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Posted: 17 years ago
Hey jaani, firstly i apologize for being absent for awhile, not leaving any comments and all, but want to let you know that i've caught up and am simply loving the story even though it's sort of depressing at the moment. 😆 So glad that Jai has finally located Bani and has also gotten to know the person she has become the past year. 😊 About time really. 😆 and it's so sweet how he's happy hearing Bani's pregnant. 😳 please continue soon, can't wait to read more. 😃 and once again, really sorry, but i was busy with studying and i may go disappearing again for awhile because of finals. 😕
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Posted: 17 years ago
Good job AD 👏

Hope Bani feel better soon... Wonderful update.. 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
hey abhilasha...............

awesome part..............

at least jai found bani...........

update soon
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: nadia.s

hey abhilasha
so sad part 😭
bicara jai got a slap 😕 😭 yep... its a long pending one... dont you think 😉
hope bani wakes up soon and everything goes back to normal 😃 wakes up soon is fine... normalll 😛 i dont know
continue soon


nadia 😛



Originally posted by: sangitadas

Abhi

Wonderful update 👏 👏 👏 , I can't thank you enough. It's wonderful and I am happy that Jai has finally found Bani, though I didn't want her to be pregnant so early. 😕 i know... real mein aisa nahin hota... lekin kahani ko aage bhi badana hai na.. 😛

Rano's reactions were good but Aparajit slapped JW? 😕 yep...

Thappads falling down on JW in eevry FF, it seems. 😉 this is the last thappad... 😆 i am planning to give one for bani too... for her stupidity... what is your opinion? 😃



Originally posted by: nishiraju

hey abhi....... 😉 very well written 👏 👏 pls cont soooooooooooon


thanks dear

Originally posted by: rongna

heyy please update soon yaa... can't wait for the next part 😊 😊 😊


will try to... but i am in a complete mess...

Originally posted by: ofcourse

Fabulous part Abhi 👏 👏..Actually a very touching one to be precise.
Glad that AD slapped Jai..the way he had been treating Bani was very shameful and this slap was a long time due...though ek slap kaafi nahi hai 😉.. nahin jai is very brilliant.. he wont repeat his mistake... actually i dint want to introduce the slap but i wanted a action at that point... so an action stunt...
Rano's concern was genuine and was etched out well. Similarly Jai finding out about Bani's pregnancy and his reaction to the news was perfectly written. His happiness knew no bounds.
So now Jai has promised himself that he will take care of Bani as he loves her and wants to give all the happiness to her and their baby. Finally he has understood her paintings and writings. he hasnt understood completely... he will understand her and her creations in the course of time...
What will be Bani's reaction when she sees Jai near her and her pregnancy? worth watching... 😆 Will she again say sorry to Jai and would want to leave? do u want to? 😉
Lookign forward tot he next part Abhi...Again my age old complaint that weekdays are getting to me..in fact aajkal 5 days se 6days ho gaya! 😕 this week too... its gonna be 6 days... becoz... we are shifting our house... i wont be near my comp over the weekend... also.. i have to arrange for a net connection too 😕
Rama



Hey guys.. We are shifting our house... I wont be able to post two parts... I will definitely try to post one part.. i dont want to disappoint you ppl... Also... I need to arrange for a net connection... Till that... I will be inactive... Loads of work in the coming week 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
are you going to update before you move or after you move.

please try to give us atleast 1 part before you move


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Posted: 17 years ago
will be waiting for ur update 😃
plzz uppdate soon 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
Don't know what to say or where to start but one thing for sure.. today was the day when I cursed myself most for not being in KS section ago .. nooo not because I suddenly got so much interest in Jai Bani or anything relating to serial KS but the FF here…

Abhilasha I must say you have a great potential to be a professional author.. want to say many things for your story "Broken dreams …" but every emotion .. every word which came into my mind to complement about it get vague or may be washed away in the tears of Bani, Jai (and somewhere mine too)…

Jai & Bani share age difference in most of the stories here (courtesy : original serial) and I guess this is the beauty of this love story… but then there they both are grown up.. Bani is grown up to enough to understand her feelings .. and the meaning of the relationship, she is or she will be in with Jai but here Jai was grown up all mature but Bani was a little kid but how they fell for each other.. it was so pure.. innocent and what to say…

Seeing or reading all that never there was a moment when I felt that it is lust or may be infatuation… (which could happen in general case where a 10 year old little girl smitten by an around 24-25 years mature man who is old enough to be his uncle.. sorry friends but this is the truth…)

I don't wanna blame Kiran for whatever happened. Any normal lady would have behaved in the same manner as she did. May be she crossed somewhere her limits but then when you get angry on something or someone, where you have time to see reasons and limits.

Bani's birthday bash brought a sweet memory of our childhood. Our mother also used to make sooji ka halwa on our (mine and my siblings') birthdays and then put it into cake shape and my papa brought Rasna packet (a soft drink concentrate).. believe me that big restaurant's parties… well decorated birthday cakes and drinks could not even give that pleasure and excitement, which those small birthday fiesta used to give us… after finishing it I am forced to think once again, why we grow up… kaash ke we always be kid.

Now when Jai knew all about Bani's fiasco and the mental she was going through, I m sure he will take her home but one request please make Jai go down on his knees in front of God to ask his apologies and give him Bani. (I was wondering that how about Bani having a temporary amnesia)… I know it is no fault of Jai but still Bani had suffered with no faults of her first in the hands of her mother and then her husband .. though none of them (Kiran & Jai) was wrong. Please make Jai to woo her.. pamper her and shower her with all his love and care..


Once again very very very well done keep going…

I know wait for the next part will be very difficult but do I have choice (smile)
Reena



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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: who am i???

Hiya ...
I finished all 15 parts in a record time 😊 only fifteen... i thot flashbacks were more than the actual parts 😉
The theme u took is so different and very unique,and u did an excellent job ur writting is really excellent and the way u potray all emotions are simply great..
👏 for u. thanks Archi
The story and the way u wrote bani's journey from a kid who craves for love to a women was amzing esp her realtionship with Krishna and Walia Family how she found love nd happiness with them and the way she kept those memories alive through her paintings and her growth as painter,u didnt miss a single minute detail out. hehehe 😃
Jai nd Bani's relation is totally different,all there scenes had everythng they were cute and adorable when they fought,argued ya roamed around and touching nd pained when they were seperated and after marr when both were in there own turmoil nd confused. own turmoil and confused... apt words...
First time reading AD didnt hurt my eyes nd even before he could make into my good books he decided to land his fingers on my babies cheek and he earned my wrath 😡 😡 but his char is good. i wanted a stunt... thats y a slap... it was so teary... i wanted a 'Ah' 😲 kind... thats y 😃 KW saw somethng amiss in bani's life which she knew would be filled by jai but guess jai didnt see the unhappiness in bani's eyes nd also the mental disturbance dnt blame poor baby he himself is in mess.Pia is a good sister ,loved how she used to give time to bani nd Dixit Duo when was last time they were good parents they are worst be it KS ya FF ,useless souls.Pushkar sounds sensible but he also suffers from hidding disorder ,anything for u bani 😆 😆 . I like this point... y dint i think before 😛
Okay Rano's description 3 elderly gentleman 😆 😆 😆 i chuckled at that line,JW elderly 😉 well... that would be the reaction right 😉
Looking fwd for future parts how u will unfoldd the story nd now since he found her out hope u dnt show amma running away from him again making some wrong assumptions after she gains her conscious.Would love to see JW taking care of bani and erase all those insecurities in her life and bring happiness nd smile into amma's life. of course, that is the essence of the story... i mean the future plot...

PS : Hope the slap count will be closed with that one. for jai... i guess the slap count is over... i dont know about others...



Originally posted by: tam2

oh poor Jai... he got slapped... but nice to see him all happy to hear he'll be a father soon... 😳 ... really nice update...👏... wonder how Bani's reaction will be once she gains consciousness... do cont soon... 👏 ...


mixed reaction about jai's slap 😆 everyone waiting for bani to open her eyes 😛

Originally posted by: koolgal

hey abhi........
great part....... thanks
jai got a slap 😆 .........that was really unexpected 😆 .......i know 😆.happy that rano cares for bani 😛 ........ only soul ever 😆
plzz cont.soon




thanks swati...

Originally posted by: ragamthalam0

Finally bani is back ,, she is under stress and most probably jai being there wont help her pregnancy ,, and she mite request to go with rano ,, wonder if bani will think jai came back to her for the baby pls continue soon


so many guesses... these are possibilities... it will all depend on how jai will react to her... thanks for the comments

Originally posted by: Nimmie1'2

Hi Abhi,

Thanks for a nice update; thanks. I hv been busy with work these days, hardly have time to surf net. But it is always refreshing to read your writing. thanks Nimmie... i am happy that my writing refreshed you... 😳

Take care,

Nimmie


Edited by abhilashasharma - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: RANJANA_RRJ

Abhi I am sounding like a big bore lekin kya karoon. Tareef ke liye koi aur words nahin milte except wonderful. Okay will try to do something new. Update was totally Jhakaas!! Thanks for the update!! I loved it. i see a little change 😆
Rano's concern is so sweet. Ufff, Ranveer in a policeuniform😳 yep... for a change 😛
The three men in the hospital and Jai's state were discribed very well. Aparajit slapped him. and even then Jai smiled. He is happy. Glad to read his new resolution to take care of Bani. lets see how far he could go to fulfill the resolution

Mindbobbeling update nice spelling 🤣 🤣 🤣
Byebye
Ranjana



Originally posted by: Indian_Goddess

Hey jaani, firstly i apologize for being absent for awhile, not leaving any comments and all, but want to let you know that i've caught up and am simply loving the story even though it's sort of depressing at the moment. 😆 I know... So glad that Jai has finally located Bani and has also gotten to know the person she has become the past year. 😊 its past years About time really. 😆 and it's so sweet how he's happy hearing Bani's pregnant. 😳 please continue soon, can't wait to read more. 😃 and once again, really sorry, but i was busy with studying and i may go disappearing again for awhile because of finals. 😕 enjoy reading... 😉 😆



Originally posted by: nema123

Good job AD 👏 thanks

Hope Bani feel better soon... she needs to... that too when she is going to be under jai's constant scrutiny... Wonderful update.. 👏 👏 👏



Originally posted by: culgal86

hey abhilasha...............

awesome part..............

at least jai found bani........... yep... he found out...

update soon



Originally posted by: gaurifan

Don't know what to say or where to start but one thing for sure.. today was the day when I cursed myself most for not being in KS section ago .. nooo not because I suddenly got so much interest in Jai Bani or anything relating to serial KS but the FF here… FFs here are always too good.. only section... where FFs still keeping the life of the forum... after the charm of the original died...

Abhilasha I must say you have a great potential to be a professional author.. want to say many things for your story "Broken dreams …" but every emotion .. every word which came into my mind to complement about it get vague or may be washed away in the tears of Bani, Jai (and somewhere mine too)… i know... i mixed a pretty large amount of emotions... 😛

Jai & Bani share age difference in most of the stories here (courtesy : original serial) and I guess this is the beauty of this love story… but then there they both are grown up.. Bani is grown up to enough to understand her feelings .. and the meaning of the relationship, she is or she will be in with Jai but here Jai was grown up all mature but Bani was a little kid but how they fell for each other.. it was so pure.. innocent and what to say… thanks ☺️

Seeing or reading all that never there was a moment when I felt that it is lust or may be infatuation… (which could happen in general case where a 10 year old little girl smitten by an around 24-25 years mature man who is old enough to be his uncle.. sorry friends but this is the truth…) i would say... in bani's case its total obsession... in jai's case its attraction+fondness+love

I don't wanna blame Kiran for whatever happened. Any normal lady would have behaved in the same manner as she did. May be she crossed somewhere her limits but then when you get angry on something or someone, where you have time to see reasons and limits. thats true...

Bani's birthday bash brought a sweet memory of our childhood. Our mother also used to make sooji ka halwa on our (mine and my siblings') birthdays and then put it into cake shape and my papa brought Rasna packet (a soft drink concentrate).. believe me that big restaurant's parties… well decorated birthday cakes and drinks could not even give that pleasure and excitement, which those small birthday fiesta used to give us… after finishing it I am forced to think once again, why we grow up… kaash ke we always be kid. but that cant happen 😆

Now when Jai knew all about Bani's fiasco and the mental she was going through, I m sure he will take her home but one request please make Jai go down on his knees in front of God to ask his apologies and give him Bani. (I was wondering that how about Bani having a temporary amnesia)… I know it is no fault of Jai but still Bani had suffered with no faults of her first in the hands of her mother and then her husband .. though none of them (Kiran & Jai) was wrong. Please make Jai to woo her.. pamper her and shower her with all his love and care.. of course he will... after all he loves her, leave alone his confusion 😆


Once again very very very well done keep going…

I know wait for the next part will be very difficult but do I have choice (smile) nope u dont 😆
Reena

Thanks Reena... totally loved your comments 😳


Edited by abhilashasharma - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Hi all... How was the week... I had a terrible week with less time spent on IF...😆 Sorry that I am disappointing you people with my irregular updates. But I guess you will have to tolerate this for two more weeks, till I arrange a internet connection for me... 😳

Previous Parts:

Part 1 - Page 1; Part 2 - Page 3; Part 3 - Page 6; Part 4 - Page 9; Part 5 - Page 12;
Flashback 1: (1.1-1.3) - Page 16; 1.4 - Page 23; 1.5 - Page 26; 1.6 - Page 30; 1.7 - Page 33; 1.8 - Page 35; 1.9 - Page 38; 1.10 - Page 41; 1.11 - Page 45;
Part 6 - Page 48; Part 7 - Page 53; Part 8 - Page 58;
Flashback 2 - Page 62;
Part 9 - Page 65; Part 10 - Page 68;
Flashback 3 A - Page 73; 3B - Page 76; 3C - Page 79; 3D - Page 81; 3E - Page 86; 3F - Page 89;
Part 11 - Page 94; Part 12 - Page 97;
Flashback 4 - Page 97
Part 13 - Page 103;
Journey into Bani's thoughts: 1 - Page 107; 2 - Page 111; 3 - Page 114; 4 - Page 118
Part 14 - Page 120; Part 15A - Page 125;

Here goes the next part-

Part 15B

Young Bani was returning back to her home as usual. Jai stopped her from behind saying he would drop her at her house. Bani waited for Jai to bring his cycle. As usual, she took care to sit in the cycle. Jai started riding. Bani was speaking this and that while Jai was riding. Suddenly at one moment, Bani lost her balance and fell down. Jai rode away without knowing that Bani was left behind. She was so caught up in the pain that she swallowed to control it that when he raised her head to look up, Jai was totally out of sight. Bani looked around everywhere. She was lying in the road alone. She stood up on her feet and looked in the direction where she was going…… Suddenly she was caught up in a swirl and she was taken to a different place…. Bani looked around to see a different place. Never in her life, had she been to such a place… She looked around…. It was so rocky. She climbed and walked in some way where her feet let… Atlast she became tired and sat at one point of time. She was panting heavily. Suddenly, she heard someone calling her. Bani turned to the direction of the voice. Her eyes widened.

"Aunty…!!!!!" She exclaimed. She saw Uday uncle following Krishna aunty.

"Tum yahaan kya kar rahi ho?" Krishna asked.

Bani then realized where she was. "Pata nahin… yahaan kaise aa gayi!!!"

"Jai kahaan hai?" Krishna asked.

Bani pouted her lips. "Woh mujhe chodkar chala gaya!!!"

Uday laughed.

Bani frowned and asked, "Aap has kyun rahe hai?"

"Tumhari baat sunkar…"

"Kyun?" Bani frowned again.

"Jai tumhein chodkar kahaan ja sakta hai? Ek din tumhare paas hi toh aana hai use…" Uday said affectionately, yet mischievously and teasingly.

Bani for a second was surprised, then said, "Woh… mere paas aayega…?!!" Then, after a thought, she added, "Nahin, nahin… woh mere paas nahin aayega…"

"Aise kaise?" Uday and Krishna asked in unison.

Bani looked at both of them and blinked, "Use main pasand hi nahin hoon… Woh mere paas nahin aayega…" she said softly shaking her head.

Krishna felt bad for her. She came near Bani. She affectionately held her face in her palms. "Meri baat par bharosa hai na tumhein?" She asked. Bani thought for a split second and nodded her head. "Main keh rahi hoon, woh zaroor aayega…"

Bani repeated with her head lowered, "Woh nahin aayega…"

"Woh zaroor aayega…" Krishna repeated.

"Hum zabardasti nahin kar sakte…" Bani said looking at Krishna.

"Zabardasti kyun? Woh khud hi aayega…" Krishna said confidently. "Jab woh aayega, tum uska khayal rakhoge na?" Krishna asked.

"Woh mere paas nahin aayega…" Bani said and ran away from both of them… She ran and ran paying no heed to Krishna's and Uday's voices calling her from behind… She ran and ran till she fell down flat on her face…

Bani opened her eyes all of a sudden. She saw a ceiling. She felt her eyes heavy. They closed by themselves. She tried to keep her eyes open. Slowly, she sensed pain in her right hand. She tried to fold it, but she felt her arms heavy. She turned to her right. Her eyes widened and then her forehead frowned. She blinked her eyes continuously and saw the person sleeping with his head placed near her right arm seated in a chair nearby. She was not able to believe. But the question was – what was he doing here? Was he here because she had got hurt because of him? Or was it because aunty and uncle wanted him to be here? She did not know the answers. She just stared at the face lying beside her, blinking occasionally.

***

Jai opened his eyes once to see whether Bani was sleeping and then closed his eyes immediately. Then, he realized that Bani was awake. He opened his eyes immediately and looked at her – she was staring at his face. Jai lifted his face from the bed and sat in a proper position in the chair. He smiled lazily at Bani. But Bani continued to stare at him. Jai took a deep breath and sighed. He pulled the chair beside the bed and brought his face near Bani. He places his hand on her forhead and stroked her forehead to her hair.

"Good Morning…" Jai said as he stroked.

Bani's eyes were heavy, yet she tried to keep it open.

Jai waited for Bani to say something. But, she did not. He smiled at her and said, "Ghar chalein?"

Aligarh was the first thing that came to Bani's mind as soon as Jai said, 'Ghar chalein?'

Bani asked softly, "Aap… aap mujhe le jaayenge?" she asked referring to Aligarh.

Jai was puzzled at her question. He tried to hide his thoughts. "Haan…" he smiled at her.

"Lekin…" Bani frowned.

"Lekin, kya?" Jai asked softly.

"Lekin, aap toh mere saath aana pasand nahin karenge… Aap toh mujhe chodke chale gaye?" Bani blinked and asked.

Shock was a mild word to describe Jai's condition. He cleared his throat and managed to ask, "Main… maine tumhein choda?"

"Haan… aap toh mujhe chodke chale gaye… Aligarh mein…" she shook her head and said. Jai was completely clueless where the conversation was heading towards. He just let his ears to what Bani was speaking. "Agar ek baar batate ki main aapko pareshan kar rahi hoon, toh main aapko pareshaan nahin karti naa… chodke jaane ki kya zaroorat thi?" she accused him mildly. She continued, "Maine aunty ko bata di… ki tum mere paas nahin aaoge… uncle ko bhi ye baat bata di…" she said as if he was complaining and she was explaining.

Jai swallowed. Then, he managed to ask, "Unhone kya kaha?"

Bani said softly, "Unhone kaha ki tum mere paas wapas aaoge…" and looked at him.

Jai smiled, "Teek hi toh kaha tha… Dekho, tumhare paas hoon." He stroked her hair.

Bani blinked, "Mere paas…?"

Jai smiled, "Haan… tumhare paas…"

They both looked at each other for sometime.

Jai recovered and said, "Main doctor ko dekhke aata hoon…" He got up from the chair and walked towards the door.

He stopped on his tracks, when he heard Bani saying, "Aap bhi mere saath Aligarh aayenge?"

"Aligarh?" He turned and asked her.

"Haan… hum Aligarh hi toh jaa rahe hai?" Bani asked back.

Jai looked at her for sometime wondering what to say. But Bani mistook his silence.

She said, "Toh aap nahin aayenge?"

Jai answered immediately, "Kyun nahin aaonga? Zaroor aaonga… Tum rest lo. Main abhi doctor se milke aata hoon. Teek hai?" Bani nodded her head and Jai left the room.

Bani was left with her thoughts wandering around Aligarh.

***

Jai closed the door behind him and stood at the door for sometime. He tried to understand what Bani was speaking about. Suddenly Aligarh? After so many years? Why, today? He could say something was running in her mind, but was not able to understand it or guess it. He just prayed that he could handle her questions for time being. He walked towards Doctor's cabin.

***

When he returned back to the room, Bani was sleeping. Jai did not want to disturb her. Suddenly, he remembered, that he did not tell Bani about her pregnancy. But… Will she take it in a positive way? Later decided, when she was ready to take his words, he would inform her.

***

When Bani woke up again, she saw Jai sitting in front of her. He smiled at her as soon as she opened her eyes.

He came to her and said, "Doctor ne ghar jaane ka permission de diya…"

Bani's face brightened. She tried to sit on the bed. But Jai stopped her. "Doctor ne kaha kit um bahut kamzoor ho… Tab tak journey nahin kar sakti…"

Her face fell and she asked, "Toh hum kahaan jaayenge?"

"Apna ghar hai na, Mumbai mein…" Jai said.

Bani remembered the house and kept quiet. Jai understood that she was not willing to come to the house.

Jai said softly, "Main tumhein Aligarh le jaaonga, Bani… Promise…"

"Pakka?" Bani asked.

Jai smiled and said, "Pakka."

Bani smiled a little.

Jai felt relieved and said, "Main discharge papers collect karke aata hoon. Teek hai?" Bani nodded and he turned to leave the room.

Bani stopped from behind. "Jai… mujhe bhook lagi hai…"

Jai stopped where he was. Did he hear right? Did Bani really call him by his name? He turned back. He asked her, "Kya?"

She said, "Mujhe bhook lagi hai…"

Jai smiled and thought, may be he was dreaming. But better, it was not a dream. He said, "Khana lata hoon… Thoda pani peeyoge?"

Bani thought for a second and nodded her head. Jai poured a glass of water and tried to help her in drinking. But he got it from his hand and drank by herself.

Jai kept the glass back on place and went to collect the discharge papers.

Thanks for reading 😳

Note: I guess there wont be update tomorrow. I am shifting my house. So will be busy with the packing, etc.

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