25 years later Updated...Last Part Pg 22

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Posted: 19 years ago
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heya friends

im starting with a new fanfic....its a sequel to my fanfic Determination....In my new fanfic my main characters are Jashiv Walia and his sister Janvi Walia

Jashiv is referred to as Jai as he is the exact carbon copy of his father only he is a much younger version without the salt and pepper look...he is the most eligible bachelor in business tabloids and a womaniser...he has no heart for anything but his business and his sister...he has his mothers willingness and good heart but his dads business mind. He is fresh graduate from Harvard and has just recently joined the business world some 2 years back.....his more of a Bani

His sister is Jaanvi Walia (i hav used this name and lets assume that she is 6 year younger than Jash)..she has her fathers anger and ruthlessness and is a carefree young bird who is scared of nobody and anything...her love and support from her brother is her biggest asset......she is referred to as Jaan amongst all her loved ones....

Bani and Jai are no more as they past away some 8 years back in a car accident and the children are in the lovely hands of Masi. I will introduce other characters as and when my fanfic proceeds forward.

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Jai: Dadi (is Masi)....yeh kaha rahegai....see i have to be at the airport in an hour and im getting late....gosh this ladki...a very dashing Jash told his Dadi...exactly like my munna thought masi and smiled....

Masi: aareh beta thumari bhen aur tum jano mujhe maath beech meh lao....

Jai: Masi mera bhouth hi important contract hai and i have to get it.....if i miss this opporitunity than i cant do anything till next year

Jai: Jaaaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnnnnnnnn?????

Jai: JJJJJJJJJjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjaaaaaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnn nnnviiiii he shouted...im getting late and if u are not her by the nxt minute im leaving

Jaan: aareh bro why are you shouting..meh toh yaha hu...a tall beautiful and very much in her kameez (janvi ke baremeh ek baath bhulgai..she loves her indian outfits but she is very much modern)...lets imagine a katrina kaif kind of girls.......aaj mera college ka phela din hai aur aap rush kar rahe ho....how mean....because of you meh London nahi gai padne and stayed here close to you and u are leaving me....

Jai: aareh meri Jaan....i have to get this deal..papa worked day and night to bring this company where it is right....so i have to maintain it...

Jaan: ha ha pata hai pata hai...aap aur aapka stupid business...u know bhaia i am not marrying a business man...gosh mujse toh nahi hoga..yeh roz roz ka kaam...ghar se bahar rehna..business parties...wagera wagera...mujhe toh aisa pati chahihe joh yeh saab bikul na kare....who has time for a life..ufff....

both Masi and Jai were laughing now....knowing when Janu dear starts there is no stopping her...

Jai: ha ha jaab thumara dream man kahi miljaye toh batana....abb chale...

Peripena Dadi...Jaanu leans forward touches masi's feet and leave...after all they were Bani's children...tradition and culture was instilled in them...

Jaanvi quickly changed into her jeans n top and left...hair all tied up.....

Jai drops her off and leaves for the airport...

Jai: bye hun...tkae care aur no badmashi okay...coz im not here to bail u out of trouble aur dadi koh taang mut karna...and please eat on time...

Jaan: acha acha bro got it....aab aap jaiye warna flight be jayega aur meh bhi.....with that she kisses her brother and gets ready to cross the road to go to her college Xvaier College...one of the prestiges universities in India...(guys i love this name i dont knwo if it even exists okay...)

Just than a black sleek car..a mercedez benz..... screeches its breaks....and Jaan almost in shock lets loose of her new books flying all over the road....she was mad and pissed.."dammit"...

Jaan: eh dhek kar nahi chala sakte.....sheeshe ke tarah demaag bhi kala hai....with that she bent down to get her books...

In the car was the most ruthless business tycoon of Delhi...he was well known of his position and status and lady loves...he was also very dashing and had just recently moved to Mumbai to start up a project with the Walias...his company was the sole distributor of their advertising campaigns......he for the first time had come down to see the new offices and to meet the man himself......after they had been doing business since thier dads times....Rajvir Khanna got out of his car look ing drop dead gorgeous in his business suit...(lets say he resembles sahil).....

Raj: just stared at Jaanvi...very relaxed and not worried

Jaan: eh hello..???? clicking her fingers..kya dhek rahe ho...get my books....thanks to you!!

Rajvir was shocked....girls usually looked at him once and lost their senses to even speak...and here was one who didnt even care...he was amused...and smiled...

Raj: in a very seductive voice...here u go....

Jaan: please dont expect me to say thank you.....look where u are driving mr .....u dont want to cause accidents.....with that she started to dust off her books and made way to the auditorium for the studens briefing....patani kaha kaha se ajate hai

Raj smiled.....Akaash ko yahi phe pardna tha....akaash was his younger brother ...he was completing his final year here ...another reason for Raj to move to mumbai.....

Ak: yo bro...common man i hav been waiting there and u are here.....lets go..u gotta get the formalities on behalf of dad....common budy....move it...

with that the two brothers made way....

Now only Raj couldnt forget those lips ....that talked so much...he smiled....amazing girl..for the first time he actually remembered a girl who wouldnt give a damn about his looks...amzing.....

Jai made his way thru the busy building of the Delhi boulevard in the main street...he was in a very jovial mood...he had got the deal he was working on and also his main marketing contractor was going to be with him in mumbair to finalise everything wiht him the next year or so...things were pretty good.....as he made his way down the escalotor....a girl...a pretty one at that (lets imagine priyanka chopra kind)...was rushing thru the esclator...she went pas t Jai and bumped into him...making his briefcase fall...not bothering to say sorry she just kept rushing.....

Jai: oi..u idiot....

Simran: oh ...im so sorry...i reall am..she bent picked his briefcase and gave it to him...mujhe nikalna hai...i am late......

Jai: this escalotor goes down not up...u better get that right..he was irritated by this encounter.....

Simran: i know i gotta go...sorry...she rushes off......

Jai just made his face....gosh woman..they never think of anything....

Simran made her way to the terminal bagagge area...to find her grandfather waiting for her....

Simran came from a rich background but because she had a step mum she never got along and preferred to live with her nana.....a retired military guy visiting her in Delhi.....Simran worked for the Khanna Company as their operations person....she was very successful but always late at everything.

Simran: sorry nana ji..im sorry..chale..she hugged the old man and gave her a big kiss......

A month later:

Aanya was Janvi's best buddy....Mohan Khadewals daughter....

Aanya: Jaanu why do u come to the temple every friday morning...

Jaan: kiu...kya problem hai...she didnt like to be questioned just like her dad....

Aanya: naak par gussa..kuch nai yaar....but why every friday

Jaan: maa ko pasand tha aur khaniya jee se baath karti hu toh lagta hai ke maa saath meh hai aur sunrahi hai.....isiliye....aur bhaia ki salamati ke liye

Aanya: aahi hamari moden madam pujaran...i didnt know

Jaan: oh shut up...agar college meh kisise kaha nah toh mardalu gi

Aanya: ha ha pata hai....college meh toh toh saab ki heroine hai...

Raj that morning had brought his dadi to the mandir too.....it was Akashes birthday and they had come for the janamdin pooja...and pratna....

Aanya: eeh Jaan dheko naa...akaash...kitna handsome hai naa...aur uska...before she could complete...

Jaan: bade baap ka bigra aulad....tu pooja meh dhiyan de nah......Jaanvi didnt turn to see that Raj was also there..

Raj had noticed Jaanvi many times...but she was aways in her own world to ever notice.....Raj was amazed by this girl.....he had never met someone who didnt give him a second look.....

Raj noticed Jaanvi in a beautiful yellow kameez (just as Bani looks)...he was mesmerised by it....such innocence and beauty...and at college such a huligan...he smiled...

Raj DAdi: kya hua beta

Raj: kuch nahi dadi...chale...

but Raj's dadi had already notiched his gaze and was wondering which of the two he was looking at...both were very beautiful girls...

Raj got on the side while Aakash and Dadi did the pooja at the mandir and Jaanvi did her stuff....this was one place she was her normal self..

Jaanvi....dheko khaniya jee...aaj meh asli doodh meh kheer lai hu.....toh samaj lena acha...meri woh history meh jamti nahi hai aur woh professor uff she wont even give me a chance....agle hafte midsemester hai toh samhal lena acha....

pundit: aareh Jaanvi putar tu aaj phir lar rahi hai

Jaavi: kya karu...yahi toh hai joh bina kuch kahe samajte hai

with that she took her prasad and was ready to go....

Raj was amused and in awe...such a beautiful girl with such purity....kash..???? than who was the stubborn girl at college...koi itna innocent kaise lag sakta hai.....whats happening raj buddy...better be careful!!

as Jaanvi turned..her dupatta coming infront of her ..she couldnt see and she bumped into someone again.....but very lightly....

Jaan: ohhhhh....

Jaan; tum...phir se yaha agaye...tumhe kya problem hai...tum dek kar nahi chalsakte

Raj: eh hello madam....aap mujse takrayi ho....meh nahi.....

Raj must have been a good 10 years older than Jaanvi.....raj was calculating....but enjoying himself...girls were easy for him but not this one......tough luck mate!!!!

Jaan: knowing she was wrong yeah yeah...im sorry....not meaning it at all..she left...and almost collided with Raj ke dadi...

Jaanvi: oh maaf karna dadi ji...im so sorry...humne aapko dheka nahi...please marf kardijiye...

Raj was just stunned.....gosh why dont i get that treatment....in one minute itni shareef hogai.....he just looked on

Raj;s Dadi: koi baath nahi beta...kaun ho tum....

Jaanvi: ji mera naam Jaanvi hai..meh har friday ko ati hu,,inse (looking at kirshan ke murat) ladne...and she smiled....she gave Dadi one of her gorgeous Bani/Jai smile....Raj to khalas geya kaamse...hum chalte hai...aapko phir milenge ...college jana hai....

Aanya said a quick hi to aakash and they left....Happy Birthday Aakash..bye!!!!

Raj Dadi: kitni pyari hai...meri pasand aisi hi hai...dheklo tum dono...

Raj scratched his hair and wispered...mujhe bhi dadi..mujhe bhi....with a smile he left...but for how long he thought....was this one of his fantasys and want or what????..Raj buddy u are about to fall....bigtime

hope u guys enjoy this start off...i will post more later..this is going to be a romantic fanfic of mine....f😳

Edited by Raania - 18 years ago

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lil_desi_goddes thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
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WOW!! didi.. what a start!! it was awesome. i was sad when u wrote jai and
bani are no more.. but instead we have two sweethearts Jaishiv and Jaanvi...
wow!! plz do continue!!

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Posted: 19 years ago
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awwwwwww.......tht is so qute...a ff based on jai n bani's kids.....really hun too adorable 😳 .....n very interesting start 👏 👏 ......definitely continue 😊 .......can't wait to read the next part 😳 😳 ......amazing job once again 👏 👏 👏

but 1 question hun....did jai n bani really die in a car accident 😭 ......tht is so sad.......i miss my cuddles n sweetheart bani already.. 😭 😭

but other than tht....fabu part 👏 👏

lotsa luv,
LiSa
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Posted: 19 years ago
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😊 omg that was great yaar, luv ur new ideas 👏
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plz plz cont soon cant wait for the next part 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago
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WOW.. this is a really nice FF.. aww the kids.. bless.. i reckon in the real serial they mite do this.. i was thinkin of wat mite happen in the future on my way from college on the bus.. (trust me its borin on the bus 45 mins all alone) anyhu.. u wrote wat i was thinkin.. amazin..

Henna x
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Posted: 19 years ago
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thanks guys.... 🤗
i thought to do something different...as i was thinking that if KS was to go forward what would it be like...hehehehehe
hope u like it...
will update more today
love you all 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago
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wow
i loved it
i love the new characters
sad jai and bani died, but love the new angle
cant wait to read more
take care hun
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Posted: 19 years ago
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I love the new character's there all so spunky,
so sad about jai and bani 😭
please continue soon.....
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Thanks Raania. A very good start, waiting for more. 👏

BTW, one gives us flashback and another fast-forward. Cant get any better. Ekta, do what you have to do with your actual KS, I am having a gr8 time with these fanfics
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Posted: 19 years ago
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ur fnfic determination was really good ....this one looks even bettter 😉 😉

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