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Originally posted by: melovesja
hats off to you dear.😊 with each chappy I feel this one is more beautiful.Thank U for this beautiful comment... After I post usually want to read the first comment. gives me assurance chapter is okeach character is so powerful and you gave needed space to grew them. as I always want to show them no more no less. took the story further with jotting every dot so perfectly.👏I am glad U felt this way... Many have different view... I wanted the genuine opinion. When I began the story I though I will finish in 15 chapters but then readers demand I converted to FF instead of SS... So I slow down the pace of the story and writing more in detail.storyline and way of your writing carving me for next as soon as I finish present one. 😉Aww... that means... U have not lost interest... thats good news😃character's change their emotion each moment to state their feelings , to provoke or because of ego or to hide their feelings and you have immense hold over emotion writing. at starting when you describe his pain I can feel it and make my eyes wet and when they were adamant to bend each other my lips curve in to smile😊 .I enjoy writing emotional scene the most... and then gutter mind😆. . HB and jalal's convo was so impressive .My part.HB as a mother queen so brilliant and want to control lover boy in side shahenshah . she try to convince him in all manner but her stubborn son use weapon of silent and at last bust out his pain Fabulously wrote jalal's inner turmoil with past memory and present situation.Actually, I feel Hamida was too tough on him... In the beginning, she had no problem when Jalal was getting attracted towards her but now when he is really serious she is backing out and secondly... she knows very well that Jalal is completely shaken and wracked by Surya's entry... still she chose to commend him.where he wants comfort of motherly love and support and some solution to his agony . he latterly find that peace when he hug jo with pure love.jo's thought and how he read her mind and clear many things between them .Here this stage I feel Jalal's obsession slowly converting into love... he wants share his pain with Radha... He is looking for comfort and warmth in Radha...both understand other one love them so deeply and they indirectly confess also . their first passionate hug bring out jo's desire for him and she didn't got annoyed when he kiss her.Cheek Kiss😆 Lip pe karta toh problem hoti... Yeh Radha thodi advance hai... Modern for that era😆their relation grew bit. most importantly he wants share his pain with her and she too understand that he suppress pain deep in side him. their convo was awesome whatever I wrote for it is less.⭐️👏 I loved the last part . jalal thought about further but jo comes again at the same square.. finally the extreme step take place in his mind and his mind deny it but seedling had done.I agree ... Seedling had done...
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