Fake Girlfriend #3 Chapter 43: Page 23

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gracyparmar

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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Wow that was beautiful and amazing..

Loved the carnival..

And finally they confessed..

Loved it..

Thanks for it..

And i would like you to add a few twists and end the story on a happyhappy note after some 4-5 parts..

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shonUle

@shonUle

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

It is awesome... I never think ki this will end of story...this story is awesome...

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AsthaVerma92

@AsthaVerma92

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Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Please take this story for 8- 10chapters more and den end...

I so love the update nd manan confession nd ther love for each other

Plzzz update new part soon

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divyagarg

@divyagarg

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Nice chappy and nice confession

Plz don't end up now

Some more chappies and then u can end

Update soon

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Sadhana143

@Sadhana143

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Posted: 9 years ago

#85

It was very beautiful
It was amazing yar
Super
What a date
His confession was amazing
I so loved it
Plz continue
Dont end it so soon plzzz

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Kavyashree pradhan

@Kavyashree22

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Finally they confessed!!

I agree with you don't increase more than 8 to 10 even m going for training as the results are coming soon.. I don't know i can even get to read epilogue..

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ROOP0605

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Amazing update

Simple yet beautiful confession

Waiting for next part

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Rachu14

@Rachu14

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Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Hi. Nice confession. Though I feel you didn't do justice to the confession. I m not criticizing or don't want to hurt your feelings but normally the way you describe the emotions and conversations and scenes, I felt you rushed the scene a little bit.

I m not a writer but I have some ideas if u r interested. Normally most writers either end story on beautiful notes or create twists.

My suggestion- how about now you take them to there past. Since they have confessed, how about slowly they reveal to each other how they felt when xyz happened. Like manik can share what he felt when that dadi in India told him that nandini is a keeper and prospose or whatever she said ( you can go back to the chapters and check), and then nandini talks what she felt that time that how will she survive when all this over. You can feel it romance and emotions. also you can make them share how manik felt when that Rahul attacked Nandini, like he wants to protect her forever. I hope u get my point. It's just showing what they went through while being with each other and still unaware of so much. Also what nandini felt when Radhika scene happened.

Again hope you don't mind anything I wrote above. All in friendly advise.