus a suggestion 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
#12
ABSOULOUTLYY LOVEE YOUR FANFIC!!! pleasee continuee!!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#13
OMG 😊 tht is Excellenteeeeeee....lol..I NEVER KNE THT THIS FF WASS EVER EXISTED IN THIS WORLD!!! it is soooo gooood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Debo's Mehandi on the Cruise….

Everyone is busy with the Mehandi. Mukti is also invited….Everyone lights diyas….on the deck and its really beautiful.

Prerna and Mukti get very close. Prerna is very found of Mukti.

Mukti: kya mein aapko chotimaa keh sakti hoon?

Prerna: ofcourse beta…aao mein tumhe mehandi laga thi hoon…Your fingers are very long….tum bahut naseeb wali ho…

Mukti: thanks….

Prerna: kya tumhare papa ka business bahut bada hai?

Mukti: chotima, aap yeh business aur society ki baree mein kyu pooch rahe ho? Kya aap in sab bathon mein vishwaas rakthi hai?

Prerna: waisi bath nahi hai…business and standards ke liye debo ne prem ko inkaar kar diya….jab maine tumhe dekha tho I got a small hope…wished to know whether it is right or not. Prem apne papa jaisa yeh. Sab apne hardwork se kamana chahtha hai. Humara ithna bada business thotey ue bhi who apne aap ko prove karna chahta hai. Main usse rokungi nahi. Deb one naa kiya tho kya hua. Mera prem tho heera hai.

Prem comes and sees Prerna and Mukti

Prerna: finishes mukti's mehandi

Prerna: kaisa hai?

Mukti: aap ki tarha…and gives a kiss to prerna…

Mukti: eeyyy…..prem, mujhe apne mom dedo….saare tare tumhe de dungi.

Prem: I will give you more stars….come here

Mukti: mein jaao chotima?

Prerna: go…

Mukti shows her hands…kaisa hai?

Prem shows mukti….towards the pool where she sees all diyas floating….they keep staring at it.

Prem: phir se saree huh?

Mukti: jab thak tum nahi kehtey ki mein debo se zyada beautiful hoon…tab thak pehanthi hi rahungi…

Prem: ok fine…I will tell u now….

Mukti: waisa nahi. Tum mujhe fool nahi kar sakthey…the other day you gave a glance seeing debo…mujhe who patha hai…
Prem: ok fine….ab dunga…

Prem tries to give the look

Mukti: no way…


Mukti calls her mom

Mukti: mom….helloo

Sam: haan tell me….kaisi ho?

Mukti: han ok ok ok…mom agar mujhe cruise pe ek ladka pasand aa gaya tho teek hai na? kya kehthi ho tum?

Sam: dandey lekar aaungi….be careful…..by the way….is he loaded?

Mukti: yack…bye


They all stop at an island……

CAPTAIN : In the history of ten years….no one was able to find the treasure…we will give you clues…if you find it you will win Rs.50,000

Everyone teams up…PREM-MUKTI, KARAN- DEBO….Chintu has no partner so he decides that he wants to make his dog his partner.

Everyone go into the Forest to find the clues….

Mukti and Prem are walking in the forest

Mukti: eeyyy…hello….why are you in a hurry?

Prem: humme zeet na haina….

Mukti: kya karoge paiso se?

Prem: tum lelo…I don't need money right now.

Mukti: for money the need will come…

Prem: then I will earn. Now you need money at least to open your boutique

Mukti: who told you?
Prem: you live in Mumbai….you have a sister. You tried to run a boutique, but failed. You first alliance failed.

Mukti: anywayz….whats in ur bag? Anything to eat?

Prem: why? Tum ko kya? Zeetna hai ki nahi?

Mukti: hey…come here I got the first clue….

CUT TO DEBO AND KARAN

DEbo goes and sites on a rock

Karan: if you settle like that we can't win debo. I never lost any competition.

Debo: chodo karan, see how nice it is…

Karan tries to kiss debo

Debo: hey karan stop it plz

Karan: challo lets make out debo..we have to chase and get the treasure or indulge in kissing. We must have some purpose in life.

Debo: only that? We can talk or enjoy the nature?

Karan: yaha nature nahi…jaanwar milthey hai.

Debo: lets talk….about our life together. Our childhood and everything.

Karan: ok you wanna know about me? I am practical.

Debo: karan, tumne mere bare mein kya socha?

Karan: we plan in two years. We will have two kids, atleast a boy. You will be happy with their education ets.. can pass time happily…ab challo…we need to search the treasure…

Debo: ok

CUT TO PREM AND MUKTI

Mukti shows prem her family pics…

Mukti: this is mu dad, he is my best friend. My mom…she is sweet and u know the typical mom. This is my sister maya…firebrand..
Prem: yea right…not more than you

Mukti gives him a look

Prem: sorry sorry…she is very cool….

Mukti: cool? Tumhe tho sab ache lagthey hai….mere siwa….by the bag mein kya hai?

Prem: first think about the clue…

CUT OVER TO KARAN AND DEBO

Debo: I love dance….i have many friends but prem is my best friend.

Karan: then after marriage forget all that.

Debo: prem, hamare saath nahi rahega aur I don't like dance.

CUT OVER TO PREM AND MUKTI

Mukti: I will ask you one question. Answer it…what do you like the most in me?

Prem: you look nice mukti

Mukti: dam it!! Not like that…one thing, only one thay you remember when you think of me.

Prem : tumhare mouth….tum bahut bag bag karthi ho….first time maine wahi notice kiya…uske baadh, your eyes, there is a spark in them. Kissi mein dekha…ok lets go…

Mukti: totally…how am i?

Prem: hhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmm…………..OK….

Mukti: ok?? Just ok?

CUT TO KARAN AND DEBO

Debo: do you like sunrise?

Karan: I like sunset with a drink.

Debo: can you cook?

Karan: cooking? Are you kidding me?

Debo: you eat food don't you?

They find a clue

Prem and mukti also find another clue

Debo and Karan hear Mukti and Prem's voice…

Debo: they are somewhere here na?

Karan: I think they are enjoying…nice couple…whats wrong? They make a good match.

Debo: waisa kuch nahi hai. Prem aisa nahi hai…ok

Karan: whats wrong in it? Usko chodo lets see the clue

Debo: I think we sould go left

Karan: let me see…are you sure?

CUT TO PREM AND MUKTI

Prem: where?

Mukti: right..

Prem: are you sure?

Mukti: yea…who bag mein kya hai? Bomb hai kya?

Prem: ask anything but not about this ok.

mukti: debo ka kuch hai kya? Uska ear ring kya kuch…devdas ki tarah…beer bottle? Tell me what it is?

Prem: don't make noise see the clue…

Mukti: ek bath bathaoo….agay tumhe ek beautiful ladki aake "I love you" kahe tho kya karoge?

Prem: starts singing some stupid song…..

Mukti: debo ke liye na? who stupid karan ke saath romance kar rahi hogi.

Prem: hey that's a dogs bark…chintu yehi kahi hoga…

Karan and Debo get lost

Karan: dam it..tumhari bath sunke aaya tha…I always knew never listen to girls…whatever it is we lost…I will never listen to ur word ever in my life…

Debo starts crying

Karan: debo, come on…I said just said it for fun…have some water…

Debo: karan, what are you expecting from me??

Karan: nothing

Prem and Mukti find the place and finds their treasure…

When prem goes to get the treasure Mukti grabs prem's bag to see whats in it.She finds an under wear.

Mukti: yeh tumahar secret tha?

Prem: dekh liya tumne?

Mukti: you fool, meine socha tumhara koyi diary hoga…

Prem: I bought it for safetly, in case if we lose our way during the night. Why did you open?

Mukti: yea whatever!!

Just then mukti sees that chinti is running to towards them with his dog. He sounds excited that he is about to get the treasure.

Prem finds the treasure and being it out

Prem: 50,000 all for you

Mukti: prem, chintu is coming…usse zeene do plz…

Prem gives mukti a proud look and puts back the treasure in its place.

Prem and mukti go hide…while chintu gets he treasure.

Prem gives mukti a hand shake and says thanks

Mukti: prem, just now in this second…I saw in your eyes, that spark…which….you get while seeing debo. I am serious. Didn't you feel it?

Prem: its getting late, challo

Mukti: ok we will go…first tell me the truth.

Prem: I don't know what you saw in my eyes. But tumhari tarha debo..kissi aur ke liye yeh nahi karthi. This is can say definetly.

Mukti smiles: thank you

Mukti: tell me onething…do you have any physical relation with debo? You don't have right?

Prem: yea I do….i kissed her once in….5th grade

Prem: after debo's experience, I doubt the girls a bit. I don't understand them and they also don'g understand me. If any girls says that she loves me first I will get confused. Then I will try to confirm and think later.

EVERYONE GO BACK TO THE SHIP


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Posted: 18 years ago
#15
awww sooo sweat, its really differnt from other fan fics! keep it up
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Posted: 18 years ago
#16

ITS TOOOOOOOOO GR888888888

CONTINUE SOOOOOOOOOOON

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Everyone is on the Deck.

Mukti is standing by herself and thinking…… "Mukti, shall I tell him about my feeling? Say it, if you feel that way. There won't be any confusion…Better say it, come on…say!"

Just then prem comes...

Prem: Mukti, kya hua? Kya soch rahi ho?

Mukti: kuch nahi…

Just then Mukti gives Prem a scraf…

Mukti: this is my favorite one. Take it.

Prem: thanks

Mukti: kya hum dinner pe ja sakthey hai?

Prem: sure

Mukti: ok be here I will change and come ok

Prem ok.
Mukti in her room

Mukti wears an awesome Red Saree and looking at herself in the mirror

Mukti to herself : Mukti, kitni achi lag rahi ho….Mein kitni khoobsoorat hoon, why should I reveal it first? Usse kehne do…dekthi hoon kitne din chupatha hai.

Mukti goes to the deck and Prem is mesmerized with her beauty and the way she looked.

Mukti: hello, Prem? Kuch kehna hai?

Prem nods and says no…then he starts thinking

Mukti: kya soch rahe ho? Challe?

Prem: ok lets go…

Prem and Mukti go and have dinner


Next day everyone are on the deck enjoying when a small boy falls into the water. Everyone is shouting but no one jumps in to save. Debo asks karan to save him but he says there are life boats. Just then Prem jumps in a saves the boy and brings him back on the ship.

That night Prem and Mukti are sitting on the deck by themselves.

Mukti: wow tum tho aaj hero ban gaye….will you give me your autograph?

Prem smiles

Prem is lying down on one of the pool chairs and Mukti is sitting next to him.

Mukti sings a song : Ek pyaari ki ladki...lagaye menhandi…es pyaari ladki…kaun banega uska sajna…

Prem opens his eyes…and tries to touch Mukti's feet.

Mukti: hey what r u doing?

Prem: That's how beautifully you sang…Mukti

Mukti smiles…

Mukti: tumhe ek baadh bolu…abhi nahi…kal…ok good night

Mukti leaves


Next day morning Debo comes to prem's room

Debo: Prem…prem get up…

Prem: debo, kya hua? Ithni subh?

Debo: mujhe tumse kuch kehna

Prem: bath kya hai?...is everything ok?

Debo: yea

Debo: prem hum dono shaadi karlenge. I feel like that. Tell me is it ok with you?

Prem: debo, ek din mein tumhari shaadi hai. Now and here…How is it possible? How did you get this thought?

Debo: mujhe bhi samaj mein nahi aa raha hai. Some pain in me. If a day passes, I think I will lose you permanenetly. I hate this feeling in me. Do anything. Please lets get married.

Debo HUGS prem

Prem: does aunty know this?

Debo: pagal ho gaye tum? Mujhe maar dengei

Prem: how did you get this idea suddenly?

Debo: mujhe kuch nahi patha, We will marry. Do whatever, but nobody should be aware of it. Kya soch rahe ho tum?

Prem: nothing, are you sure about this?

Debo: otherwise I wouldn't have told you…

Prem: did u and karan fight?

Debo: no, I just realized. Tell me.

Prem: ok, let me think about this. We have to plan it. Whatever we do it has to be before we reach the main island. Are you serious about this?

Debo: pagal ho gaye tum? How can I joke in this matter? Do something. I can't lose you. Please…ok bye I have to go before they start looking for me.
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Posted: 18 years ago
#18
no no no they cant get married! haha i love your fanfic plz continue soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#19
prem aur debo...chi 🤢 neway cntinu sn dear ur ff is rockin
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Posted: 18 years ago
#20
update soon.... cnt wait, hope prem n debo dnt get married lol!!!!

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