FFThe Foreign Self: Part XXII & Epilogue - Page 9

I was just wondering how Jai doesn't recognise his angel, the woman who hauted him not letting him love any one else?

Yes I have started reading this ff again from beginging. May be I'll find the answer.

Loved it.
last part and epilogue was awesome....Fantastic
Beautifully written...your a wonderful writer Armana
Hats off to you. 👏 👏 👏

I really love the week end breaks that I take....1) it takes my mind off KS and all the stupid tracks (you would probably understand now as to what I feel about KS). 2) Other week end is used by a lot of people to update their FFs and when I come back on Monday to the forums (old habits die hard, though I would like to take a complete break I just can't seem to do so !) I get to read all the lovely updates.

Armana, I have really treasured this FF and as of now am running short of words to comment on them. But one thing, the way you have tied up all loose ends is so very commendable ! The other thing that I love is how you make your characters gray and not completely black. I really loved Roshni's confession to Bani and her realtion with Raghav. and I guess Ran and Nats will go off as two of my fav people. Would love to have nephews and brothers like these. Wonderful, marvellous and words are running short. I just hope you do understand that am not that much of an expert writer so I may not be able to express my thoughts as well as how you write but still had to write this.

I know its your individual choice but definitely a loss for people like us. I do respect your choice and I just hope that you continue to write more for your personal satisfaction and you continue to find your inspirations ! take care !

Swathi

Armana, thank you very much for the most elegant and beautifully presented story of Jai and Bani. I am one of your silent readers and I am so because I am really shy of writing. I did not give up searching for updates during the past few (months?) weeks when you seem to have stopped writing altogether. I was so thrilled when I saw you continue with the updates on this FF. This is just to let you know that there are probably many like me who read your FF and lose themselves reading it but may not realize that you may be looking for an acknowledgement too. Like me they too may not be good at giving feedback but are surely getting entertained and giving thanks to you. I am sure that all the collective blessings and thanks from your numerous silent readers have earned you a lot of good Karma. So, please do not stop sharing your light with all of us poor souls although we may seem ungrateful.
But in the end, I respect your decision and would like to wish you all the best in whatever venture you are currently involved in or wish to take up in the future.

An admirer

P.S. This message also goes to all those extremely talented writers like Sheena_row, Mistletoe, Tintiny, Sanam84, Sabsj, Divan, Kamy, Kripa, Sangita Das, Himali Kokate, Cordelia, Hkaur, Kuttu .... I am really amazed at the talent on this forum and I earnestly hope that all of you continue to pen on this forum

LOVED IT

honestly i enjoyed ur ff
i even read the WHOLE thing over
in on go

I love the way u depict the emotions of each character. Your story was very different from apart the boring Jay Business tycoon and Bani Dixit.. the sister who came to make a name.
LOL

I loved foreign self and i hope u will be starting a new ff SOON !

thanks.

YOUR DONE?
NO WAY !
i wil miss the story dearly
honestly, you had be checking EVERYDAY for an update
even that .. one month break u took 😆 i checked

Even when u sent notes saying you can't update .. i would check.
I didn't care much for other FF ... just yours was so unique, that it was a new thing to add to my "imagination"
Maybe you haven't head of me, but i have two ffs
one that is done and another new baby .. that just started.

I know how hard it is to think about an event and hold the future of ur ff .. or just go wtih the flow
Also taking the negative commetns and adding in
you did a lovely job
keep up the work

Please pm me once u start ur new FF
i read the note, but still
PM PLEASE 😛

Loved it Armana. the most memorable, endearing, tear jerking FF... i can
read it again and again.... you are a fantastic writer (i know i am stating the
obvious but.... )
Thankyou for still keeping the phenomena of Jai&Bani alive for us here,
which KS has just managed to kill :-(
Wish you could have continued to write in the forum... but i completely
understand your stand.

Thanks once again....

cheers
Priyanka

Dear armana,

Just wanted to check in and saw your double treat. You made me a very happy person today, first by such quick updates and then for finishing it.

It has been a remarkable ride for us too.. There are hundreds of readers(like me) on this forum who followed this ff .Most of them were(are) silent, but that didn't mean that they didn't appreciate ur story. I was silent before like them but one post triggered my thoughts and the journey continued ever since. Haven't made many friends cause, I posted mainly on this thread (was probably ignored in the rest). But, for some unfathomable reason, we both struck a chord here. Iam grateful for that.

You are good and you know that already. It could sit here all day and eulogize ur writing prowess but couldn't leave without adding a few lines here. This story had been of serious nature right from the word go, but, I loved the subtle wit you juxtaposed within some intense scenes. Loved the plot twists and for scenes which made you smile and cry within a minute of each other. I also loved ur little details which would make a reader go "Ahh" or even cry (I almost did, when Bani meets JW in the resort).

This is indeed a fitting end to a remarkable story and has restored my faith in love & destiny ( I said this before). Thanks once again for sharing this with us. I know you made ur decision already about not wanting to write another ff, but don't let your fertile imagination go wasted. Not many people can put their thoughts on paper. Definitely think of me when change your mind.

So long, my friend

--aash

If Human Emotions could have been expressed in words, then probably it could have been easier to pen a review or comment about TFS…but you have encompassed so much in this story, that its impossible to put all my thoughts into a limited framework…will give it a shot though!

Raghav, Rey, Rumi, Ranveer, Nachiket, Tarun and Rano – I think we all need friends like them and just reading about these amazing characters made you feel that you have known them sometime in your life…in hindsight it is impossible to believe, that they were just the shadow characters of the story…because with them came humor, wit, charm and breeziness…while very much remaining an integral part of the main theme.

Roshni, Pia and Pushkar – The Grey Zone characters! Penned with absolute realism…No Black and Whites here…normal people who fail and falter like anybody else…and some realize their mistake and repent for it (Read Pushkar and Roshni) while some refuse to do so (Read Pia!)…The best part about their characters was how close they were to real life…in both their actions and reactions!

Jigyasa, Aditya, Massi, Tony, Jaya, Bahadur and Mrs. Shastri – The peripherals...Jigyasa stood apart with her typically, "Elder sisterly" character (very close to me) and also because she was so warm, so caring and so protective about Jai…something in her character just clicked for me! Tony as usual was a rock star! And Massi's (non) Cooking skill was something which really evoked a huge grin…especially cause at that time, Jai was behaving like an absolute jerk!

Jai and Bani – There cannot be a better Jai and Bani for me ever now…in them you brought out the perfect "imperfect" people / couple…in them you epitomized the triumphs and failures of life…the power of faith and hope and your dreams…the agony and ecstasy of falling love…Jai's character especially is the best male character I have ever read till date (and I am not just talking about FFs here…) His mood swings, his brooding nature, his temperament, his flaring anger, his icy detachment, his innate vulnerability, his ability to love and hate with equal ferocity, his insecurities, his pain, his pettiness, his success as a man and failure as a lover…everything was written to the minutest detail…sometimes even without putting actual words to them! Bani in turn was the perfect foil for Jai…both characters felt so alive, it was like a journey with two people whom you know inside out!

The Cathedral Scene – This scene was written early on in the story and has since then remained my favorite…this was simply the most poignant and achingly beautiful moment in this story…something I have read and reread again and again! The story of TFS begins with it and the two main characters meet there for the first time…besides the whole visual description, the interplay of lightness and dark, Sinatra's song…Bani's heartbreak, Jai's anguish…something's just go beyond description and I think this was just one of them!

Passion, Poignancy, Pain and Pathos…

Hurt, Humor, Humanity and Honesty…

Agony, Ache, Aggression and Anguish…

In writing the story of TFS and the characters of Jai and Bani, you evoked so many emotions and penned them perfectly! The underlying themes of Love, Pain, Betrayal and Loss was written with a great deal of sensitivity and understanding and in each character, you had expressed at least one human emotion in amazing depth and detail! Be it Rano or Jigyasa's sense of protection for their friend and brother or be it Pushkar's sense of guilt and regret or be it Raghav's humanness or Roshni's never-die-spirit…these were character who literally grew on you (aided by the fact, you took a good 5 months to finish the story!🤔)

The ending was just as poignant and befitting as the whole story…and so typically you…(That's a compliment btw!😉) Jai getting to know the 'truth' was both startling yet so natural…just went perfectly with the flow!

Besides, the way in which you had written the three's Bani's…Angel / Saraswati and Bani Dixit was incredible! And your description of the relationship that Jai shares with all the three of them was marvelous…His love for Saraswati's paintings…His longing for Angel and his Attraction towards Bani…all being one and the same person, yet so different!

It's a story which will always remain very, very close my heart…and I wish I could find better words to say 'Thank You' for writing it!😊

I am ending my comments with a song (sung by) Frank Sinatra…

Love is a many-splendored thing,
It's the April rose that only grows in the early spring,
Love is nature's way of giving a reason to be living,
The golden crown that makes a man a king.
Lost on a high and windy hill,
In the morning mist two lovers kissed and the world stood still,
When our fingers touch my silent heart has taught us how to sing,
Yes, true love's a many-splendored thing

With lots of Love,

MT

wowwwwwwwwwww 👏 👏 👏
beautiful ending Armana
iv read ur whole FF 2 or 3 times!! 😳
hopefully u'll be starting a new FF soon 😳 😃