NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~THREAD 23~Chapter 28-UPDATED 27th FEB

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#1001

Shivangi, I've answered all of Shruthi's koschuns... in a previous page...😃

Savi... your firstest comment... I've saved it... will respond to it soon🤗

Originally posted by: munu24jan
Hii lashy dear how r u?
Hope you enjoyed your holidays 😃
Enjoyed so much that I'm still missing it😔

Okk when I have read chapter 27
I want to write this but somehow my health and time not allowed me 😭
But better late than never. ..
Hope you're feeling better now!

When heera was facing humiliation in front of her people she thought to take her life but she did opposite. .she gathered every bit of her courage and decided to face khalil may these lines of DUSHYANT KUMAR describe her situation. ...
>>> 😲

" nadhi (river) ki dhar m thandi hawa aati to hai..
Naav (boat) jarjar (ruined )hi sahi, laharon se takrati to h...
Ek chingari kanhi se dhund lao doston (frnds )
Is diye (deepak or lamp) mai tail(oil)se bhigi hui baati to hai. ..
Ek khandhar (ruined building)k hriday (heart ) see,ek jangly phool si , aadmi ki peer (pain) gungi (mute )hi sahi, gaati to h...
Ek chadar sanjh (evening )ne sare nagar par daal di, yeh andhere ki sadak us bhor tak jati to hai...
😲
>>> you bring up such poems from where?
👏

When khalil tighten his grip on heera she found courage ..his grip making her cold (jese cold river water se takra kr hawa ho jati hai )but she decides to fight (jese ruined boat water m sink hone tak krti h )she mutly swallowed her tears and pain like heart of ruined building or wild flowers (ruined building ko dekhne or wild flowers dekhte sabhi h but unke akele hone ka dard koi nhi samjhta)...

>>> Oh... someone's becoming a poetess, I see! 😉
But I loved the analogy to the ruined building...😊

Okk I have so many thoughts in my mind will write slowly ...
To be continued 🤣

>>> Sure!!!

For lashy 👏 👏
You r my ⭐️

>>>>☺️

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#1002

Originally posted by: sho123
its 12:45 here and tomorrow have to help Mom in cloth washing that too early morning so have to say good night but not before my chota sa comment on most awaited update
Di I think u should have us double update yesterday as u just left us hang on a cliff yes
I was enjoying the chppy to the core when read and imagine khtirdare of that brute Khalil

>>>I'm glad to know you loved the Khalil part... I knew you would...

When khan sahib priece that metal Blade more in his skin with his foot I so wanted that sahib do that on each and every inch of his body
How dare that brute took sahiba name from his good for nothing mouth
And wish I could cut his tongue If it's tongue wouldn't there then there would be no talk and no revelation made but alas damage already done
Now about my sahib sahiba part that I will do tomorrow
And yes I will give my proper heart review tomorrow
>>>I am waiting to hear more about your heartfelt take on Sahib Sahiba than about Khalil 😈
Still lot to say actually curse about that brute and about sahib Sahiba words will less and emotions will be more
Good night di
And good night all sis

Ok ok...

Washing clothes... early in the morning? God!

Ok you go rest now...😳

________________________________

Catty di still bhatking!

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#1003

Originally posted by: jayaks02

@ Sri 🤗
Firstly, I am so so so glad that you liked this part... I knew it even as I typed it that you would love it... 🥳

Lashy - The killer . You have done it again !!!! Virat Kohli may have lost his form but you have not. 😆

>>>☺️

Just skimmed through the reactions a bit - I cannot believe that people are crying or blaming you. 😆

I think it's because they know it's now become a problem that cannot be easily undone!

I simply loved the chapter and the equation you have created between AMK and Heera NOW.
Loved the arrogance, valour and handling of Khalil by AMK. ( Putting his boot on his shoulders was the ultimate. )

>>> I lubbed it too.. 😈

There is no other way this could have been set. Heera listening to them from Purdah, AMK seeing it and rushing to prove or make matters straight, she slowly unearthing one by one all facts, mighty Akbar feeling so helpless in front of her and finally her laughter. 👏

>>> Ooo... I am glad you liked the sequence of how it was unveiled... how he reacted... how she reacted...
Heera's reaction seems to have struck a chord with most...

You have simply nailed it so well. The mother of HATE to LOVE story will now come from you. 😉 😉

>>>You mentioned this even before the chapter... didn't you?😛

This is brilliant Stuff - I would not have had it even one inch different than what you have done - I wanted a Maha MISUNDERSTANDING to come between them. And remember AMK has to pay back for what he did to Heera in Laddu giving episode when he turned her away.

He sent her away for her sake, Sri... 😭 but I know what you mean..

Lashy, Take a bow, yet again !!!!!!! ⭐️ 👏 ⭐️

oooh again, a bow?

Your master stroke is not letting her faint during the entire encounter. Had she fainted the scene would have fallen flat. This one is a wounded tiger now, our Heera. Wonder what is coming up next. 😉

Oh yeah... she was about to fall... she was grief-stricken... but she would NOT HAVE HIM TOUCH HER... 'Stay BACK'

Hope you do not go onto take care of Mahender now. 😡

I forgot about Paavam Mahendar...

And you put Thodarum at the most inappropriate place taking hapless viewers on a cruel wait path. Sadistic Lashy . Really . 😆

Arre somewhere I'll have to put thodarum na... 😆

as for the casting in TV, Sri... SBP? OMG... 😲 no... no... no...
None of the known faces, in fact since Heera is only a 16 year old girl
Unfortunately... can't even take RT for AMK, because his personality doesn't match AMK😕... as you said... though I do borrow from his face for my imagination... 😉

Anyway... as you said, nothing can beat the face we see in our minds, I guess! 😳 we will all have our "" that remains special to us..

Thank you Sri.. 🤗

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#1004

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Shailaja I am telling you... this comment will stay with me... it was beautiful... it was encouraging... and it was from the heart... as a writer yourself I know how much this would mean to you... so thank you for giving me this!

Lashy, the present chapter was very beautiful, poignant, painful and gut-wrenching. Both Heera and Akbar reacted true to their characters. This was what they were going to do, how they were going to speak, how they were going to think, how they were going to feel, how they were going to collapse and breakdown.

This is the single biggest compliment I can receive, as the makers of these two... that they remain true to their characters.. good or bad.. sad or happy... composed or poised
🤗

I felt more sorry for Akbar than for Heera. Heera at least broke down and wept, but Akbar remained strong outside but disintegrated from within.

Hearts have gone out for both... some more for Heera... some more for AMK... but as long as the feedback, is even... it shows that the tragedy is evenly balanced...

To portray that you are strong, capable, and unbreakable outside when you are shattering from within, bit by bit with no visible succor, no hope of being understood, to be misjudged and misconstrued for your best actions in the worst possible manner, and to know that the other person is at some point justified in thInking so, is pathos and tragedy at its best.

So, you cried and making me tear up too? What lovely words Shailaja... in one sentence you've nailed it... 'wah wah' as they say...

I knew this was coming all along but still it made me cry. Thank you for writing such a beautiful story in such a beautiful manner.

🤗 thanks a lot dear...

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Shraddha

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Posted: 8 years ago

#1005

Stuti 🤗

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti
The first part was strikingly dramatic!!⭐️
Thank you dear.. 😳
So now Heera knows the truth of Akbar Khan!! Heera and Akbar's confrontation was heart wrenching! You have pictured the whole scenario so convincingly that it gives goose-bumps...

Awww thank you... am glad it struck a chord with you😳... and goosebumps too, for added effect😛

Heera's mental situation is written so perfectly that one can emerge in her sorrow!

>>>

Thanks for the wonderful update Di... Waiting for the next...😃
🤗 thank you for being here