MaNan FF || A Howling Ruse || Chapter 6 on pg 42 - Page 19

Originally posted by: Samilicious..

You make me happy, you truly do. And I'm so grateful to be reading something amazing from you... I say it each and every time because it's still feels surreal. It's taking ages to sink in. I could possibly call you my personal writer haha #cheesinessoverload

It's impeccable the way you articulate both of the characters, the way you describe both of their POVs. An eloquent writer you are with some freaking awesome set of writing skills. The journey of your writing has been incredible you as a writer have improved immensely, I mean it. I really do. And I cannot be any happier, it gives me joy to see you coming such a long way. You deserve this.

Both of them are suffering, Nandini needs Manik just as much as he needs her. Beautiful choice of words- the array choices of words you use makes the chapter much more interesting. It's written sophisticatedly.

"When she had been worried sick, he was gloating. When she had cried herself to sleep, he had busy making an empire."

^A missing word I think? But I'll ignore that because THIS is pure bliss... It's heart-wrenching, yet again anyone would feel for Nandini. And this makes me wonder how come Nandini isn't suffering from depression?

Manik's struggle and his pain/emotion you have depicted it to perfection. If not Nandini then he needs Cabir, seriously... I want him to share his sorrows, his feelings with someone. And after that bomb blast I would've thought that he would be suffering from PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder)? Maybe I'm just expecting either one of them to be suffering from a psychological condition. Haha I guess the psychology in me is speaking.

Coming to his nightmare, OMG I loved it... it almost felt like I was reading Hunger games where Peeta got nightmare. You really did a great job with the description. Vivid imagery everywhere, the use of metaphors. Uff its incredible.

"It will not be an easy game for her, he will make sure."

^Hahahaah, okay I'm EXCITED. Bring on the game... Let the love hate story begin, lets see how long it will take the angry monster to soften up again.

Alright his convo with Nyonika, firstly I cannot digest the fact that she is POSITIVE hahaha. Seriously, its really hard to imagine this. However, I'm glad that at least Manik has someone who cares for him and the fact that he hasn't been alone.

Chachi is a legend so I'm glad that you brought her in this FF... It truly was a pleasure reading her scene with Nandini. I've always seen Chachi has a mother figure for Nandini. I'm actually looking forward to Chachi and Manik scenes because that's something S2 lacks. Their scenes in S1 were just amazing. Ahh reminiscing...

"Sometimes, she wondered if Nandani had been this strong all along. Perhaps the death of her own parents had hardened her core or was it the demise of Manik that made her stoic. She had seemed to distance herself from majority of the people, music had been the only solace in her life to keep her going."

^You SLAY me with your words...

Nandini is getting married, I wonder to who though... Actually I know the wedding won't happen ahaha, Manik will never let his shinning star be with someone else. Though, I think a wedding track will bring jealousy. #AlreadyExcited



^Phew, I finally reviewed it. This is me anxiously waiting for the next one... #CuteMaNan #TheyAreAdorable

xoxo

Originally posted by: Samilicious..

Ahh the lighthearted conversation between Nandini & Navya was a pleasure to read, in fact it was much needed. A small moment between the two brought happiness in Nandini's bleakness life. Oh and I'm glad Navya is married and that is she not pregnant with Harshad's baby.

Haha why do I see a reflection of myself in Nandini? Literally. Though, she NEEDS to delete those messages... I very much would like her to move on in her life and not give Manik much importance. She's already wasted nearly four years of her waste on him. He'll realise her importance once he understands and goes through the fear of loosing her to someone else.

However, I might be contradicting myself here because you really do make it hard for me to hate Manik. How can I hate him? He is behaving that way because he has his reasons. He is suffering terribly just as much as she is, Nandini still has Chachi- but Manik he is just utterly and infinitely alone with himself. Nyonika rings him here and there but, still not the same.

"She seemed to be occupying most of his thoughts after since she showed up at his office. And if he was too busy to think about her during the day, she would seep in in his nightmare wearing the same red outfit."

^Ahh I knew it, the girl in his nightmare would be Nandini... Red symbolises danger at the same time it's significantly important colour for married women. The fact that Nandini is getting married, the nightmare could possible be a foreshadow. Or I'm just overanalysing haha. She is lingering in his mind because no matter how angry he is, the fact is that Manik CANNOT stay away from her.

And we all know the reason why Manik wanted to pay the cheque in person to Nandini, just so that can get a glimpse of her again haha. I don't know if it's me that thinks that Nandini is trying to hide & escape from the reality hence why she doesn't want to face Manik. In fact I want her to be strong willed and face him, if he says anything to her- she should put him back in his place again. The more she runs away, Manik is the more likely to take advantage of her weakness.

Everything seemed so right about this chapter, the character development, pacing, articulate use of language and the telling of both character POVs. It's an art which you have mastered.

Coming to the song, you know I'm a little apprehensive when chapters contains songs. However, this couldn't have been any more perfect than it was. Firstly, I love Pink and this is one of her beautifully composed song. The lyrics, music is such incredible. The lyrics she sang were totally apt, damn it its as though she wrote those lyrics herself...she was singing her heart out.

AND OH MY EFFING WORLD. HE SAW HER SINGING... HE HEARD EACH AND EVERY WORD.

#ExtremeFangirlMode

"Yes. He had, he realized now. He had felt like this on many instances as if his life would never be the same again. To live without her to begin with. He had often seen the sun rise while still lost in her reverie back in California."

^ This could make anyone feel empathetic towards Manik, the way you transition his character from a ruthless person to an lonely child in need of someone to make him live again is just impeccable. The two character itself makes everything so damn interesting...

"She couldn't possibly be accusing him when he had returned only to find her betrothed already."

^OMG, Manik knows already? Okay I'm legit shocked. I don't know what to say. Speechless.

Ahh I want Nandini to return the cheque because that will give me MaNan in one frame together again... I'm already over ecstatic.

^I'm sure we'll soon get them jamming together again... Uff the way they admire each other's singing.

OMG this is long and I didn't even realise it. And it's the fasted I've ever unreserved haha

You are a shinning star for MaNan fandom...

xoxo

Originally posted by: Sunshine2604

Manik is too twisted and unpredictable.
Feeling extremely bad for nandini
Can't wait to know what happened in these years that broke both of them so much.
Interesting update.
Hope you continue soon.
Thanks for the pm.