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Posted: 19 years ago
u know this weight conversation reminds me of a kandy floss episode where this "healthy" actress says, "if u hold a skinny girl pata hi nahin lagta ...but if u hold a punjabi patt like me lagta hai kuch haath mein aaya hai boss!" 😆
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Posted: 19 years ago
Pi - in answer to your question vegetarain food is mostly carbs and that is the culprit in weight gain. Meat is mostly protein so if you eat lean meat and the grilled kind is not bad. Plus veg. food has a lot of fried stuff also - I read somewhere just 1 samosa is close to 250 calories.😭 So vegetarian does not necessarily translate to healthy - one has to be very conscious of what one eats.
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: pinky05

Pi - in answer to your question vegetarain food is mostly carbs and that is the culprit in weight gain. Meat is mostly protein so if you eat lean meat and the grilled kind is not bad. Plus veg. food has a lot of fried stuff also - I read somewhere just 1 samosa is close to 250 calories.😭 So vegetarian does not necessarily translate to healthy - one has to be very conscious of what one eats.


Oh I know Pinky....I guess it's the desi vegetarian food that's the culprit. Coz for the goras out there vegetarian food almost always means salads....I know the answer but I just like to rant anyways! 😛
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: aditee

AD mere friend ke ghar Ramayan paath hai, her Mom pings anyone who can read Hindi so I am usually counted to read for a few hours, by rotation, its a 24 hr thing

Pinky Ya Ad thinks vegetarians motey nahi hotey, come look at me hun......... I am a corrupted kinda vegetarian, I am not supp to eat eggs also, but cakes chocolates sab jaata hai andar 😭

hehe.. if u eat everything, y're u so unhappy? y the cry smiley?

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Posted: 19 years ago
B cud feel JW's clenched jaw sitting at the other end of the back seaton their way home from the airport. Not a word said. But she knew more than a word was comin. She felt angry and upset at the way JW 😡 😡 😡
spoke with T. She must call him soon and speak about the whole thing before it gets even more out of control. T had been a real friend to her all these months when she was alone and trying to make a life for herself away from husband. She was furious with JW for letting him get under her skin like this. She didnt owe him ANY explanations.

They were separated and almost heading for a divorce if it were not for the sham of a reconciliation that he was forcing on her now. She was not physically involved with Tarun. He was this great friend she had never had before. He was calm and shy just like she was and they had found each other getting drawn not in a physical sense more in a co-worker turned friend sort of way. Tarun had been hurt once before he told her, his engagement had broken, and the girl had gone off to marry some one her parents chose. He was seeking emotional security and their needs seem to dovetail so perfectly that their mutual desire for companionship was grwoing into a strong closeness.

Trust JW to misunderstand and ruin everything for her. Who teh HELL is he to tell me what I should be doing with my life. I dont belong to him. I am not going to cut off ties with Tarun just because HE wants me to.
Closes her eyes and pretends to sleep again. He is busy working on his laptop.

Reach home, luggage to the roomS:-)
Aditya greets them, JW and A talk shop, B walks upstairs to her room, decides to go take a shower
The door opens and shuts with a slam

JW(Barks) Was he there at teh airport to receive you? 😡 Tumne phone kiya tha usko?(his usual style no preamble to pleaseantaries no nothing)
B bending down trying to get stuff from her suitcase, drops her clothes in shock back in it, turns around
B(shrill) What is your problem Mr Walia? 😡
JW(stunned at her strong response) What the hell was he doing at the airport?
B: mujhe kya maloom
JWDont lie Banee (walking over to where she was with index finger warning), you called him
B:Mr W mujhe nahi maloom aap kya soch rahe hain, but id ont care. Maine nahi phone kiya usko.(teary eyed) 😭
JW: Bani u dont know what you are getting into. Dont mess with me! (between his teeth, spits the words out)
B: (really irriatated and half sobbing) Mr W stop threatening me, Tarun mera dost hai, agar aapko pasand nahi hai to aap us se baat nahi keejiye. I will not break my friendship. Dont try to control ME
JW explodes, he holds himself with great difficulty................
JW (haorsely, in rage) Do u have any idea tum kya keh rahi ho?
B: Aapko kya problem hai main kiske saath dosti karoon...... we are separated now. Agar maine Mr A se woh loan nahi liya hota to aap mujhe apne ghar mein nahi laa paate. I like Tarun very much. i dont care what you think of him. I plan to talk with him and hang out with him.(cries openly now)
JW shoves his hands into his pocket, paces up and down the room
JW(loud and dangerous)LIKE HELL YOU WILL If thats the case Banee then I will do what i have to do
Bani is sure A would be hearing this outside, but she is really worked up over hubby's high-handed arrogant ba----- atitude..........
B(nonchalantly shrugs her shoulders crying away all red faced) I dont care Mr W go right ahead.
JW:(turns around walks toward like a panther assessing his prey before the kill ands says savagely) Mrs. Walia you have been warned!!!
Walks out and slams the door shaking the things on the table and rattling the curio shelf...............
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Mr W at work, Mrs too though she feels pretty jetlagged, wont stay at home, Coz what her hubby said last nite has started worrying her. Plus usko Tarun issue bhi resolve

karna hai. He had called her last nite she had told him what ever he had heard about her at work was indeed true and she was sorry but would explain things later when she

saw him in person.. B wears a beautiful pink saree with faint offwhite motifs on them. Does not wear the watch miya gifted her, which she had been wearing the past couple

of days. He had looked at her wrist yesterday on teh plane and had met her eyes but she had quickly looked away. Deliberately left her hair open.

Mr A was all apologetic about calling JW about the car loan thing, but insisted that any approvals henceforth will have to go thru JW. Bani suddenly realzied hubby had not

given her any crap for that yet. may be its still stewing she thot...........
Tarun was happy tos ee her at work, her mangal sootra still obviously tucked in, she looked single..............
They both went downstairs to grab some coffee from the Cafe Coffee Day across teh street. Walk over get it, start walking back, wait to cross the road, are standing on the

median, she suddenly notices a white S class Merc just like hubby's windows are rolled up so she cant tell for sure, it stops at the light ahead. T and B weave their way thru the cars waiting, have to pass the white Merc B notices Darshan at the wheel, he nods to wish hello.
B's face pales, her coffee spills and she some how manages to hold on to it and cross

T: tumhe bata dena chahiye tha Bani, I was hoping after I came back from Darjeeling we could talk
B(guesses what he means but doesnt want to go there) Tarun I didnt know I was going to Bk
T: Tum shaam ko kya kar rahi ho?
B: Kuch nahi ghar jaaoongi (doesnt tell him she has moved in with hubby thinking he probably knows)
T: Tum aaj kal Mr W ke ghar mein ho na?
B(flushes) Ha.....aan
T:Bani mujhe laga tum phir kabhi waapis nahi jaaoogi
B: Tarun its very difficult to explain
T (angry) kal airport par bhi tumne theek se baat nahi ki, darti ho kya apne husband se. How can u love that man?
B(flushes again her heart does a somersault) Tarun hum shaam ko baat karte hain, please.......... I have more than shared a house with him the past few days she thinks

and finds her heart thundering in agreement to that statement and her body feels like its been wrapped with a steaming towel...................

Get off the elevator go back to their cubicles
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JW steps off the elevator at Mr A's he is wearing black trousers, black and white pin-stripe shirt, folded 2/3rds silver Rolex, black shoes wearing Sean John's Unforgiveable (aptly for a day like today) looking very much like the guy who might actually own so many hotels across the country.

He has Sanjana with him. She is wearing dark blue salwar kameez, and looks like a million bucks, she better, Huh, she just rode with the boss to the client's in his Merc. Mr A greets them and starts talking with Sanjana just outside the elevator

Bani has not seen them yet, his eyes seek and find her form she has her back toward him, travel up and down her length, noticing her saree the plunging back neckline of her blouse, her hair not managing to conceal it all 😳 😳 😳 With her back turned toward him, he cud still visualize those black stormy indignant eyes, that stubborn mouth, the way she

had looked at him when he ahd last seen her. Nice lips he thought, especially nice when he kissed her..............., 😳 😳 😳 when she smiles her whole face lights up.His lips twisted in self derision at the thoughts his mind was wandering into He had seen her at the median on the road, coffee cup in one hand, her flying pallu and her change purse in the
other, hair flying all over her face. He had tried not to react to that image coz Sanjana was sitting by him and may have noticed any reaction. He had tried to be very cool and impassive about it, until T had joined her on the median coz he was late in crossing the first section. JW cud feel his entire body muscles clench in rage as he saw them walk by the car, B ack Darshan. He wanted to step out and hold T and lay him down on the road and had wanted to persoanlly to run over him.......... 🤢
He had shut his eyes to savor that thought for a minute!!!

Bani's ESP prompts there is trouble in paradise, she is talking with her female coworker in personnel, she suddenly turns around startled only to find her brain was indeed working and its her nemesis........ her hubby. His eyes were hot with triumph smoldering with approval.........She feels heat envelop her under his gaze. 😳 They now travel all over the front noticing the mangal sootra tucked in the saree her lipstick, everything. It was the kind of greedy needy look that struck terror in her heart

She turns away,her throat lets out a faint groan. She turns to the side hurriedly talks with her co-worker and heads back to her desk,
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Bani working away on her laptop, she feels if she sits idle for a few minutes she may start sleeping right at her desk. Knock, turns around its T wanting to talk about her

Darjeeling and shimla slides... start talking him sitting on her desk, facing her, she in her chair, occasionally pointing to her slides. He makes notes
Looks at her coffee, all gone
T: Itni jaldi peeliya tumne apni coffee?
B: nahi woh thoda spill ho gaya road mein..
T:U hate coffee na, tumne chai kyon nahi liy
B:Cafe Coffee Day ki Tarah Cafe Chai Day hota to le leti. I miss my tea (makes a sad face and giggles ta her bad joke, throwing her head back, exposing the slender

column of neck)
T looks at her longingly and laughs too.........
JW(flat and commanding) I am sure that joke was about work.
B is irriatated but doesnt respond, ignores him and just goes back to her laptop
T: woh Uhhhh Mr Walia Uhhh haaan main Ms Di...... mera matlab hai Mrs Walia se Shim.....
JW interrupts signature style with left hand................ Gives his wife one of his hot sweeping stares, " Mujhe Darjeeling ke is mahine ke occupancy reports chahiye in 10

minutes, looks at his Rolex
T leaves flustered
B still refuses to look up...........
JW: (when T is still within ear shot) Mrs Walia next time you choose to flirt with your co-worket take it elsewhere, dont do it in my office.... 😡 😡
Set Mr Walia
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Bani waits for the elevator.
It stops, she gets in, finds JW and Sanjana inside talking and laughing...... (HOW DARE HE! she thinks Obviously his own advice does not apply to HIM)
She thinks of letting the elevator go but changes her mind and gets in.It smelle like Unforgivable. Hubby has a totally expressionless, bland look on his face, one foot up,

hands in pocket, S almost all over him. B picks the other corner..................
Punches the button with all her might.
S: Ms Dixit, dheere, elevator band ho gaya to yahi rukna padega (sarcastically looking at JW for approval).
JW(amused at wife's anger, tauntingly) Oh Dont worry Sanjana, Ms Dixit can be quite entertaining in a stuck elevator 😳 😳 (referring to the kissing epi PART II)
Furious color rushes to Bani's face, she waits for it to stop so she can get away from him.
Sanjana has no clue what she is talking about, so ignores it.
S: Mr walia humne kuch liya hi nahi kal ke liye?
JW(surprised ) oh ya! How about we go after work? lets grab something to eat and then head out or the other way, jaisa tum chaho. (very casual not intended to make NB jeaous at all, but ofcourse it DOES)

In an affected sorta way,S opens her Louis Vuitton bag takes out some Kleenex and rubs her face "Mr Walia I LOVE this bag, its my favorite of all. Thanks for gifting me this" 🤢 🤢
Looks at B, who has already drilled like a dozen holes on the steel wall by now.
JW:Sure Sanjana I am glad u like it! Half the fun in giving gifts is being appreciated (taunt for Bani not thanking him about the watch)
Set Mr walia
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B probably has one of her worst days ever at work. Too much work too little time, when she gets home its around 9.30PM JW nowhere in sight. She easts, asks Tony if JW

is home he says no. Aditya walks over fro his study asks her how she is doing, she responds and tries to fish for some info on where hubby cud be Aditya has no clue so

he declines, he asks her to go to bed, she hasnt changed yet for the night. Not a bad day in Mumbai 78F and rainy all evening, quite romantic she thinks. Done with dinner

walks back to her room stands in the balcony and enjoys the rain soak her face and saree. Wasnt able to go have that dinner meeting with Tarun yet may be tomorrow she

thinks. Its past 11..........her mind doesnt want to ack it but she wonders where JW is, wonders why he gifted S an expensive purse like that why the hell does he go have dinner with his co-worker but warn me to stay away from mine? He's probably having dinner RIGHT NOW she thinks. It angers her more to think he wud advise her not to do something but go ahead and do it himself..................... she cant seem to relax. Part of her warns her that if he is back before she goes to bed she may see that fantastic tantrum of his again.......... but another part wnats to know what he is doing with sanjana.................Decides to listen to some music on her Ipod, her headset doesnt work.

Walks over to JW's room (their room) and prowls around, rain is falling hard outside............. the patio door is open curtains dancing to the rythm of the rain................. Tony walks by she goes over to him "Mr Walia ka koi phone aaya" (nervous and edgy)
T: No Maam Kyon?
B: Nahi bus poocha.
T:Aditya sir ko pooch leejiye.
B:Unhe bhi nahi maloom, koi baat nahi thanks
T:Aap Sir ke cell phone par kar lijiye
B:Band hai (lies)
T: Aap kuch dhoond rahi hai, can I help?
B: Woh mera headset kaam nahi kar raha,to mujhe Mr Walia ka............ shows him her ipod, koi baat nahi main dekh loongi tum jao.......
T walks away. JW had been hearing the whole thing approaching his room
B turns inside and prowls around some more.................Goes to the balcony peers over to see if any car is coming into the drive way..........

Walks in unaware hubby is leaning on the balcony rail just outside his room arms folded at his chest watching her nervous unsettled behavior.......................
He slowly detaches himself from the railing walksinto his room, closes and locks the door with a soft click

JW(softly) Have u decided whether u are going to look for me first or the headset, Mrs Walia 😳 😳 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago

Wow Aditee - you can really build the tension by taking it from home to work and back home - very well done. Really makes me feel sorry for this Tarun guy bechara kahan phas gaya in dono ke tension mein.

Liked Banee's reaction in the elevator 😡😡especially regarding the gift to Sanjana. Before that Jw's reaction when he wanted Darshan to back the car and run it over Tarun. You have taken such care with these kind of details. Plus all their communication is without him laying one finger on her. Excellent!

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: aditee

AD mere friend ke ghar Ramayan paath hai, her Mom pings anyone who can read Hindi so I am usually counted to read for a few hours, by rotation, its a 24 hr thing

Pinky Ya Ad thinks vegetarians motey nahi hotey, come look at me hun......... I am a corrupted kinda vegetarian, I am not supp to eat eggs also, but cakes chocolates sab jaata hai andar 😭



Please I eat all that too...but Aditee u I have always imagined as a this tall, thin business woman type...the type u imagine when u hear MBA...
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Posted: 19 years ago

AD
OK I was lying I am not short and plump not tall not skinny samjhi kya?.........

OK well jab dekhegi to samajh legi

Edited by aditee - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
Thanks Pink
U ARE THE FIRST with the review today

Thanks I let them hop from place to place and let her become a jealous wife again. He is already a jealous hubby so ab maza ayega. Both can fling accusations at each other at least the playing field has been levelled 😉
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Posted: 19 years ago

Aditee,

I am blown away! Yes as part of the AF.. I might be expected to give a great review...but I don't ever feel like its undue... Aditee...I loved this part! LOVED IT!!!

Sometimes its almost harder I think to write those parts that add continuity to the story..not the big explosions...but the parts that develop character are just hard. And you've done such a great job!

Aditee.. every epi, you use some word that just strikes me.... and I think in this portion, my fav word is...'dovetail." What a great word! My fav para was the one from Bani's perspective about the relationship she shares with Tarun. How is she able to have such clarity with Tarun, who she barely knows.. and be so unable to understand or express her feelings for Jai, whom she share such a deep and abiding relationship for! Such a difference!

I loved how you developed her relationship with Tarun. I felt almost bad for him. That bit about his previous relationship makes him so sad....and yet... my sympathy is shortlived. Don't mess with JW!

And Sanjana.. devious Aditee.. how nice of you to add her back in! I like it. Nothing makes a woman more jealous than when another woman comes along... woo hoo.. I can't wait to see this possessive side of her come out. Another way for us to see that Bani is worthy of JW's stature..and that she herself is a strong personality!!!

What I love the most about your FF's are the details... the little ones....such as the colors of the bedroom in BK, the descriptions of the places that they went to, and now the Coffee Day. I could really visualize them on the median...waiting in the heat to cross the road. All of it!! Loved it!

And the LV purse! Woah! JW bought Sanjana an LV.. damn!! No wonder Mrs Walia is ready to claw her eyes out.... can't wait!!

And the end.. the bechaini, with which she waits for JW. She can't be in this home without him.... just as he can't be without her...

and the end.. the ipod.. and JW's remark!? Very, very sexy!!

I love, love, love you tennis analogies!!! Succint and to the point and very definitive!

Aditee.. you don't need us to write a review for you! Love the way you manipulate the language... very, sexy! My library books are by the wayside yaar! I am hooked!

Loved it! Thank you for another kick ass FF section!

xoxoxo

Soap

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