An Akdha FS : A Game Of Three Hours last part pg 27

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Shinning_Stuti

@Shinning_Stuti

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Posted: 9 years ago

#161

It was a very nice update and a soothing ending too; but I had expected a bit more detail. The particular point where Jodha could relate her with the story Jalal told her, and the particular point of realization that she is in love with Jalal; how she understood that Jalal gifted herself to her and how she changed drastically seemed to have a lot more to say... The way you described Jodha's emotional plight was very much relevant and realistically crafted with a soft dreamy touch with that, but a bit more detail of the reform of Jodha would have been a cherry on cake. otherwise it was lovely,perfect filmy 'milan' in train 😆 And all's well that ends well.😆

obviously I would want an epilogue especially after the warning. 🤣

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Lidaji27

@Lidaji27

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Posted: 9 years ago

#162

Super ! You are super writer !

Mujhe yeh kahaani bohat pasand aayi:)

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priyanka

@Priyankaakdha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#163

Wow wow wow ...
Wat a superb story ..
I just loved it ...

The concept was fab ...
Beautifully written ...

Waiting for epilogue ...

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SShreShthA

@SShreShthA

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Posted: 9 years ago

#164

Yup want... without any doubts...

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IgnatiaAkdha11

@IgnatiaAkdha11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#165

Yes yes yes, waiting for epilogue,,,this last part too short but thanks for PM, very gud story,, pls update epilogue fast as u can..heehehe

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Senapatichandri

@Senapatichandri

Voyager

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Posted: 9 years ago

#166

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti
It was a very nice update and a soothing ending too; but I had expected a bit more detail. The particular point where Jodha could relate her with the story Jalal told her, and the particular point of realization that she is in love with Jalal; how she understood that Jalal gifted herself to her and how she changed drastically seemed to have a lot more to say... The way you described Jodha's emotional plight was very much relevant and realistically crafted with a soft dreamy touch with that, but a bit more detail of the reform of Jodha would have been a cherry on cake. otherwise it was lovely,perfect filmy 'milan' in train 😆 And all's well that ends well.😆
obviously I would want an epilogue especially after the warning. 🤣

I purposely avoided that part so that reader him/herself can find why jodha fall in love...I tricked u all so that u can feel what can b jodha though being in live with jalal...

n I hope I will give u the most sizzling hot n sexy epilogue... 😃

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Shinchan_20

@Shinchan_20

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Posted: 9 years ago

#167

Fabulous update dii..
Finally she realised her love for him and stopped him from leaving..
Uumm..epilogue..its ur choice!
Thanku for pm

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nikki

@natashathakur

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#168

Fantastic chapter n thnxx for pm dr

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Rahi

@Rahiramesh

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Posted: 9 years ago

#169

Superb chappy Chandrima

Finally she found her lost self in him

Of course I m waiting for a long epilogue

In whichever style u want ...

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binduprasad41

@binduprasad41

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Posted: 9 years ago

#170

awesome update dear
jodha was missing jalal so much
she is falling for him
pratap got to know about her change behavior
poor jalal lost his only job
love the last part do much
finally jodha confess her feeling
jalal was so shock with sudden kiss
plz update epilogue also thanks for pm