Originally posted by: AvantikaRoy
Oh god!! Shaadi. So sudden. Interesting. I can see that this ff is gonna be a blast. I like your work. Though the story lines are exhausted on manan, still you try to maintain freshness in the track. And you know,you do it pretty well too.
So keep going. I hope this ff will have a long run. I liked the track and am Waiting for the next updates.
I know you didn't ask but a suggestion for the story line-
I think just by putting vermilion in the forehead doesn't necessarily mean they are married all of a sudden. If just bcoz of that they strt to consider they r married n live together and Manik tourutres her in the beginning and then nandini changes him for good. The whole story is being a getting typical manan FF story what we've seen many a times.
So a small suggestion, if you don't mind. Here it goes:
1) First things first apart from just vermilion, make manik tie mangalsutra also. I know its silly. But it just gives a certain concreteness to the story that they r married.
2) Don't show that just bcoz of this small impulsive act of Manik they are all married n all and the families being shocked and Manik and nandini living together.
They both are practical ppl who didn't want to spoil everything they had and their families and all because of one this one impulsive incident. So they don't tell anyone that they r married or whatever happened that night at the temple. They just go back to their lifes trying to act normal.
3) But it is always there in the back of their heads that they r married indeed. So may b like that we can strt a track, you see. That Manik is angry and does stupid things but still somewhere at some specific situations might feel that she is his responsibility n all, even though he didn't even agree infront of nandini that he acknowledged the marriage.
4) pls show nandini with a little more self esteem. Manik is being too rude to her and she is being ok with it. That's hard to see. Ya, There might be reasons. Still. Nandini might care for Manik, but at least we can show that her self esteem is hurt by Manik doing an impulsive marriage and then not acknowledging it and moreover not treating her politely. So she might put up an angry mask to hide her concern. She might to try to get the old Manik back, still. But not so desperately on the face. But by other means, indirectly.
5) We can have many beautiful chapters of the struggle of mind and heart of Manik and nandini. *wink*
6) Later we can have Manik falling for nandu slowly slowly trying look beyond the face of nandini which reminds him of alya and try to see the real nandini. So gradually he starts loving her.
7) Around the same time manik started to fall for her, nandini might snap off. Nandini may act a bit 'hard to get' at that time. Bcoz she has every right to be after being treated harshly by Manik .
8) We can have a track where at another impulsive moment Manik gets angry when nandini's parents are trying to get her married and all, he reveals to both the families that they are already married.
That can bring a whole lot of twists.
9) We can have a track on how the family is shocked at first. And later they accept immediately after nandini gas cooled down.
As a writer you have every right to take the story whichever way you want. This is just a suggestion. Pls use it if you like it.
Whatever way you take the story ahead, we r gonna like it. I'm sure. Keep going.
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