NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~THREAD 30~Chapter 35-UPD JUN 2nd - Page 4

Originally posted by: Tilottamaa

You mean, that just because he spoke his mind, the reality, in plain, simple phrases, sans embellishments, she was compelled to give up her anger?! 😆

And I wonder will this strategy work again and again from now on... 😆

Originally posted by: lashy

That's ok dear

read if you can... and as long as it interests you, I'm totally happy

If you feel like it - one or two lines will do, you know... you don't have to write long reviews and all 🤗

I wanted to finish this one, before coming to ROD and Rima's story... 😳

Originally posted by: Sandhya.A

Her prime anger with AMK is because he belittled her attachments and used her token of love to serve his purpose. It is what you will feel when your friend gives away the gift you gave her on her birthday to please someone else.

No sorry or flowery words would have helped. He had to convey what the gift actually meant to him. And since it was the truth he could get it across easily. He told her that he denied even Azeez a share as he wanted one all for himself. Meaning - your gift was very special to me. Though I used it for my purpose I did not refrain from going against my normal behavior to enjoy it which is what you wanted. That he wasn't blind to her efforts or feelings with which she gave him the sweets. That her sentiment s were appreciated and treasured. Naturally her anger apparently vaporised.

Originally posted by: lashy

Yes I did... 😆 I've realised it takes me an entire day to edit the chapter.

But editing is not just cutting out parts that I feel get excessive (and in this chapter, I hardly cut out one or two lines...)

Here you go -

It was about how he tapped his fingers on the railing while he waited for the merchants to finish

Sliding his palm over the railing, Akbar gently tapped his fingers. Once.

Clink! It made a different kind of melody - the metal from the bottom of his ring against the stone of the railing. So, he did it again.

And again.

Merely something to keep him diverted, since the rest of the merchants were busy making routine enquiries with the Sahiba.

Why editing takes me so long... is because I carefully comb through every line for words that tend to get repeated often - once, look, like, time, every, more again, etc that wouldn't sound good if repeated too often unless the repition is deliberate. (I keep such words restricted to 10-15 times per update or I search for alternatives)

Then I search for phrases e.g just then, of course, nevertheless, yet and still to make sure I haven't repeated them more than twice or thrice in an update... (I tend to get carried away)

Then I comb for punctuation.

It just makes for good writing form.

Then there are those tricky parts (subtle ones) like their hush non face-to-face conversations on the stairs - the words for which, I go back and forth and back and forth with. 😆

So, it's not just cutting out 😃

What I have with me, the first time I've said 'appa... finished writing' overall might look similar to the finished product... but the end-product is vastly better, in my opinion.😳

Originally posted by: Kalgi22

Until saw the red lines.

Originally posted by: --cute.manasi--

those cruel red lines...😡😭

Lashy Sahiba, the laddus truly could not match the sweetness of C35!

The sweetness of her gesture, to have the best quality piece of furniture for her Khan Sahib! ❤️

The sweetness of his gesture , making her feel like the Lady of the House again! ❤️

The sweetness of his lies , to safeguard her paradise ❤️

The sweetness of his confession , that earned him his lady's smile ❤️

The sweetness of the name Samarth Singh banna ,leaving our Baisa in a lovely daze ❤️

Such a deliciously romantic treat can only be served by none other than our darling author -the lady who lives and breathes romance! 👏 🤗 🤗 🤗

Congrats on moving into House No.30!