The riddle of death... (end) - Page 38

Originally posted by: Senapatichandri

hmmm chintay fele dili maa...

ki boli bolto...my head jammed just because i read ur update then write mine n posted!!! fffeeww!!!! 😵

😆😆Besh hoeche... 😛

ufff tird...tai ebar ektu choto comment dicchi...

jalal is investigation...hmmm maan singh rude confident but not worried on his father's death...hmmm...sukanya's lover bribed by her father or may be killed...hmmm...jalal n bharmal was heated argument...bharmal want to free his daughter's would be hubby (god whats his name) bcz his father is his invester...Mukesh ambani marka..jno jail theke bar na korle jio r tower sotti e 4G chole asbe... 🤣 erkm business man ra kukrer leg er mto clip die try korleo tera to tera e...

bt jalal determind and loyal contry so no chance fr bharmal...

Bharmal's daughter na niece... Meye r sathe osob korar sahos nei bhoy pay. 😆 Thik bolecho. 😛 Tobe... wait and watch! 😉

nice update...taratari Desirinied love ta update de...amar hath chulkacche...toke marbo nahole...ichguard lagieo fol hoini...

Destined love New Life sob July e... Sorry... Can't help. 😆

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

chaloo finally jalal investigation pe toh lga 🤣

"I know!" Maan responded. "If you have anything to ask please do it fast, I have pretty works to do!"

this behavior of maan is extra cool type, he is reacting as his father's death didnt matter him even a bit, he was his father at last

Maan smiled sarcastically. "You are very much welcome to interrogate me, Jalal Bhaiya... but don't waste my time this way!"

jalal jiju jyada achha lagta 🤣

"Well, I had closed my door so each and every details of sound-wave may not catch my ear; I was only distracted when Kaki started screaming. I heard nothing before that. " Maan answered in a taunting voice.

pta lagta hai maan jo ka bhai hai...kite easily jalal ko handle kar rha hai...just like some expert...🤣...maan bhi padh likh k koi bda insaan banne wala hai 🤣

"I am not going to tell any name..." Maan smiled.

i dont think Maan is killer but i suspect that he has idea who the killer is

The beautiful face has been shadowed with a pale curtain of gloom and unknown fear. Both of the eyes are lowered and cloudy, the weak glare is the witness of the torment and turmoil in which she is going through! Jalal had to hesitate a lot before he could get into the mood of interrogation. Mrs. Meenakshi Singh was half-lying on Jodha's bed, leaning against a pillow behind her back, still devastated with the shock of the great lost she just faced. With a little cough showing his dilemma, Jalal sat beside her. "I can understand your situation, Aunty... Very sorry to disturb you now, but..."

i like this...jalal being an ACP is still so humble he know how to act with such broken soul

"Yes. His voice was hardly recognizable these days... but..." Meenakshi looked at him with confused eyes.

here is the clue that surya is not criminal but someone has tried to make surya look like criminal...i know i m right here 😆😆😆

"Dadi..."

most strong person in house and my b jodha is on her only in nature 😆

"Around 11-11:30...I had gone to his room to talk with him about the ornaments of Sukanya's marriage. But he was busy..." She told in a very slow and low but clear tone. "I came down as he told me that we will talk the next morning... but..." She stopped as her voice choked and closed her eyes.

agar dadi bharmal se mili hogi toh usne surya ko dekha hoga??? nahi dekha yani tab tak shayad surya ja chuka tha, or waise bhi agar woh wha nhi tha toh how come he meet meenakshi later...means pakka surya is not criminal 😆😆😆

Again a nod, but this time Jalal felt the shivering of her hand very much as he had touched them. Her hands were trembling badly and going out of control slowly it seemed. Her whole body is shaking due to nervous convulsion...

mujhe dadi pe shak ho rha hai

"I tried a lot... Even Rishav himself came here to talk but he... he behaved such a way that Rishav..." Sukanya started weeping. "I even don't know where he is now! Where did Tauji vanish him I don't know..."

poor soul...bharmal k ill nature ka shikar ho gyi 😭 kash suku bhi jodha jaisi hi hoti 😭

Nirmala nodded. "He used to drink coffee the nights he used to sleep late. It was not good for him but he hardly used to listen."

and y do i think that, bharmal was given sleeping pills so no sound come out and may b they were mixed in coffee

So he was not sleeping, he was concernedly awake, without consuming sleeping-pill and by drinking coffee... Suddenly murderer came, stabbed him, he did not shout, neither tried to protest... There is certainly a missing link in between all these.

he should go and see coffee mug on sit...😆..it may work as a clue 😆

21^st December, Night, around 11 pm, Bharmal Singh's room...

in this part i hated the bharmal and like my ACP who didnt get ready to take bribe, even for jodha, who always stand with good 😎

but where was jodha in this whole update expect 2-3 glares 😡😡😡 make them together soon and also update soon before i forget some important clue 😳😆😉

Originally posted by: Tilottamaa

Vanilla ice cream,

Chocolava cake!😲 How you became Tilottama from Durgeshanandini?? 🤣

You know what, first when I saw that the last post is done by Tilottama, I thought I got a new reader. Then after entering I first read your comment without reading the userid (Of course I recognize your comment at one glance)😆 After that I kept on finding where Tilottama's comment got vanished!! 🤣 🤣

Let me begin with lauding you for taking up this genre and a plot as this one - it's a difficult feat in itself. Now coming to the thriller, I guess the detective is yet miles away from the original criminal, and the interrogations have just began.

Thank you so much! 😳 You're right... according to me it's hardest job to write a detective story! You have to keep in mind so many things and angles... You have to become a detective and a criminal both together to solve the case and confuse the readers simultaneously. 😆 This one is just a trial, if even 10% of it is successful, I will be more than happy!... (I had written another one when I was in class 9 being inspired by CID, which when I read now, looked like a comic story. 🤣 so I consider this one as first. 😆)

I haven't started guessing anything yet on the assassin, it's too early, I think 🤔. But then, this tensed relationship status of the leads shouldn't be a barrier in solving the case. I'd seriously expect Jodha and Jalal to exhibit a bit more professionalism in this aspect. Though, conscious introduction of this Jodha-Jalal-Surya angle, was bold of you! 👏

Yes, the story has just started so you may take time for that. 😊 Don't worry, Jalal-Jodha will be alright!😳😃

The primary background of your plot reminds of a novel I'd read long back. It was called Pakhi ebar Bikramgarhe, written by Himadrikishore Dasgupta. If you come across the book anytime, do give it a read.

You got it man!😎 (I wonder, emon kono boi ache ja tu porisni? Bookworm er topmost example. 😉) I read that long back in Anandamela when I was in class 5, and I was quiet intrigued by the family... You can say I have hired or been inspired the backdrop from that story only. 😛

Coming back to the dramatis personae, a good detective never puts anyone beyond his suspicion 😉, so every one is a potent assassin at this point! Some Brownies your maiden thriller is sure to get, for making the victim a despised man, a manipulative narrow mind, that increments the dissatisfaction against him, and as of now, almost every individual related to the household, including Jodha and Jalal has strong grudges against Bharmal.

Sohomot! 😉 😆

More on possible assassin as we proceed. From next chapter onwards I'll try and write chapter wise comments. You have successfully recreated Saradindu babu's fairy-tale like historic style in your own way, let's see if you can do it for thrillers as well! 😉

☺️ Thanks for the complement. Let me see too how you become a Lady-Byomkesh to solve the case. 😆

Till then,

Adieu! 😉

😃

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

I really wish Jalal would've put him in his place! 😡

>> Wait... maybe he will. 😉

Waiting for it! 😎

Seriously, I hate Bharmal more and more... how much has he terrorised those under him!

>> You will hate him more...

-->😕

Who knows ... as the tareek for Jodha's shaadi might have come, he might have hatched plots to get Jalal out of Jodha's life too... he is Komolika and Ansh Gujral in one!

Wow... I don't know either of them 😆 🤣

---> Ekta's most notorious creations!😆

Kitna matlabi insaan hai... sach mein...

😆

Jalal please keep your self-respect and walk out of this place... 😡

But who will solve the mystery then? 😆 Yes she knows na, but now her mood is off na... 😆 😆

Alright then Jo has to maafi maang in style.. 😳

'Sorry...' she whispered sheepishly 'my fault.. I should've cleared this stuff about Surya with you... earlier...'

'You should've...'

'And one more thing Mr.ACP... I can't let you walk out now...' Running her fingers up his collar, she brought him close 'you see... apart from not being want to left alone with this crazy family of mine... you also have the smartest brains tucked inside that handsome head of yours... and I need its help to solve this mystery'

'I see...' he smirked 'so, what do I get in return?'

'Ask away...' she had mischief in her eyes! And Jalal knew he was going to get very lucky very soon!

😉

Really, and that's why I love this Jalal so much. 😃

Jodha's glare in momentary, she is supporting her from heart. 😆

4 chapters and I'm not seeing her being supportive of him! 😔 It's only him doing the running around ...

Dhamaakedhaar review? Stuti Kyaa karein... Jalal naam sunte hi heart pighal jaataa hai 🤣

Originally posted by: --Vrinda--