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Sony

@Sony.K

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#141

Nice and different story.

Please update next part.

PM when u upload next.

Sony.

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Dhariya

@Dhariya_

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#142

Read all parts in one go...

its Damn good

Manik caring for his fans wow

he was restless as she was not replying

Gave her a job

And he kissed her

Wowhh

But this part was so emotional

She is suffering from cancer :(

Manik cares for her

Uff this alia

Waiting for the next Alia..

Cont soon

Plz pm.me when U will update

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sairozkhan

@sairozkhan

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#143

Amazing... But please, save nandini don't let her die...

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Nadia

@naddiya26

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 10 years ago

#144

Originally posted by: Endurance
Nadia this story has great potential .. And with ur beautiful thoughts it's like cherry on the cake ..but few scenes I think u need to clarify .. I am not disrespecting u but just giving suggestion.

When u wrote

Manik you are more famous but the group is our " she said and look at her friends Manik look at his other friends all stand behind Aliya

Navya came forward and beg " please Manik don't change your mind my Nandu will not stay long in your life" her voice shiver

"Why you are saying that?" he held her both hands and shakes his head she take out a file and give it to him

Here u didnt clarify how Navya came and heard Manik and Alia's convo like she was in guest room with Nandu no??

just these Lil things and u can be a great writer. . 😃 Please don't take me wrong I am just trying to give suggestions for betterment..

I hope u won't mind ..

yar i was crying while typing that emotional part . i forgot to mention Navya was there she was talking to DR . i did type Manik let them as Dr arrives skip that right now i am editing it you can reread it

😃

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tania shahid

@tano.mano

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#145

seriously want to kill aliya right now...
it was a emotional and a great update loved it
Lot's of huggiess..
TANIA

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Nadia

@naddiya26

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 10 years ago

#146

"What are you doing here ?" she turn and look at him

" i tweet you didn't replied so i came here "he said and look at her bed which was full of small news paper he naughtily smiled

" liar i did here see " she turn to show he on the ceiling fan it all started flying

"kya hai i was making edit for Manik " she said irritatedly

"i have heard the name who is he " he hide his smile and said

"Manik problem kya hai" she shouted he pull out his guitar which he was hiding and started playing it

"Tujhe tak tak tak takte rehna he smiled and blinked his eyes as she walked down bed to close the fan

Teri bak bak bak sunte rehna he with hand made sign with hand she pat on his hand

I want to waste my time he push her from back she fall on the paper and all the papers stick on her face
Love is a bhaste of time he hide his smile and sing she picked up her pillow