~TORN APART~ ch 23 * updated!* 17/7 - Page 10

Created

Last reply

Replies

732

Views

79.1k

Users

64

Likes

683

Frequent Posters

Devilicious_ME thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#91
wht comment should i write
unres unres erhhh i hate doing unres😡😭 only for u I'm doing it😉
yeee me third
divi divi wht shold i write erhhh!!!!!!😡😡 u call this update wht the hell is wrong with u 😭😭😭
this was heartbreaking chapter full of MU really MU😡😡
wht were u thinking while writing this chapter didvi huh?
{ time lapes}🤣
Part one for chapter 18 i think so😲🤣
why r u hurting JoJa so much yyy yrrr 😭
jo has a bro when did he born😲🤣
but he is nice bro yrr😳 bro sis talk was cute nd touching🤗
yayayayayaya finially jo told she can't marry thank god
awww daddy's little girl can't hurt her dad 👏 bharmal too understood wht his girl want 😳😳
* time lapse*
wht the hell this is😕😡
"They were not friends , not enemies just some strangers with memories"
( am sorry for these random time lapse 😆 ) 🤣
awww u showed Adham sooo good nd nice bro👏👏👏 this is best think u wrote👏
wht wht wht ( grownups2 style)😆 where did u send jalal😡😡 that to alone really divi this is ur ciff hanger 😕😕
* time lapes🤣*
cafe vala part mindblowing🤣
nd this one (Rithik': how're we suppose to go home?

Jodha: catch the bus

Surya: huh!!! )🤣

ohh great jo knows where u kept ja 😆 true love lol

wht Javeda has a son nd that to HUSAIN😡😡 really they r joja child yrr plz u don't become cv's 😡😡

Hamida is sooo sweet awww😳😳

soo here comes the my best part😕 the ridiculously famous trio really ridiculously that too we😡😆 never mind

awww u wrote my nd anaya's reletioship sooo cute sweet 😳😳😳 i loved it it looked real 👏

don't break anything!🤣 aweswome

Anaya: eee!!!!!! My PHOTO!!!!! wht was that 😆😆

😡wht jo got to know the true of her report 😭😭😭 yyy divi i love to hurt joja soo much yyy answer me dammit😡😡😡

where did u send now jo erhhh 😡

the chapter stop with a ciff hanger errrhhh DIVI 😡

Part Two for chapter 19 wowowowow I'm commenting on ur ff

sooo jalal is thinking wht to do hmmm good 😃😃

jalal's secretary is atifa when did this happen ohhh wht I'm saying the grear writer of this ff can do anything lol😆😆😡

poor secretary jalal pour all anger on her 😭😭 feeling sad for her

~ time lapse~ i think u r in love with this think🤣

thank god jalal some step 😡 alest he saw the msg

wowowow jalal try to called jo 😳 but u divi wht is wrong with u huh?😡 voice mail

but jalal leave ths mgs on it good boy lol😆

yayayayayy jalal going to india wowowowowo sooo happy I'm 😆😆

WHERE DID U KEPT JODHA DIVI 😡😡😡

jalal in india now shocking parts😡😡 for him

*Chota sa time lapse hehe*🤣

shalini and saumya sitting in the floor not taking their eyes of the TV!.🤣 this r my fav part yrrr awesome

when did i do this 'the popcorn from shalini' mouth dropped on to the carpet'😕

Shalini: wo sab chodo! I'm done standing lets go sit nah!
Saumya: lazy girl she mutters under her breathe
Shalini: oye I heard that! Main lazy nahi there's one lazy girl and that is anaya.
Jalal: waise anaya kaha hai!?
Shalini: Yahi Kahi hoga!
Jalal: wow very specific! my my my 🤣🤣 really u made me laugh out load so mich 😆
Jalal: what the!? I couldn't see what it was but it was under the sheets of my bed. A person? A dog? Later followed my giggles, then Adham Bhai started laughing as he went near bed pulling the bed sheet of. And there was anaya with her headphones staring at the ipad screen. Then later realising we were looking at her as I laughed.
Jalal: the hell are u doing?!
Anaya: JALAL BHAI JAAAN!!!!! As - Salam walikum She yells at the top of her voice as she hugs me!
a dog a dog really 😆😆😆 best part of this chapter👏
sorry i'm writing the lines again but their the best😆😆
;Adham: waise anaya what u were doing under the blankets?!
Anaya: Adham Bhai jaan I was so cold!
Adham: wear your jacket then!
Anaya: YEH main bhi socha tha! But look how far away it is! She says pointing towards her jacket that was less than 2 meters away.
Jalal: Malika e laziness I say as me and Adham Bhai laugh at her
Anaya: oh ho! Lazy bulaya mujhi! Says MR. Ummm she thinks for a while standing on top of the bed with her hands balled into a fist on the each side of her waist.
Jalal: pagal
Anaya: ur a moose!
Jalal: what!
Adham: anaya! U can fight with him later! Now come and have ur dinner
Oh sorry um ur might night snack.
Anaya: nahi mujhi khane!!!! She says with an annoying voice
Ruthshalini: kamal hai ur saying this princess the one who eats every 2 hours we turn around to see her laughing at her little sisters reply. As she sticks her tongue out at her.
Anaya: MUJHI NAHI KA NA!!!
Ruthshalini: there's pizza..
Anaya: don't have to tell me twice jumping off the bed and running towards her sister.
Jalal: pagal
Adham: yep! Chal goodnight yrr
Jalal: goodnight
He exits the room closing the door behind him, I couldn't go to sleep today not now, after a while I take a shower and get into some night clothes as I head outside near the pool area. And seat myself in sofa my forehead felt hot I had no idea what I was going to say tomorrow nothing I had no idea. What if she didn't want to talk to me? Being in Deep in thought I was sort of in a trance, zoning out again.
Anaya: OH HELLO??!! YOU LISTENING OR WHAT!!!!!
I open my eyes in a jerk and breathe to see anaya and ruthshalini there.
Ruthshalini : anaya calm down! She says sitting in the opposite sofa
Jalal: Kya yrr??
Anaya: MOOSE!
Jalal: how am I a moose?!
Anaya: I don't know! Waise! Kya soch rahe thi?? She sits down next to me
Looking up at me.
Jalal: umm that...
Anaya: Kya ummm
Saumya: Anaya CHOD yrrr
Saumya comes in with a bright smile and sits down next to ruthshalini.
Anaya: you know guys! And moose! She says turning to me
Jalal: saumya , shalini I think it's time we tell her I say in a fake serious tone, I wink at both of them at first they both looked at me confusingly but then they got what I meant.
Anaya: TELL ME WHAAAT!!!
Ruthshalini: Jalal are u sure?
Jalal: yes!
Saumya: Ruthshalini I think it's time we tell her
Anaya: TELL ME WHAAAT!
I turn towards her , and plaster a fake sympathy and serious face on
Jalal: anaya baat YEH hai ke , we found you in a fish market.
Anaya: KYAAA!!!!
Ruthshalini: princess wo Kya hai nah me , saumya and Jalal we were shopping fish with begum sahiba when we were little and you were sitting on top of some pile of fish.
Saumya: Anaya the lady who sold fish at that stand sold you to us! Infact they didn't make us pay!
Anaya: KYAAA!!!! Shut up!! Very
funny
!! NOT! She says getting annoyed
Jalal: Anaya I know it's very hard to believe but that's the truth we really found you in a fish market!
Anaya: JALAL BHAI JAAAN!!!!!! she says getting up
Anaya: no no I know your joking
Ruthshalini: becharri I think it was too much for her
Anaya: DIDUUU!!! Anaya looked so frustrated , sad! And in utter shock I started laughing, Anaya's whole face expressions changed into " I'm gonna kill you " angry face she comes towards me and hits my arm.
Anaya: MEANY!
Ruthshalini : and Didu aap bhi nah!!! U guys are all meanies!! She crosses her arms and puts on a cute angry face.
really divi fish market 🤣 this parts wowowowowo mind blowing awesome blossom specchlesss🥱🥱😆
Anaya: ka rrr ho krr.. Says with a million food in her mouth
Jalal: what!
Ruthshalini: she said " kaha ja rahi ho"
Jalal: how the heck did u understand that?
Ruthshalini: u kinda get used to it
Saumya: Anaya eat then talk!
Anaya: arrnser.. Mrr
Saumya: answer me she said
Jalal: ha wo um um I'm going for a meeting thing I lie to her , but really I was going to meet jodha.
Anaya: orrkay
does anaya do this really 😲🤣
where is jo divi 😡 see all r worried even readers tooo😡😡😭
hw can u make main lead dead hw could u divi😡
ciff hanger erhhh divi!!!!!!! i hate u for this
plz don't do this plz
wht does the percap means 😕😕 the story takes another stupid turn! wht is that divi😡😡😡
offfo oh alast i wrote 😡😡😆 I'm tried
update soon divi varan u r dead for sure 😡

bas this was my comment hope u like it varan 😆











Edited by -RuthShalini- - 10 years ago
Aditi512 thumbnail
Navigator Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#92

Originally posted by: Divya879

why u guys always wanting to kill me😡😆😉


Its bcoz of u only if u gonna discontinue will react like this only no...:p
Bt the update ws amazing jst loved it, the twist n turns in ur stories super...:)
Hopefully we'll get the nxt update soon...:)
--a.ishu-- thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#93
Haan i demanded an update!! Ur writing was amazing as usual !! But who asked u to kill our jodha!! Pagal ho gayi kya!! U killed jo.. N u pm'ed me with angry emoticons!! Its me who should be angry!! In d morning, anaya told me dat i il use angry emos aftr reading this update!! N she was right!!! 😡 😡 waise.. Bring jo back in d next update.. Then.. I il comment fa both d updates!! And.. Anayu is really angry fa bringing in dat fish market story here!! 🤣 didn she kill u fa dat?? 😆 ok.. Bring jo back in d next update.. For ur dear life!!! 😡
Divya879 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: Naya92

😭😭😭 OMG no plz don't make her die 😒🤢🤢 it was really a heartbroken update💔

grrr😆 sorry dear , hmmm wait and watch maybe lol I don't Noe 😆
Edited by Divya879 - 10 years ago
Divya879 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#95
Sorry will reply to comments later really busy
sw123 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#96
omg don't make jodha die
update soon
onaisa thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#97
Punar Janam no wayz ..yaar yeh bahut tv style Kaia's hogaa
.

BTAw superb chapter loved
Thanx fr d PM
Ambidextrous thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#98
no i dont think she died
and thanks for the update di😳😃😃
bokul thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Master Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
#99
good that u continued or else 😡
bokul thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Master Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
heart breaking update
hope she is not dead

Related Topics

Jodha Akbar Thumbnail

Posted by: Swissgerman

6 years ago

Jodha Akbar FF Who loves Him Most Chapter 78B updated on 08/07/2024

Jodha Akbar FF : --- Who loves Him Most (M) --- Link to my other threads Thread 1 Thread 2 - Thread 3 :::::Thread 4::::...

Expand ▼
Jodha Akbar Thumbnail

Posted by: Swissgerman

9 years ago

Jodha Akbar FF: Shahzada of Her Dreams Chapter 48 Updated 20/7/2025

... Shahzada Of Her Dreams ... ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::Index::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Chapter-1.....The beginning Chapter-2:...

Expand ▼
Jodha Akbar Thumbnail

Posted by: Shinning_Stuti

5 years ago

Thread 3: Destined Love... (Chapter 61 updated)

Prologue: How it happens when both the hearts fall for each other madly without knowing each other? He is the emperor of the great Mughal...

Expand ▼
Jodha Akbar Thumbnail

Posted by: hemakeerti

11 months ago

FF: Pale Blue Dot Thread 02/16/2025 Chapter43 - Part2 Updated

Hemakeerti OSes - Compiled PBD INDEX Prologue Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6 Chapter 7 Chapter 8 Chapter 9 Chapter...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".