RKG CHAPTER 16 page 117 POSTED Oct 19th - Page 4

Thanks for pm and beautiful and long update.

The update committee...😆

Starting with the chapter, the start was unexpected; I thought that jalal spoke those words only for surya but obviously hamida have been observing his behavior. I am not surprised that it bothered her.

Now you introduced maham again and jalal wants to talk to her about something personal...(like we don't know what it might be) but again it is you, so who know what they will be end up talking about. Plus if he told her about radha, I don't think that maham will be surprised with it as in the starting chapters you have written that she thinks radha could captivate any man in her beauty. But again maham's character in the story is not much known, so can't really imagine what she might think. She can think as a mother of jalal and advice him to go for her as long as she is of no harm to her. But what if she wants to see adham on throne and would think it as a good way to make others defy him. Or else she could be loyal for her sultanate and advice him to leave her alone and forget about her or make her a concubine .Confused..😕

Coming to marium makhani, I do not blame her for thinking for her sultanate first. She have sensed it from starting that radha would change jalal. She was the one who stopped her from leaving the palace. When she told jalal that she needed to talk to him, he knew it won't turn out great. I do not blame him for busting on her, and I even think that she saw that coming. He was longing for her loved but she always cared for her kingdom first( which is a duty of the queen). It have affected him as a child but now when he found his soul few days back which is going to be taken away from him, how could he be quite. I think the last sentence that hamida said that she would send letter to king surya really broke his ice.

When this was taking place, jodha was waiting for jalal for a very long time. She decided to go and not meet him, which even I would have done if I was in her place. I don't understand why would he blame her for losing his mind. I know he is king and he should behave himself in all possible situation. But he is in love for the very first time, give him a break.

I loved the way radha was admiring him while sitting on the bench waiting, his stubbornness, manipulative approach etc. but yet again his rage played and he dragged her inside her chamber. Jalal is furious I know...he loves her but can't accept that...he is fighting a battle inside between a king and a lover...I know sometimes king can be more powerful than the lover but honestly I am waiting for the day the lover will overpower the king... I really feel sorry for him though...all alone and yet with everyone...I do not blame him to lose his anger on jo...he waited for her so long, she wore the dress which he gave him for someone else and on the top lost his control and shouted on his mother because of her and now she tells him that, she will not see him...

More dialogs' between them, I liked the way he controlled himself afterward. Angry at beginning and then clam, beautiful blend of emotions on his side.

"Then why are you still, trembling?"- this sentence really got me saying, because of you idiot. You frightened her till her core and then suddenly you decide to be all nice and ask her why this trembling? Then after that he tried to justify his action, even though not telling that he care for her ( which he did but afterwards).

And then after that, he was obsessed to know why she wore that dress today? Radha did handled it well. "If you are asking about my preference then honestly I don't prefer you in this dress. I would rather prefer you in nothing at all..." - again a bold statement by him but radha didn't complained. He tactfully asked her about surya vadan proposal and by her reply she proved a point. She is keeping her options open, for me it was a statement for jalal to understand, speed up your game or else lose me. "Remember, If you let him touch you, I will rip his hands off his body. If you say yes, then he will become my prime enemy, my mission, my target."- bold statement by him. But radha understands that you should not play with fire and decided to protect surya.

The conversation turned to rukaiya, jodha's jealousy consumed her...I felt that it literally gave her away to jalal. On one hand I was happy that it gave him a hope for more but on the other hand I felt sorry for radha. You are giving a hard time to the readers di.

She did mentioned his little trip to lake with ruk, honestly I didn't see that coming. I never thought that she would burst out on him like that. I sensed it might be her insecurities. But she had a point, you go on a trip with your one wife and then she is cover in all love bites and again you tell someone else that she is just a childhood friend and no more.?

Jalal did ask her if she wanted to see were her painting was place and she brutally denied it. For once I thought that if only she would have said yes then she would have known what place she holds in his life. But she already know that, she just want to hear it from him but his kingly ego is coming in between.

The feeling for being with each other is very strong, while reading you could feel it, It's like I am the one in love. Yet again radha lost herself and allowed jalal to come near her. Jalal on the other hand told her about his fight with hamida, I really think he is craving for love. He loves her and he know that but then why refuse to say it to her? The rejection ? I don't think so as she have already rejected his proposal. He knows that she is in love with him and yet...

I loved his explanation about what he thought when she hurt herself and that he couldn't sleep at night, why he ignored her. But then again telling her how he feel, he tried to manipulate her in accepting that she is in love with him. I loved the way you described radha's state of mind and caved her emotions of loosing herself in him and regaining her confidence back so smoothly. "Please visit Hakim Sahiba instantly Shahenshah, it seems you are losing your mind." - I was laughing so hard on this line, I wish you could see my face. Best comeback line ever.

"I will lose my all senses and will choke you to death... not only you but I will suffer my entire life because of your arrogance." - I felt that it was his way of telling that he loves her, well not in a romantic way, still. Okay he could read her every emotion but telling her that- no matter what he do to her, she will always love him and desire for him because he have captured her heart. As I see it very wrong move by him, first he is not ready to tell her his feeling, then he is determine to make her admit that she loves him and on top of that this. Like seriously you are a king, behave like one, show some dignity- was my very first reaction but again he made a point that he will go to any extent to keep her. This line proves it, "being a Shahenshah, I have done uncountable unfair things... I will add one more without a hitch, and for you, I can go to any extent..."

The highlight for me in their conversation was when radha told him that even once she accepted him she would be a lifeless toy for him and once he was bored he would throw her away in one corner, and the worst part was he didn't deny it. After reading that I was like what the hell is wrong with you??? You don't know once she is yours how long you will carve for her, I can understand that sentence but she will be equally important for him as rukaiya??? On one hand you tell her that rukaiya is just my friend and nothing more in my life and here again you say this...what is wrong with you?? Use your brain. Atleast he accepted that he is obsessed with her...

He is a classic rakehell; his mesmerizing, hypnotic eyes; pulled her towards him like a moth gets attracted to a flame; bee stuck in honey- I loved these lines of comparison, it brought a smile on my face when I read it...

And now he is suspicious about her??ya I mean she behaves weird sometimes but I never thought that he would suspect her.

The best part was he asking her questions and she would answer them in her mind...he was observing her facial expression... "Because I love you damn it... I can't bear your hatred and ignorance."- after reading this I was like thank god, she accepted it to herself. "a young age obsession, or maybe I got charmed by your mesmerizing look" - best lines...atleast he knows how she feels... jalal agreed to tell her what he felt for king surya vadhan. "will give a fair judgment while keeping in mind WHAT YOU REALLY WANT, but before that you need to convey your final decision about whom you have chosen. And I still believe that you have not jumped on King Surya Vadan's tempting offer yet, just because your heart did not allow you to accept him since you love me and not him."- a fair point though.

And at the end, he decided show that his action will speak louder than words that how much he cares for her...his inner trauma is right what if he decides to marry a hindu maid?? Blood spill of family members will be on line. But he knows he can't, he is the king of the king but there are few limitations for it as well. The last question by him brought tears in my eyes- why can't he have his one desire ?? the portray of emotions in the last two paragraph is mind blowing.

I know it is very difficult to portray emotions such as anger, love, obsession, responsiveness, lust, longing, helplessness, care, jealousy in just one chapter, but you did it all. As a reader I felt that I was the one who was experiencing. The why the characters are molding and their change in emotions are taking place, even in a situation it changes from rage to care and to love, it is commendable, the shifting is so smooth that your emotions are also flowing with it. I loved it... ❤️

Thanks for the update di...love you❤️

Answer

1) I would never alter anything di, you are the writer and you know very well were you want to take the story as a reader it is a ride of emotions. We could give our opinions but you are the one who make this journey a masterpiece.

2) The story is beautifully written and on right track, but again you are the writer you know the right track, we are just here to enjoy the ride.

3) To be honest, it is very confusing.. when I read a chapter first I love a character and justifies his actions but then again I read it the second time I love the other one. The more I read the more I am confused. You are a great writer di, you can make the readers love each and every character. For me it is all as everyone is playing a role and helping other characters to mold and forwarding the story.

Well the next chapter seems more interesting... I haven't forgot the look in adham's eyes that night when he saw radha and the way jalal have seen it all. Excited to read more di...

Woow di awsm chappy
Its upto u di coz i love ur thoughts in story
Jalal radha r my fav chactrs 😊
Their converstion is awsm both r really love each other but their sutitutions or diffeent
The way u worte is amzg dii 👏
Precap y stupid adham want to see radha ?
Updatee sooon di
Thanku diii

change nothing and it is going in the right direction,my favourite is Jalal and Jodha.

Congrats for the new thread...
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Hi Bhavini

I am super glad to read your update after a long time😃

As usual, I am just speechless what to write, it was super awesome. Jodha Jalal conversation had all emotions ego pride, anger, frustration, love, longing, helplessness, pain, sadness, being witty and devious too. It was a complete roller coaster for a reader.

Now answer to your questions : I would not like to alter anything in this chapter, reason is as a reader I love your writing style. For the pace of the story, I feel it can be a bit fast, but I m not sure as I still enjoy reading it as it is. My favourite character is Jalal as most of the time he seems pratical and reasonable human in his actions. He doesn't act what he is not.

Request you to please put up next update soon. I eagerly wait for your updates

congrats on the new thread
outstanding update

Congratulations for new thread beautiful chapter thanks for pm update nest chapter soon pm me