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Originally posted by: lashy

Good going, girl... 👏

Thank you di. 😳

Had he been got the chance to live with her forever, his whole life would have been different. He could live in the warmth of heaven instead of the furnace of hell!


He entered into the bedroom- better to say the room of the patient... the gloomy strangulating air with the strong odour of medicines everything is still at their place... only the person who used to lie on the bed like a skeleton is no more!


He sat on the bed, and became quite surprised to see the old album,

😲

I like the description of the first photo vs photo frame a lot... how you've outlined that we don't observe in depth something we see everyday.. and how he hardly remembers her smiling..

Glad that you liked it. Thanks Di. 😃

had Jalal even looked properly at his bride at the day of his marriage? Probably not...

How depressing...

Yes. 😭

Had Ruqaiya suspected him from that day?

Not at all! She was absolutely maniac... cynical!

I think this kind of delusional fear that keeps growing is schizophrenia or psychosis.. it is extremely tiring to live with a person like this...

Yes. 😔

So, it was the typical traditional reason that the two weren't allowed to get married...

wonder if his family every regretted their decision.. 😕

I think they didn't. It was entirely Jalal's headache as he was the sufferer. 😡

In the dress of Ruqaiya's doctor she came as a healer of Jalal...

Poor Ruqaiya! While struggling with the pain of the disease alone on her bed, she had no weapon to fight against her husband's disobedient heart

Beautiful choice of sentences these ^^^

Really? Thanks. 😃

his eyes stuck on a small sheet of paper peeping out from a page of album. Out of curiosity he pulled that.

"You will be happy now; Will not you, Jalal? I hope at least now I will be able to make you happy... for once...

From, Your ungrateful wife, Ruqaiya..."

.. she had consumed all the pills in one go... and slept forever!

*gulp*

😆

"You care for me...so much..." she exclaimed with teary voice while gripping his hand. Suddenly a strange ache clutched his heart... her hand... her grip... all has become so feeble! He kept the glass beside and then cupped her face. "You will be alright very soon Ruqaiya! I swear!"

He kept silence while casually caressing her cheeks. What is the definition of your love Ruqaiya? To strangulate the person whom you love?

What a manipulator

Hmmm. 🥱

He ordered her as if she is a little baby, perhaps to fill-up the vacancy of love...

Beautifully written ^^^

Thanks again...

With a strangled scream from his heart, Jalal broke down on the floor; covered his face with palm and started gasping... his body was shivering with a strange pain!

He realised what she'd done!

Waiting to read more...

Trying to update fast...


Thank you for reading.🤗

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Posted: 9 years ago
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I guess ruks shld spend a day with RAAVAN WALA DEV 😃 😆 and ur MCP term was nyc haha for him kets get ruks to him to haunt 😉 😆 [ROFL]
Why is jalal poor in ur short stories sp modern ones 😲
And i understand u have others to update but this one is making me curious. And im perfectly fine with sad end 😆
I could not quote the cnvo so replying seperately 😛
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: aishg1698

I guess ruks shld spend a day with RAAVAN WALA DEV 😃 😆 and ur MCP term was nyc haha for him kets get ruks to him to haunt 😉 😆 [ROFL]
Why is jalal poor in ur short stories sp modern ones 😲
And i understand u have others to update but this one is making me curious. And im perfectly fine with sad end 😆
I could not quote the cnvo so replying seperately 😛

What could have happened if Ruqs and Dev were together?😆 well both has skeptical mind, so the fights and brawls would increased 6 times more. Here Jalal, I suppose, is not someone who will beat his wife and their fighs were verbal, but if he was dev Ruqs would have died long before.😛and most importantly, dev would care a damm for the treatment of Ruqs and ran away with Jo😆 waise in case you want haunting, I will not disappoint you.😛
This Jalal is not poor like I lv Jo wala.😆 he has well settled job and own new house.but the expense is large so he is drowning in debt.
I am trying to update it first, but u know, I have rewritten a paragraph thrice yesterday, but still it was not satisfactory. This way to I will need time.🥱
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Posted: 9 years ago
Life is very cruel to jo ja and even for ruks too.
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Originally posted by: Rockingbhardwaj

Life is very cruel to jo ja and even for ruks too.

True😭
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Posted: 9 years ago
life is cruel to lot of people. But eccentric people like ruks make it hell for themselves as well as people around them.

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