Akdha OS: Someone Arranged - Page 5

Originally posted by: CindyTruong

Lovely OS ...Payal..👏
but want more...continue ...please..😃
Thanks for writing and.pm..dear..

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

first of all
thank you for participate in competition

>>> Thanks for writing one boring os??😆

it really very difficult to chose because all adopt very different concept
so its hard to chose na
it's easy to chose between good and bad but it very difficult to chose between best na

>>> How sweet of you, bindu🤗 but I know it was not that good to give for competition and as I couldn't write those shots which I had in my mind due to time constraints and other issues, so I came up with this one but couldn't write it nicely as I submitted this os on last day and wrote only in an hour..😊

now os is amazing

>>> Thankyou..😛

very close to reality

you rarely write this type of os

>>> yes.. that's why thought to write something different this time..😛

I am happy you chose something different from your other works but yes in this os your special touch was there

>>> My special touch?? but no one recognized my os.. so how can it be..😆

jalal and jodha just behave like any other person
their POV is just like any ordinary person
this is the things I like most in this os

>>> This is what I wanted to show. Thanks a lot!!😃

both worried not for their choice or opinion but they both worried for that their partner like them or not

>>> Yes.. Yes..

in this 21 century every girl worried that after marriage their partner or in laws give her permission to work after marriage or
will they agree to take care her parents also
and jalal typically guy who worried for that after marriage his wife take care of his parents or will she agree to live with his parents
this type of things so close to reality

>>>> Thanks dear. Have written many romantic scenes but this time wanted to write something realistic and I am delighted to know you liked this os.

payal I really like this os and concept behind this os

>>> Thankyou soo much 🤗

plz try in future also
we love to read your work
thanks for pm dear

>>>> Sure dear!!😃

and beautiful edit dear
love it

>>> Shukriya 🤗🤗

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

I know you can't continue this shot because your previous work is still pending
so first finished your other work than think anything else
love you

Originally posted by: durgeshnandini

This was a different approach to the fairytale like love stories that are so very typical of your fanciful imagination.

>>> yep😛

There was this faraway lost beauty in its construct and it left me longing for more. That is how short stories should be like, it would leave dissatisfaction in the reader's heart attack the sight of end line, and when the end has ended up we can still yearn for more...

>>> Right!! ⭐️⭐️

I loved it like it was and thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of fantasy!

>>> Thankyou so much, adwi!!😊

Originally posted by: Kuki715

Lovely OS Payal 😳...

Originally posted by: Kalgi22

Really nice OS, Payal. 👏👏 I've actually rated all OSes from 0 to 5. You actually got 3.5. 😳 (I know I'm not mastered in evaluating OS 😆😉)

Originally posted by: sweet_diksha

nice OS Payal...very different from ur usual one...loved to see this different side of ur writing..😉

Originally posted by: lashy

A little nervous and uneasy with a mobile tucked under his ears - makes for such a pleasing opening scene!

>>>> Really?? Thankyou😛 Wanted to show that he's coming from his office and is nervous too for his first such meeting with a girl.

Loool his heart was about to skip a beat at purple, when he ended up looking at orange?😆

>>> Yep😆 because both were sitting alone na.. and it's obvious that they're waiting for someone.. He wasn't sure how she looks so he was afraid when he looked at a girl in orange..😆

Average looking? With responsibility? Arranged marriage? Good husband? Wants to live with momma...😲

>>>> Not like my jalal, at all.😆 and I don't want my real jalal to be like this..😭😭

Even if I would have read all OSes I wouldn't have recognised this one to be yours dear... it's so different from your signature style (of the 1 FF and OSes of yours I've read!)👏

>>>> Yes it's different from my other work.. Not only you but no one recognised my os.. Don't know I should be happy about this or sad because as a writer, I failed because my old readers too couldn't recognise my writing..😆

Iske oopar the charming pink girl was walking towards him (kudos of you to divert the readers by spending more time describing the pink girl than you did even your hero😉!),

>>> @Red: Should I take it in a positive way or..🤔

he was about to get up and she walked past.. Poor our hero!😆

>>>> This happens in reality too. No??😆

You introduced with all the typical tai tai phiss possible... so the rest of the read leaves our feelings moving up and upwards in anticipation!

And till yellow turned out to be his colour of the day!!!! Hooray...🥳

>>> 😆 He didn't think that a girl could come to meet him in a casual clothes when he saw other beautiful girls completely decked up..😆 but that makes her different and this is somewhat close to reality. It's not possible for every girl to get a husband as sexy as Rajat tokas and for every boy to get a girl as beautiful as paridhi sharma.

And what an unassuming and realistic meeting this was Payal...did you actually sit at a coffee shop and observe some ongoings before writing this one... because I can see it actually happening.. lol👏

>>> Nops darling but shaadi ka tym aa raha h na so.. 😆

And then tea slowly gave way to coffee

>>> Yesh..❤️

But the "~~~" lines left us guessing their mystical conversation!😉

>>> That is why I don't like this os. I could write it better. Infact I had something in mind but couldn't write due to lack of time.

Of course it's a yes... they both even said yesses to their parents...

What a koschun! 😉

>>> he he.. actually he didn't told her that he already said yes to his ammi but he asked.. "Do you think we should meet again?" which means.. her answer should be NO if she's ready to marry him. Sorry for my bad writing. I confused the readers.

LOVED IT -🤗

>>Thanks a lot!!🤗

And please stop calling it boring... 😕😡

>>Ohk😆😆