My 1st FF: Updated pg 22 May 28 08 - Page 2

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Posted: 18 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: coolgurl_2005

superb start.keep it up.plz do cont soon. 😊

thank-you..and the second part is up!😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: inavars

fab start min!!! 👏 👏 👏 so you're writing a fanfic urself!! can't wait for the next part 😛

okay for the image...upload the picture onto imageshack.com

copy paste the URL....before the URL put IMG in brackets like this [] and then after the URL put /IMG in brackets!!! hope that helps 😉

thank-you so much i will try that a lil later! 😛

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: canadiankudi

i hope that someone who comes out is not roshni *crossing my fingers*...
awesome fanfic....
cont. soon

I hope not..Roshni not due untill a lil later..lol...thankz for your comment hun!😃

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Posted: 18 years ago
#14
min sweetie..

well done hunnii.. part 2 was gr8!! fantastic..!! it was interesting to see the
way u protrayed Tina........!!

wow! ps.. even i hate airline food.. its seems like plastic to me!

plz do continue!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#15
awesome part min 👏 👏 👏 i love the make-up for jigyaasa 😉 😆 and tina seems like such a sweet girl 😛 can't wait for the next part!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#16
that was so sweet.simply superb.hope tina brings them together.plz do cont soon. 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey its a very good one please i want a long one next part that to very soon pleaseeeeeeeeeee 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
#18
heyy that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!
please continue soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#19
Thank you guys sooo much for liking it and here is the 3rd part...will post part 4 maybe later after i get done with my project!!...and plz excuse my hindi im not very good at writing it..:(

Part 3

Recap: Tina comes back to India and everybody is shocked to see her. She really likes her new Mami and is getting settled with the family as she has been in New-York all this time.

J and B are in their room. Jai is in front of the mirror putting on his scarf and Bani is coming out of the bathroom with a very cute salwar kameez on. She hesitantly makes her way towards Jai and takes her brush off the dresser to comb her hair.

Jai goes to the bed and is putting some files in his briefcase
Jai: Bani…she turned around and waited for him to continue in his stern n threatening voice.
Jai: Tum airport se Mt. Abu ki flight par jao gi…aur hum dono ghar saath me chalenge…aur masi ko shaq nahi hoga…Tum vaha ja kar…Casino vala project ki progress dekhlena. (your gonna make her go all alone..wut kind of hubby are you?)
Bani felt a sinking feeling in her stomache, He was reffering to their house. She almost had tears in her eyes and had them downcast and just nodded.
There was a knock on the door and guess who?..lol
Masi: beta tum log ready ho?…Bani beta neeche breakfast kar lo flight se pehle.
Bani just nods and goes downstairs. A few minutes later Jai comes down, sits and starts having breakfast. Jigs walks in with Ranveer and they see Bani serving breakfast and sits down.
Jigs: Bani Bhabi apke flight kab ki hai? Miss na ho jaye Giving an evil grin. She knew that they would never be going together to Goa.
Tina and Sahil along with Anu come and sit down! Rano also comes and takes a seat..she had heard about Tina and had thought she would also be like her mother and try to ruin her sisters life.
Tina: or yeh Rano hain na?
Adi: haan Tina…Bani ki chote sister….Rano just glares at her…Tina gets the point and just starts her breakfast.
They finish breakfast and Sahil, Anu, & Tina decide to go see a movie today.
Masi: beta tum log Rano ko bi saath me le chalo?
Tina, Sahil, Anu are more that happy to take her but Rano is a little hesitant to go with them. Bani nods and she smiles and says yes.
Ranveer is fuming as he looks at Sahil.
Tina: Ranveer Bhayia aap bi saath chalo na? oh sorry I forgot aap ki pooja ka waqt hogaya na? Sahil, Adi, Anu, Jai are giggling…no one put Ranveer in his place except for her.
Tina: ya phir mom ko pooch na parega pehle permission ke saath?
Ranveer is about to say something back when Dadi saves the fight.
Dadi: oye puttar mera Ranveer ko bahut kaam hai…vo mere se DVD borrow karlega movie ki
Jigs roles her eyes at her…while Bani is smiling and so is the rest of the table.
Bani: vo Mr. Walia flight ka time ho gaya hai…Jai's like hmm
Bani hugs the family and makes her way outside to the Black BMW and sits next to her hubby who is wearing Black aviator Ray Ban sunglasses and just looking like the hot millionaire that he totally was.
They made their way to the airport in silence and walked inside.
Jai: yeh lo tumarhi tickets aur hum yaha hi milenge ghar jane kay liye on Tuesday.
She takes the tickets and sadly makes her way to the counter to check in her stuff and waits because she has an hour till take off.
Bani is sitting there thinking about her life and how she had ended up back in the house that she so terribly wanted to get out of.
"meh yaha kya kar rehi hoon? Zindagi mere saath aisa kyun karehi hai…(cuz your gonna fall in love with THE great Mr. Walia)…meh Mr. Walia ka dard samajh sakti hoon…par isme mera kya kasoor hai?..maine to vo hi kiya jo Jigs aunty chaati thi..aur Mr. Walia ki izzat ko bachane ki koshish. Aaj kal Mommy papa ki bahut yaad atee hai"
Back at the Walia mansion…the kids are back from watching their movie.
Adi: hi kids! How waz the movie? Sahil: Dad it waz soo much fun..you know big sis is soooo funnie…Anu: she waz throwing popcorn at these boys in front of us!…they are all cracking up.
Adi: Tina tum bi na…bilkul bachi ban jati ho
Rano: Tina thanks for such a great day…..she had a wonderful day after such a long time…Bani didn't exactly have the time or mood to do anything fun with her. And it reallie helped that not all of the members of the house were as mean as Jigs and Ranveer.
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Our Jai is sitting on the plane also pondering over his thoughts.
"Baghwan ne sub kuch diya, paisa, business, fame, but still there is something missing. Maine socha tha ki Pia ko mere zindagi mein anai se sub kuch theek ho jayega..phir ek baar..kisse ne mera trust tora aur meri ego ko hurt kyia. Main ab aisa kisse ko nahi karne doenga! Yeh pyar to bilkul joot hota hai (not exactly sweetie…wait till your brain gets a load of Bani)….he goes to the hotel and checks in and goes to sleep in his room.

…plz tell me how it waz and if I should continue and ideas and suggestions are always welcome.
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Posted: 18 years ago
#20
just read all three parts
and they are great
cant wait to read more
and hope tina puts jigs in here place 😆 😉
pls cont soon

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