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aaminah123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#161

Originally posted by: Samilicious..

ACHA 😛🤗 You might?? NOOO You WILLL...

Insha Allah 😳

Oh this reminds me of the conversation we had the other day. Did you happen to watch the movie?😉

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aaminah123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#162

Originally posted by: Samilicious..

DON'T updated the next chapter yet...let me review third one first 😛

Ahh did you just compliment them ☺️ What about these ones? I feel like gushing over these two today 😆

No. It's too.. 'Love me like you do type' I prefer intimate moments, a surprise element like the wink in the previous gif. not the ''behind the doors scene' haha

No.no. no. I will lose my muse if I have to wait for another week. I'm updating in a while.

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Samilicious..

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Posted: 9 years ago

#163

Originally posted by: aaminah123

Insha Allah 😳

Oh this reminds me of the conversation we had the other day. Did you happen to watch the movie?😉

Haha I just finished re watching the movie, surprisingly it was on TV. Damn she is so good, I really need to learn A LOT.

Originally posted by: aaminah123

No. It's too.. 'Love me like you do type' I prefer intimate moments, a surprise element like the wink in the previous gif. not the ''behind the doors scene' haha

No.no. no. I will lose my muse if I have to wait for another week. I'm updating in a while.

OMG OMG OMG, you didn't like the cheek kiss GIF 😲😳 That was an intimate moment/surprise moment 😛

^Uff the way he looks at her...MESMERISED he is. DAMN I love this moment so much, him showering confetti, Nandini admiring the confetti... it reminds her of fireflies You still need to watch this scene...

@BOLD- Wait until tonight or tmrw...I will definitely get the review. I won't take another week 😲

P.S. You will also like this wink as well then 😛😆

Edited by Samilicious.. - 9 years ago

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aaminah123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#164

Originally posted by: Samilicious..
Apologies for the delay.

What I loved about this chapter was the way you described and depicted the characters...Manik waiting impatiently for Nandini--- DAMN what a beautiful sight that is. He is just how I wanted him to be. The use of indirect characterising is freaking awesome, the way you describe Nandini's physical appearance and then instantly tell the readers that she still looks the same for him irregardless of how she looks. Absolutely beautiful. I love it when a piece of writing is so good that it good be analysed- takes me back A levels English lit!

Nandini's reaction when she see's Manik was totally apt... Manik, the love of her life right in front of her, a surreal moment where words are not required. I guess actions speaks louder than words. I was kinda expecting Nandini to touch Manik softly and her hands lingering on his arm. Because no matter how angry Manik was with her, it never stopped her.

"Had she known she would find him three years, Eleven months, too weeks and six days later she would have counted the days gladly. And suddenly, all the pain she had endured, the nights she had cried and the hours she had spent praying did not seem so long, after all."

^ Why are you awesome, this is just incredible.

I'm so desperate to know WHY Manik is behaving this way, the wait is freaking killing me ahahah... I don't know who I actually feel more sorry for. During their conversations I couldn't help but, feel empathetic towards Nandini. The way you have portrayed is amazing, honestly if the guy I loved spoke to me the way Manik did, I would've just slapped him one. He deserved a slap from her. The way you wrote their interactions is just phenomenal, you managed to attain their characterisation throughout.

"God help me, but I wish you hadn't come back to my life like this." She said after placing both her hands on the table.

^ I'm so happy the fact that she said this to him, seriously.

As soon as she left, you gave me an insight of Manik's character ... I guess he isn't that bad after all. But, its the way you write you make me hate him one moment and then the next I actually feel sorry for him.

"And with her retreating back, he saw his life turning back into bleak and dark like the paper where the edges first start to curl up when burnt and then there were only the ashes left behind.

During the last few minutes, he had almost found the reason to live again. He had almost discarded his self esteem and pulled her in his arms.

Almost.

Almost, until his rational mind kicked in and he was reminded of the deceit she was capable of. He then remembered the times he had longed for her and she had soon forgotten about him after he had gone through the worst phase of his life."

OH MY GOD. This is why I love Manik... Manik never behaves irrationally. You've described his emotions, his need for Nandini so beautifully. How I wish he forget about everything for mere few seconds and he embraced her into a bone crushing hug I can't help but, wonder what Nandini did. A misunderstanding has definitely been brewing between them.

I want to know who has been with Manik for the past three years, I want some lovely flashbacks with MaNan spending time together...something for me to gush over. However, I am absolutely loving this depressing phase in their lives...

xoxo

Better late than never!

You know there is nothing better than revisiting the same chapter from a reader's perspective and to know that what you had concieved was perceived in the same manner, even better in a few ways. If my words were able to touch your heart, I consider it an accomplishment when I honestly did not believe in a fiction with these two characters.

Saima, you have just highlighted my favorite parts from the chapters and you make me fall in love with my own writing (If its even possible)

Thank you, for the praise. The honest opinions and the review!

Oh and the bone crushing hig isn't happening anytime soon 😃

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aaminah123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#165

Originally posted by: Samilicious..

OMG OMG OMG, you didn't like the cheek kiss GIF 😲😳 That was an intimate moment/surprise moment 😛

^Uff the way he looks at her...MESMERISED he is. DAMN I love this moment so much, him showering confetti, Nandini admiring the confetti... it reminds her of fireflies You still need to watch this scene...

@BOLD- Wait until tonight or tmrw...I will definitely get the review. I won't take another week 😲

P.S. You will also like this wink as well then 😛😆

I think I'd hae liked it better if he had just tilted his head to a little right and winked at me instead and since it isn't happening, I'm liking it! I just noticed he is wearing pearls 😆

My tonight or yours? Because mine has already begun and I cant wait to share the next chapter! 😳

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Samilicious..

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Posted: 9 years ago

#166

Originally posted by: aaminah123

Better late than never!

You know there is nothing better than revisiting the same chapter from a reader's perspective and to know that what you had concieved was perceived in the same manner, even better in a few ways. If my words were able to touch your heart, I consider it an accomplishment when I honestly did not believe in a fiction with these two characters.

Saima, you have just highlighted my favorite parts from the chapters and you make me fall in love with my own writing (If its even possible)

Thank you, for the praise. The honest opinions and the review!

Oh and the bone crushing hug isn't happening anytime soon 😃

@Bold- Do you believe it now?? Even though you haven't even seen all their scenes, you've depicted the characters perfectly... I actually wish S2 was just like how you have written it. Because it's very close to Richa's MaNan. The MaNan I fell in love with.

@Red- No even in a flashback? 😛😛

The fact that I make you fall in love with your writing, it makes me happy... A very flattering compliment. Thank you and your welcome darling! ❤️

Originally posted by: aaminah123

I think I'd hae liked it better if he had just tilted his head to a little right and winked at me instead and since it isn't happening, I'm liking it! I just noticed he is wearing pearls 😆

My tonight or yours? Because mine has already begun and I cant wait to share the next chapter! 😳

Haha how did I know that you will say that 😛😆 Even I wish he winked at me as well 😳
Oh pearls, I just noticed that myself as well, he looks like an Indian Prince hahaha 🤣 They suit him 😛

Jaldi Jaldi, I'm waiting for the chapter...

Edited by Samilicious.. - 9 years ago

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aaminah123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#167

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Samilicious..

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Posted: 9 years ago

#168

Ahh the lighthearted conversation between Nandini & Navya was a pleasure to read, in fact it was much needed. A small moment between the two brought happiness in Nandini's bleakness life. Oh and I'm glad Navya is married and that is she not pregnant with Harshad's baby.

Haha why do I see a reflection of myself in Nandini? Literally. Though, she NEEDS to delete those messages... I very much would like her to move on in her life and not give Manik much importance. She's already wasted nearly four years of her waste on him. He'll realise her importance once he understands and goes through the fear of loosing her to someone else.

However, I might be contradicting myself here because you really do make it hard for me to hate Manik. How can I hate him? He is behaving that way because he has his reasons. He is suffering terribly just as much as she is, Nandini still has Chachi- but Manik he is just utterly and infinitely alone with himself. Nyonika rings him here and there but, still not the same.

"She seemed to be occupying most of his thoughts after since she showed up at his office. And if he was too busy to think about her during the day, she would seep in in his nightmare wearing the same red outfit."

^Ahh I knew it, the girl in his nightmare would be Nandini... Red symbolises danger at the same time it's significantly important colour for married women. The fact that Nandini is getting married, the nightmare could possible be a foreshadow. Or I'm just overanalysing haha. She is lingering in his mind because no matter how angry he is, the fact is that Manik CANNOT stay away from her.

And we all know the reason why Manik wanted to pay the cheque in person to Nandini, just so that can get a glimpse of her again haha. I don't know if it's me that thinks that Nandini is trying to hide & escape from the reality hence why she doesn't want to face Manik. In fact I want her to be strong willed and face him, if he says anything to her- she should put him back in his place again. The more she runs away, Manik is the more likely to take advantage of her weakness.

Everything seemed so right about this chapter, the character development, pacing, articulate use of language and the telling of both character POVs. It's an art which you have mastered.

Coming to the song, you know I'm a little apprehensive when chapters contains songs. However, this couldn't have been any more perfect than it was. Firstly, I love Pink and this is one of her beautifully composed song. The lyrics, music is such incredible. The lyrics she sang were totally apt, damn it its as though she wrote those lyrics herself...she was singing her heart out.

AND OH MY EFFING WORLD. HE SAW HER SINGING... HE HEARD EACH AND EVERY WORD.

#ExtremeFangirlMode

"Yes. He had, he realized now. He had felt like this on many instances as if his life would never be the same again. To live without her to begin with. He had often seen the sun rise while still lost in her reverie back in California."

^ This could make anyone feel empathetic towards Manik, the way you transition his character from a ruthless person to an lonely child in need of someone to make him live again is just impeccable. The two character itself makes everything so damn interesting...

"She couldn't possibly be accusing him when he had returned only to find her betrothed already."

^OMG, Manik knows already? Okay I'm legit shocked. I don't know what to say. Speechless.

Ahh I want Nandini to return the cheque because that will give me MaNan in one frame together again... I'm already over ecstatic.

^I'm sure we'll soon get them jamming together again... Uff the way they admire each other's singing.

OMG this is long and I didn't even realise it. And it's the fasted I've ever unreserved haha

You are a shinning star for MaNan fandom...

xoxo

Edited by Samilicious.. - 9 years ago

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Sunshine2604

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Posted: 9 years ago

#169

Manik is too twisted and unpredictable.
Feeling extremely bad for nandini
Can't wait to know what happened in these years that broke both of them so much.
Interesting update.
Hope you continue soon.
Thanks for the pm.