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Posted: 10 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: ..Serendipity..

Aaha...the character sketch is here...n I find a lot of interesting elements already...
Nandini a rebel!!
whoa...didnt see that coming ...
Also Manik's dad being a sarpanch is an interesting dimension to d story
looking fwd to d story


radsy..
thank you for commenting..
Yeah Nandini is a rebel.. Rebel in the sense she fights against what she doesn't like.
Yep, manik's dad being sarpanch was necessary. I couldn't give him any other profession as it was needed for the story.
I will try my best to live upto your expectations.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: samanta175

omg...this seems very interesting...

alya manik's fianc...bt nandini gets married to manik..??!!😲
nandini alya's cousin..!!!!😲
ok...I don't wanna imagine anything...cauz my imaginations r crazy...so I better keep some patience nd wait 4 da update...looking forward 2 it...
nd plzzz dnt forget 2 pm me...cauz i'll b dying 4 ur update😳


thank you samantha..
Yes, alya is manik's fiace but she doesnt have much role. She will be out in two updates.
Well you can run your imaginations crazy and share with us.
I would love to hear and we both can share few crazy Manan things.. hehheheh.
Yes, I'll PM you definitely.
love you.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: apardh_ba

Awesome ff. loved to read the chapters. Cont soon


thanks a lot for showing interest in this story.
I'll continue soon.
Hope to get support in future too.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#44

Originally posted by: dewcute

Character sketch was ...must say...teasing!


Prologue + character sketch = i am confused 😆

so,alya is manik's fiance,but he gets married to nandini...

For me this CS is not less than a teasing teaser,
so,update sooon...

jiya



hahaha yeah, intention was to post to teaser. Then i thought it is unfair to keep the readers waiting.
So a character sketch.
Thanks a lot jiya for your constant support and motivation.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#45
This part is dedicated to Iptisha for spamming this thread with her wonderful comments and making my mission of being a sizzler get closer😆😆😆
Thank you everyone for being such amazing supporters. Keep showering your love.🤗




#1 - A



I committed the seven sins original

As in dreams and reality I need only you

If only you had given my love approval

I would have serenely succumbed into

"Manik... Manik.." I hear faint noises of the woman I love the most. "Get up, will you? It's 7am. Got to go jogging." Pulling the blanket and pushing me didn't work as I slept selling horses. And then a profound kick on my bum and I fall from the bed.

"DON'T YOU DARE DO IT" I warned as I still closed my eyes on the bed, knowing that this menacing tone is enough to scare the offender. I removed the elbow from my forehead and opening my eyes I look at the naked lady on my bare body. Her eyes were as mischievous as I saw last night.

"I told you, Rose, not to kiss me. Didn't I?" I said gently pushing her aside and taking out the silicon filled with liquid carefully.

"You did Hottie, but I want to see if a man who can give a woman best night can be the best kisser too?" she giggled, as she dug her hands inside her hair, rather seductively.

She is class, she is bold. And I LIKE IT.

"Your wish is my command" I winked at her and got close. A little closer at her face as I can see she was anticipating the kiss with her eyes closed and lips parted. More closer, but this time not straight to her but diagonally down. On her curves. She was clearly disappointed and it was my attempt to give her pleasure and forget about THE KISS she was expecting. After a few lollipop minutes of my pleasure, I hear the ringtone of my mobile. The caller ID read 'My Sperm Donor' because literally he hasn't done to me more than that.

'Hello'

'Manik, you remember where we got to go today, right?'

'I wouldn't be running a million dollar company of I were amnesiac.'

I told him that I will reach the place directly. This man! And people think I'm the strangest creature on this earth. They should know that I have a father too. It has been 15 years Maa passed away and I gave her a word that I'll obey one thing this person says. He could have asked me to call as Papa instead of Sarpanchji or even better ask me to come and stay with him in that village and live like a SON. But what did he ask me? To marry a girl of his choice? If Maa would have understood this person she wouldn't have left him when I was 7, would she?

'Hey Hottie, ready for another bout?' Rose asked me as she put her soft hands on my shoulder.

'I guess our journey ends here, we got to check out the hotel' I told her as I started wearing my clothes.

I have my house in the same city, yet I fail to comprehend why I bring my dates on in hotels, never kiss then and never go flesh on flesh. Each day I wake up and think, 'will I find someone worthy enough of them?'

-o-o-o-

I took a turn at the lane and stopped my car at the said building. Clad in white dhoti and shirt, adorned with pagdi on his crown like head, I saw my sperm donor standing infront of the bonnet of his car with his arms crossed. As promised I made on time, but I know he was angry as I came alone not along. I got down my car and clicked the lock botton on my keys. Manoeuvring towards him I stopped before him, as we both looked into each other eyes. I bend down and touched his feet. 'Long Live Child' he said. I don't know why I do this always. Perhaps the values which Maa gave me are alive somewhere deep inside me - which come out only infront of this man.

Within minutes, we were welcomed inside and treated with lavish hospitality. However I did not take a single bite which obviously left Sarpanch offended and the Moorthy's - to whose house we stepped into, a little bit tensed. Now that wasn't intentional on my part. I always felt extremely shy eating in the presence of strangers.

'Have these rasgullas. You'll love it', the girl's father said.

'No, thank you. I'm fine.' I said with a smile.

Now this seems quite amusing. I was well fed and then kept shot the arrows of questions incessantly. I felt like giving an interview then, something which I never gave for a job or even a visa. And suddenly I was thankful that I started my own company and never had to give one. Moorthy family was just making a formality, because for them, I am good looking, rich and well educated. Apparently Sarpanch and Moorthy family belong to the same village. Okay, our village, Morena - which I didn't explore yet. And they have large acres of agricultural lands there, hence this closeness.

'You know Manik, we were neighbours' Sarpanch said.

'And now we will be relatives soon. Our daughter Alya is traditional and moralistic girl.' Mr. Moorthy said. Or precisely, the elder Moorthy because they are two brothers and their wives. Alya is the only daughter of the elder Moorthy. The younger Moorthy has a son, Rishabh and a daughter, Nandini who are twins.

'We are in talks here and see, Alya has come', The elder Moorthy said.

Clad in yellow saree and her hair neatly plaited, Alya looked a typical traditional daughter in law to the Sarpanch. And I can see from his smile that he is totally impressed with her. Having said that, Alya is quite a stunner too. Indeed, one of the most beautiful ladies I have seen. Sarpanch kept talking to her, as she smiled and replied to him, with her head hung down throughout in respect. And I was sitting there, with my eyes fixed on her. I had this uncontrollable urge to speak to her, know her more but unable to decide if I should speak out because Moorthy's are strictly conservative, just like the Sarpanch and his ideas. I wished Alya spared a glance at me, but she isn't looking to Sarpanch's eyes while talking, how will she turn her head and speak to me?

'I really like your daughter Mr. Moorthy' Sarpanch said.

Congratulations to me, Now I will make family with her by staying at atleast ten meters distance from a super gorgeous wife.

Like an angel to rescue me Lady Moorthy, Alya's mother said, 'If the boy and the girl could talk...' and I stood up like an antenna.

'No, we don't have such formalities,' Sarpanch said. And he looked at me and was shocked to see me standing. He was discomfited. But so was I, to let my intentions so clear and significant at that place.

'Actually, bathroom?' I asked, so as to change the topic.

Younger Moorthy insisted to lead, but I politely yet firmly declined. He showed my way to his son Rishabh's room. Now, I had to enter the room though going to the room wasn't my intention. I stood there. Made two rounds along the counters of the room and then decided to go back. And that is when someone bumped onto my sturdy chest.


to be continued...


I'm leaving for Hyderabad in two hours so I haven't proof read or checked for errors.. I promise to rectify any mistakes later along with the part 1B on Monday. Hope to see enough feedback till then.

God Bless Everyone,

Tich.

Edited by Gudakesha - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#46
I named Alya and Nandini's parents are elder moorthy and younger moorthy, lady moorthy etc because they are not so important.
Alya's character will end in 3 updates too.
The only two characters important are Manik and Nandini.
So I didnt want to confuse you all with other names.



Precap:


Manik and Nandini meet each other.

Manik sees Alya in a mall and checks her FB profile.

Manik and Alya talk.
Edited by Gudakesha - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#47
Reserved.

P.S.- I love what you wrote alongside my name! Cutay! Muaahhh!
Edited by BeyondWords - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#48

i am second again?thanks a lot ipti..😛
res😛
Edited by dewcute - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#49
have a happy and safe journey
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Posted: 10 years ago
#50
omg..it seems so much interesting...
MY SPERM DONOR...lol..😆dat was too funny...
manik nd rose sleeping together😲bad choice monster manik...very bad choice...😆
manik nd nandini...pehli mulakat...i'm waiting 4 dat...update soon..otherwise i'll die out of xcitement...
nd pm me...😃

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