For The Sake of Friendship [KaYuRi TS] Pt 2 Pg 3 - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: Katori

This was really nice. Three people trying to sort out their feelings. they sound so much more real than anyone on the show!

Do update soon. Is this 2 part or 3 part?

PS: how can you write so fluently on the phone? Hats off to you!!😃


Thanks a tonnn for your reply!! The appreciation means a lot coming from a talented author herself.
I dont have stuff to update. I have to think about it first..hahahaha!
Its a two part as of now. Might turn into a three part or FF if I am inspired by you.
You have to update with a story first! :D
Umm..I write on the memo like a day or so in advance and proofread it properly before copy pasting it to the forum,. Thats why it seems fluent probably, although there are always editing errors I have to keep correcting. Thanks for commending that! (:
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: _innocent_

Awww nice to read about your Gauri's realisation...she remains upset, as expected but she is also ready to acknowledge its a mere crush and not love. I prefer the Gauri in your story so I've entitled her as your Gauri haha!

If only the makers were inspired by people on this Forum rather than their own dumbness, shows would be such a visual treat to the eyes of the audiences and a little less strenuous to their brains too.😆


AishaJi, Thanks a ton for stopping by at my humble work! :D
My story's Gauri is completely normal. She loves her friend like a sister and considers her so too.
She knows her limits and that she cannot force love where it cannot be.
I would not say its a mere crush, rather it confines to the real meaning of love.
Haha! I prefer her too. Fenil would play her well actually.
And lemme say I could even imagine Rohan and Simran in this scene (:

Would not wanna comment on the CVs and makers because this story is meant for you guys.
They are free to do as they like with their show, it is seriously none of concern anymore x_x



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Posted: 9 years ago
#13

Thanks a tonnn Sutapa! :D
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14
In process of writing the second part.
Will update soonish! (:
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Posted: 9 years ago
#15
Part 2

The screen is lighting up his bedroom and the song is becoming one he recognizes.

Then it all goes off.

But, then starts again. Not even bothering to look at the screen, he answers the phone. "Hello?"

The voice on the other end is hers. But, not hers. It's supposed to be strong and confident, because all he's ever heard it sound like. It's supposed to be light and teasing, and sassy. But, it's not. It's her. But, not her voice. It's shaky and soft, and this is weird. It's cold and broken. "Yug?"

He's up before his brain can even process the fact that he's moving. His shoes are on and he grabs his jacket, not for him. His keys are in his hand and he's scribbling a note to leave on the table in case his anyone wakes up before he comes back.

"Something happened. She might be in trouble."

That's the most he can get out before he's bounding out the door, heading in a direction he doesn't know. "Where are you?" He's in his car as she whimpers out the place, and he knows the spot like the back of his hand. Yug reminds himself that even though she's in trouble, it's still not okay to fly down the streets at 100 miles an hour, no matter how desperately he feels the need to get to her.

The back of her head is the first thing he sees and his car is barely parked before he's rushing over to her. Her hands are folded in her lap, he knows that only to keep them from shaking.

She looks up and her makeup is ruined, her mascara isn't streaming down her face like in the movies. It's more swiped around her face, like she's been trying to rub all the tears away with her hands. Her lips are no longer glossy, like they were only a few hours ago, they are dry and her lipstick is faded. She's a total mess, and her straight hair has descended into the wild mane it usually is.

And, he knows he shouldn't think it, but damn, she looks chaotic in the best way possible. He takes his seat on the bench, and pulls her into him. She initially resists, of course, it's expected. Still, he doesn't let go until she gives in to him. Crying, shaking her head, trying to pull herself back together.

She didn't want to call him, not at all. But her fingers were dialing before she could even think and he was answering and she was shaking again, and now he's here.

Now, she's so done trying to hold it all together, because there's nothing to hold together anymore. It's just her.

He doesn't ask, but she tells. She answers the unspoken question in shudders, in chokes, in quieted sobs. Her voice tightens when she talks about the grabbing, and the taxi cab, and the motel room, and the running, she never stops running, she almost can't get through it, but she tells him anyway.

The air is cold, and he pulls the jacket over her quivering shoulders. She's not crying anymore, just staring over at the sea. He's still holding her. That's when he notices she's still wearing the baby blue dress from earlier that night, the one stopped the whole room.

"I'm sorry."

"For what?"

"I rushed you over here to come and take care of me-"

"You didn't rush me, I wanted to be here for you."

"Even after everything?"

"Yes. Simply for the sake of our friendship, Gauri."

Edited by RTme0w - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#16
Thanks for the PM:):)
That was a nice read:):)
You must have guessed who I thought it was initially, haha, but that was a good end:):)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: PrincessAshVik

Thanks for the PM:):)

That was a nice read:):)
You must have guessed who I thought it was initially, haha, but that was a good end:):)


Yayyy!! Thanks a tonnn for reading it and liking it!! (:
I was scared I was gonna get criticism for that.
But you know, "Pyaar Dosti Hai." toh "Dosti me bhi pyaar hota hai." even if it is not the kind that you'd have for the someone special in your life. Just trying to get that across through my short piece.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#18
This was a lovely follow-up to the first part. Loved it. Surprise ending but that 4 line conversation is the the best. Really liked it.
Thanks for the PM! 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#19
it was soo good.👏👏.😛 It was the Gauri I wanted to see. It just shows a girl and boy can become just friends. I hope they change this attitude of their in serials I have many friends who are just boys. but Hindi serials never show it that way..Either the boy fall in love or the girl.. there's literally no friendship in Hindi drama. I hope they realize it soon. We audience can enjoy cute and touching friendship moments too.. I hope the writer's see your idea and incorporate it... Thanks for pm.. I am now rarely in front of computer..(curfew..) thanks again for this wonderful story and outlook.. hope to see more of your works..
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Posted: 9 years ago
#20
Thankyou for the PM Tannu 😳
Like everyone else, i also thought it was Kali at first
But loved the twist

Loved it
This is the normal Gauri who lives a normal life and has her own set of problems
The normal Yug who'll rush for the aid of anyone close to his heart even if its his best friend

Awesome
Cant wait to read the next part 👏

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