MaNan FF || A Howling Ruse || Chapter 6 on pg 42 - Page 22

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Posted: 9 years ago
I love the way you write! Longer comment coming soon. :)
Edit - Again, I have to say your writing is brilliant!

...but Mr. Malhotra could only recall the time when he met Nandani for the first time.

The first time he saw her smile and kept looking at her.


Their first kiss.

And then the moment he was informed of her betrothal.

I love how you start of with Manik thinking of Nandini, her beauty, her voice, their moments, their kiss, and then he's reminded of the betrothal... which leads to him breaking the glass. These lines:

He crashed the glass across the floor which shattered into a hundred pieces. And he found his heart in the same state.

Only it bled too.

❤️
And of course, no matter how upset they are, or whether they "hate" each other, the moment one person is not feeling well, the other person starts worrying. Nandini can't help worry about him.
I liked their fight. I like that mini-breakdown of hers. And how Manik can't not comfort her when she starts crying. He may be angry with her but the moment he sees her tears, he'll go back and console her.

"I prayed like a fool. I prayed for you each night, every hour of my day. I kept you alive in me, in my memory and you think you are a fool? So guess what Manik Malhotra? You are a fool to not love me enough to return to me. To tell me that you are still alive." With each sentence she said, she found the resolve in her breaking down and with that her physical strength as well. She cried remembering the days and nights when she had ached for him.

For the first time since he had seen her, he found himself weak because her tears could still bring him down on his knees. He felt his hold on her wrists slacked and his hands found their way to her back and before he knew it, he had stroked her twice. When she did not resist his touch, he made her sit on his lap. In that moment all the norms seemed unreal. In that moment she was not someone else's fianc.

In that moment, she belonged to him. Like she always did.

...

Her breath was caught in her throat for a few seconds, then he felt the coldness around his neck and found his embrace void of her presence.

She walked to the window behind his chair, looking at the dark clouds marking the sky. The bleakness of her life seemed eternal now.

...

Tonight he needed to drink to forget her tears.

I'm totally fangirling over your words here^.

Gahhh. I feel like banging their heads and then forcing them to sit together and talk everything out. Manik needs to let her know why he hadn't made contact all this time and he needs to stop being cranky. And Nandini needs to listen to it and tell him why she got engaged and maybe after a punch or two they can get back together. That random fiance can just... go. 😛😆

Oh also, Nandini mentioned Cabir, right? Cabir is going to know both sides of the story like we do, because I don't think Manik is going to be angry with him... I have hopes on Cabir. He is the only person who can drive sense into their heads. 😆

Looking forward to the next update. 😳



Edited by Nickel8 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome as usual.
But babies in pain is breaking my heart😭,i wish everything turns out well for the babies.
Manik,you silly silly guy,just talk to her and get over your ego.
Nandini is getting married to someone else,i am literally dying out of curiosity here!
I really liked how you wrote manik's mental turmoil when it came to nandu.
All in all a good chapter and waiting for more.
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Posted: 9 years ago
Sorry yaar, i just missed few chapters before so need time..
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Posted: 9 years ago


Thanks for pm.dear

Amazing amazing and beautiful update.

Both are in so much pain. .

So many questions. .but answer are in future. .

You penned amazingly beautiful.

Looking forward to seeing more soon.

Stay blessed dear.




Thanks.





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Posted: 9 years ago
god.. Very well written. the more the want to be away from each other.
the land up closer than ever.
can't wait to see when their deep buried love will come to their rescue.
hope you continue soon.
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Posted: 9 years ago
Ohhh
Is nandu engaged 😕

May be that is the reason manik is upset about

Bt m sure she must have some reasons

Poor both of them

Both r in pain 😭

Continue soon

N thnx for d pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome update but ab misunderstanding clear kar do n mila do unhe manik misunderstand kar RHA hai nandu KO
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Posted: 9 years ago
Ohh. Kinda depressing coz i had to start my morning crying with this update. But still quite nice nd i am happy with the pace the story is moving. Moreover my dear manik now needs a stick to move. :(
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Posted: 9 years ago
Why the hell she is getting married to smone else.. And y she is silent wen he askd her that.
Still saying that she waited for him and love him, and then marrying smone else.. Woww.
Just spit the truth. Yasr
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Posted: 9 years ago
Whom is she getting married with?

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