New AKDHA FF:Hamari Adhuri Kahani Chapter 1 updated on page 3

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Ashvneet

@Ashvneet2399

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Loved the prologue n CS as well !
Sounds interesting!
Totally different Jalal !
Waiting eagerly for nxt chptr !
Update soon !

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Priyanka

@..Prii1994..

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Sounds interesting... 😊

Update soon dear...

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mickeymini

@mickeymini

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

chapter-1

A man was slowly walking towards d main gate of d palace covering himself wid a shawl so dat no one could even recognize him .

Taking his steps forward towards d village away frm d palace he managed to cross d river which separates d village frm d palace .

Taking a sigh of relief he uttered "thanks allah finally I have cme out frm d prison n frm nw no one can stop me frm exploring our nearby places"

Moving slowly he has entered a small hut n followed by a door .He slowly went near a lamp n took it to d kitchen to brng a glass of water .He den moved towards d bed holding d glass of water .Within a second d whole glass of water was on his frnds face .

"who is dat ??who is dat ???a jerked frnd wakeup to find jalal infrnt of him .

"wat r u doing here ??"askd d confused frnd .

"hw many times I have said u dat we r gng to visit d nearby places of agra"said d angry man.

"jalal its mre den dangerous fr u to explore d places without any security"said d concerned frnd

"arey abdul r we gng to announce dat d heir of Mughal sultant is gng to visit der places ???asked jalal

"listen we r gng in disguise so dat no one even can recognize us"said jalal

"but jalal wat if d king knws abt dis???asked wid a shaking tone n a concerned frnd

"nt if tonight but till tmrw mrng dey ll cme to knw dat ur missing frm d palace n plz listen to me go back to palace b4 d matters gets worse"said abdul

"if u dnt wanna cme wid me den plz step back but dis plan of mine is nt gng to change"said jalal n he started leaving as he was already in a disguise

"ok baba I m cming wid u n tell me wer r my clothes which I shuld wear to cme ut with u"said abdul knwing d fact dat his frnd is nt gng to change his decision

Both disguised as commeners started der journey in order to see d nature nt as a heir but as a commoner

As a heir he ws always kept under protection which jalal dnt at all like

He was always down to earth n always wanted to enjy his life nt as a king but his father never allowed him to do so.

He tried to run away many times frm dis boring life n njy d life of a commener but fate has made him d son of a king whose life is always of adventures ,betrayls ,etc etc

He cant believe anyone but his mst trusted was abdul his bst frnd frm childhood

His father has allowed abdul to cme near jalal bcoz once in d past he has saved jalal by taking an attack which was supposed to be on jalal

Cming out of d thoughts abt his life d man wa travelling in a direction of his normal life unknwn to d fact dat he is gng to meet someone exactly of his same thoughts n offcourse his love of life .

Dis much fr chapter 1

I knw I m too late in updating but I was totally confused as hw to start it

So I hope u guys have njyed it .

Pakka next chapter is gonna d intro of jo

Put ur valuable comments down as it ll help me to write further also regarding story I wuld like to hear sme suggestions

THANK U

MONICA

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Shinning_Stuti

@Shinning_Stuti

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Hey Monica, it's short but quite a nice update... U explored Jalal's character in a very interesting way. I loved the young Prince of the kingdom who wants to feel the essence of his soil, the heart of his nation by his own. But I would have loved to read a bit more in this chapter...like any interesting incident happening with them etc. This is very short. I will expect a longer update next time. 😳

And I will like to tell a thing if u don't mind, can u plz avoid the SMS typings while writing? I think a piece of literature should follow the norms of language too. SMS language is fine, but for a longer text it becomes tougher to understand.😛

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mickeymini

@mickeymini

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti
Hey Monica, it's short but quite a nice update... U explored Jalal's character in a very interesting way. I loved the young Prince of the kingdom who wants to feel the essence of his soil, the heart of his nation by his own. But I would have loved to read a bit more in this chapter...like any interesting incident happening with them etc. This is very short. I will expect a longer update next time.😳
And I will like to tell a thing if u don't mind, can u plz avoid the SMS typings while writing? I think a piece of literature should follow the norms of language too. SMS language is fine, but for a longer text it becomes tougher to understand.😛

Oh thanx alot fr ur comment yar
Actually I have nt written any like dis b4
I have got habituated to dis type of SMS language
Next onwards I ll write it in a perfect way
Yes a short one bcoz I just wanted to start it so I can get d further story in my mind
Thanx fr ur advice yar
Next time a bit longer one den dis one
I have just started n ll increase d size of chapters further

Edited by mickeymini - 9 years ago