What a fab performance by Ram!! - Page 388

Thanks MM, But I do have to tie some lose end sentences etc. Will do that tomm morning

Thanks for being so enthu abt it

Aditee,
Have been dying... .read about 15 mts ago.. and my freaking computer froze! Was freaking ouT!

Am back..

LOVED IT!!!!! Youdon't need me for a goddam thing! Its brilliant! I loved it. As I said, we are our own worst critics no/.....and if you this in unwieldy and long.. its only cause we bombarded the hell outta you with our bijiilion requests.. all of which are in here....! you rock!! You make us smile each time...

Aditee...

I'll do a play by play later -- course AD and PI are better at that....

Basically....and in no order of importance...

Your research was awesome.. from the description of the hotel to Mr. Kim's name.. to the name of the Bank that Sanjay worked for.. all of it! Gave a realism to the story!


Excuse me.. hello.. that bit about the Jeans was sexy as hello! Damn, the little things you put in. The way a guy would notice that bit of skin.. and its great that a husband would notice that on his wife.. .very intimate..

Thank you so much for indulging my RM and Daadi bit! I don't know if the others would like it..but it made me break out into a big smile.


You descriptions Aditee.. someone might have given you the idea.. but you run with it, and create something that is ALL your own! I don't have to say... I say it cause I mean it. Speaking of.....Everything from the way the sari drapes, to her hair, to her perfume.. we can almost see what JW would! Its electric!
Am I speaking outta turn?

But, what I loved most about this section.. and now, how you've tied up all the sections,.. isn't just how much Jai wants Bani.. and how he's chasing her. Yes, thats there. Thats a big chunk of it. But, more importantly.. and i think this is also what captures and captivates us to read (I hope I am not speaking out of turn on behalf of the rest of the AF etc)... but you manage to bring Bani to life, as a woman! A woman!
Someone who feels desire.. who experiences the sensual aspects of life. Deny it as she might.. and fight him as she might.. she wants him. And wants to be wanted.. and she is growing in this aspect of her life! Often in shows, we see life Happen to the characters... they might have a love making scene, or fall in love, or have a romantic moment.. or even be angry. But, we as viewers, might only relate on one level. We can see it happen.. we often don't really feel it. But with this character, we do! We can imagine ourselves (and sure as hell would love to be her).. and thats the magic of it! And i think, in a way.. the magic of KS.. we can feel the shades of grey of JW and also of Bani. Maybe, thats why June 19 affected us so much. You, in a way, brought bani's sensuality to life!!! A rarity to see.....

Thank you!!!

Ok, enough rambling! Will do play by play later. .hope I made a bit of sense.

It was stellar.. and I can't WAIT to see the game end....! Boom!!!

soap

OMG!SOAP
THANKS THANKS THANKS

Awesome review dunno ki utna achha tha ya nahi but great, thanks.

As usual u three see in him and her what I see


Love

Well Aditee.. its not just cause we are all part of AF.. but we do like what you write.. we wouldn't wait up to read it, and spend the time commenting. I know we are all part of the MAS.. but seriously! 😉

Soap

Baaki sab kahan gaye?
Pi, AD
Just when HW is done u guys decide to exit the stage?

Aditee it can never be anything close to bad when u've written it and JW and Bani are *ing in it...I leave the trust to create a mess to the production team...ur TOO good...

Originally posted by: aditee

PART 14

there is crisis with the luggage and one of B's bags is lost in transit

Do I sense some foreshadowing...

J albeit tired and weary after the long flight, (u see he didnt sleep as well as wifey did)

Poor thing...even a tired JW is HOT...very HOT. And for the bit in the parentheses...now why not JW??? U were telling Bani to trying sleeping 'sweetheart'-I still aint over that line from the last FF.

The limo takes them to Millenium Hilton situated on the banks of Chao Phraya river offering sweeping views of bangkok. Mr A has made reservations on the top floor in the delux view suite. The suite has an elegantly designed living room styled after ancient thai palace in jade, gold and red. The two roms leading from it, one is done in jade and gold and the master in crimson and gold.

Right after I finish reading this I am going straight to the website to provide the necessary visual effects in my mind.

B has personally never seen a room this big in her life and another shock awaits her when she enters the bathroom, fitted with a tub as big as a swimming pool, with gold faucets and trims.

Ask ur hubby dear...he'll get one made for u just like this...u only have to hint at it justonce. Btw who gets the master??? 😳

The luggage guy (kya naam hota hai? help me here) leaves after accepting his hefty tip.

I'm in southern CA leave this one to me...Baharn...

JW: tumhe kaun sa kamra chahiye? (they both walk to his room)

Absolute gentleman...absolute...Bani wat the hell are u complaining abt girl?

B:NO! its too big, I want the green and gold.

Meri tarah bacchi hain...

stands in front, hands in pocket, sleeves rolled up to the elbows

Old news but 😳😳😳

JW:we cud share(softly) approaches her, how can he look so dangerously sexy even when he has just gotten off a 6 hr plane ride she wonders, by the time she is done wondering, he has.........

Trust me hun that's a miracle...normally ppl look like HELL...I'm talking from firsthand experience.

J(huskily) jab bhi tum overhead bin se samaan nikaal rahi thi tumahara, I cud see a tiny patch of skin, begging to be touched" (slides his hands between her waistband and her t-shirt)

JW do u by any chance know if there were any other in business cabin drooling too at ur pretty biwi? I guess then his hands would be sliding around somebody's neck...

so he decides to dress casual a black Polo short-sleeve t-shirt with its signature red logo on his left chest, and faded blue jeans. He decides to chuck the formal look for the evning, shampooed hair, no gel, just brushed back with a casual flick.

Umm so which one of us is NOT excited abt where this is heading...😳

He probably has forgotten all about me she thinks

If only...if only...u have no idea how that would make my day...poor thing.

Soaks and reads a book for sometime

JW wat poor timing u have...bilkul hindi movie mein police ki timing ki taara...

What better time to wear it when JW is not around she thinks!

Oh how wrong u are...how wrong...and best part being she knows sub-consciously she wants him to be there...right then.


Wears her signature pink bangles in one hand leaves the other one bare, and her neck except for her MS gold chain.

Ahh make it easier for JW...very good 😈😈😈

Her heart skips a beat when she looks at her reflection as she thinks of the person who occupies her mind 99% of the time these days.

No wonder he is working on u damnit...y isn't it 110% or at the least 100%

Dabs Clinique Happy in all her pulse points.........

And we're supposed to pity her when JW cannot keep his eyes...hands...or lips off of her???

She walks in waits to be seated, waiting with her is some one who also looks like an Indian. She smiles, and he introduces himself as Sanjay Singh and is in Bk on a biz trip from spore works for some South East Asian Bank. Very young and pleassant Bani thinks. Hewants to knwo if she is waiting for someone, she denies and he asks her if he can buy her a DRINK! She accepts and they proceed to the table shown by the hostess.
She orders a soda, he orders a screwdriver.

OMG where is JW...lol this is far too good to miss...wah kya scene hain.

Bani suddenly feels a chill crawl up her spine and shakes it off as her imagination, continues talking.....

PI I think they have ESP too.

JW (flat)Hi! Mrs Walia
Startled, turns around almost dropping her soda on her saree

His eyes travel over her, tumbling silk of hair, notes the bare back and shoulder beside it, like a solder torch, follows it down her neck and back to her face.

😳

Sanjay:(extending his hand) Hello Mr Walia. Are u by any cahnce the Walia of Walia Resorts?

Aur koi Walia hi nahin hai India mein bhaiyaa...though yea dumb comment I realize because this Walia is in all magazines and newspapers and then some more...

JW (tearing his eyes off his wife, looks a lil uninterested at the stranger, but still tries to be pleasant coz its his wife he wants to kill right, not the stranger:-) Yes, thats me (smiles)

SO JW!!! And JW how exactly do u plan to kill her???

Sanjay:(turning towards B) Banee u are his wife? Wow! I shud have known a you must belong to a guy like him! (kinda embarrassed and sheepish, smiling).

Ok under normal circumstances this would be a compliment...now how much did JW want to hear somebody say this abt hiswife...

B: (picks up the beverage menu in an affected way and pretends to read)

Wat exactly were u going to order him dear?


JW (muscle clenching in his jaw)

Very sexy...very.

They shake hands again.

Did it hurt at all Sanjay???

JW gently shoves B in the direction of the elevator. She tries to free herself but doesnt work. Decides not to pitch a tantrum and acquiesces.NOT A WORD FROM HUBBY.
Inside the elevator JW almost punches holes where the numbers once used to be! watches the floor indicator panel with unbelievable curiosity. Get off, walk to the suite, shoves teh card key and pulls it out.

Atta boy JW...atta boy...

JW(soft, threatening, silky, letters carved in ice)

Game's over, Banee!
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Ok this part I have nothing to say abt...self-explanatory best says it I guess.

OMG Aditee that was great👏👏 and worth the wait. I am leaving the detailed analysis to the experts they do a wonderful job. Will be (im)patiently waiting for the next course.

AD
The hotel is real, the decor is ALL mine 😳 I thot Bk hai, plus in the East they are not asahmed to use Red like they are here, plus gold is so south east asian so I combined it..........
No sight seeing in thsi one.

Bell ka time ho gaya tha, tum mera paper chheen leti as they say in delhi 😉

Pinky and AD

Thanks a lot. AD U are hilarious I love every word, haste haste tu mujhe lot pot kar deti hai.

Originally posted by: aditee

Done girls read it and tell me
I think its not that great, HONESTLY

😭 😭 😭

Aditee it is the PERFECT lead-in...