AKDHA FF: 'No Name To My Desire' THRD 3- Chap 12 (Part 3) - Page 11

Originally posted by: Pals2411

Messi ki diwani

Originally posted by: ppluvkuch

MESSI mera HERO

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni

Originally posted by: akdhalover

Past and present perfectly potrayed!

Love the whole plot and theme of the story

Itz very unique and passionate

And not any typical one

Loving it

thanks dear...am glad u liked it sooo much😳

Eagerly waiting for the next part hope you update it soon!😃

update me time lagega re

Wonderful write up!👏😃

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Originally posted by: ---Mehak---

OMG PP 👏

Sweety , i really don't have words for this update .

I'm totally speechless ..

chal hat...kitni baten karti hai😆

Who could be the one who knew Rico is Jalal's son , and that horrible ending phone call , he called him a RAPIST .. Gosh !

aab kaam kiya hai aisa...toh sunna hi parega na😡

Someone's spying them , is it webcams through which someone is spying them actually ?? or something or watever it is .

mere ko toh spying hi lagta hai 😆

Please update soon this time ...

no chance

Originally posted by: ppluvkuch

Originally posted by: Tehzeeb89

wow... speechless with ur update!!!

I just love the way u describe their emotions, jo's hatred n their situation is uffh mindblowing update...

I read chap 11 for 5 times just today...

pagal itna achha laga !!!!😲😲

my fav:-

1- 'What if she gets angry or tries to run away? Will I be able to bear the loss this time?' Numerous times he repeated these questions to himself...every time ended up with the same reply...'I surely won't'.

2-'I can't afford it this time...I can't afford to loose her again. I can't afford to live my life without her anymore...I...I must control my feelings...I must be...very...careful with her this time.'

3-'why she suddenly changed her mind?'(surely he knew jodha very well) 'Is there anything I don't know yet? Is she in some kind of trouble? kya baat hogi?'

4- 'After so many years...so many hurdles...finally you have come to me. I promise you Jodha...I will make sure you spend rest of your life with me. I will bind you with me in every possible way. That's a promise from Jalaluddin Mohammad.' (yeh baat hai na jalal...)

5- 'Her pain is no less than mine.' (hai this lyrics suit him... Choat lagi hai use fir kyun mehsoos mujhe ho raha... dil tu bata de kya hai irada tera.. (hehehe I just love this entire line in that songs n pls make jodha realise that its no more jalal lust but he love her)

6- 'What!!! Are you insane!!! Do you even know what you are saying!!!' yelled Jalal at the top of his voice. That news was like a stab to his heart...it was the shock of his life. The dreaded thought of loosing his son all over again raked Jalal's nerves. He felt his bleeding heart would stop beating at any moment. An immense rage was scorching its way to his head. He erased the gap between him and Jodha in a fraction of second. Jalal gripped her by her shoulder and pulled her to him. 'Kahan hai woh??? Kisne kidnap kiya use??? What else do you know about it???...Speak out damnit!!!' Jalal descended his fury on Jodha. But what he got in reply was only a shivering stature in his grip and a pair of down cast eyes. Her silence ruffled him even further...this time he strengthened his grip, making her wince in pain. 'Look at me Jodha when I am talking to you', Jalal hissed between his teeth. (u describe his anger on losing his child that he just get to know n already attached to him even w/o knowing him waaris nice!!!)

7- n I just love the way u bring out Abdul's character... n love it to the core the entire part of Abdul n Jalal convo n Abdul's concern for Jalal n Jodha fresh start...

8-'world's never a safe place for Jalaluddin Mohammad's son. You should have been much more careful with him.' (aahhh my fav line ouch Jalal... and, this linesurely make jodha's world spinning)

9- 'Have you ever told anyone about...' Jalal couldn't finish his line as something chocked his voice. It was Jodha's eyes. With his every forwarding step, she slowly lifted her face to him. Her eyes...blood red...face dipped in rage...her every expression was giving testimony to the burst out he was about to face. Before Jalal could guess the reason behind this...Jodha started. 'You spied on us!!! Went for tests!!! How dare you!!!' her despise, her disgust was oozing out of her every word. 'I have heard everything. How could you even think of getting any close to my son!!! How dare you!!!' Now mentioning of Rico as 'her son' ruffled Jalal like hell. He couldn't hold himself anymore. Jalal grabbed Jodha by her arm and almost hissed, 'how...dare...you. Who are you to keep my son away from me!!! Himmat kaise hui tumhari...' Within no time Jodha retorted, 'being a mother it's my duty keep my son away from any kind of evil. Our waise bhi lagte kaun ho aap uske...nobody. It's because of you that I have lost my son...warna kisi ko kabhie pata nehi chalta...' With this Jodha tried to free her arm from his grip. But he was too strong for her. 'Leave my hand'. Jodha almost yelled but all for vain...he hardly paid any heed to her objections, 'Just because of your THIS attitude...we are in this mess. Why did you keep my son if you can't protect him?' (I was waiting for this part the entire chappy there she BURST OUT...go jodha go jodha but wat to do he is Jalal na... )

10- 'ab kare bhi toh kya kare jaan...it's a truth even God himself can't alter.' (this line make a broadsmile in my face hehehe...)

11- 'You know there's nobody on earth who understands me as much as you. What am doing...what am about to do...you gauge everything in a moment...while others keep grappling all their life...I appreciate this HUNAR of you very much.'

(I was like yah mr.Jalal only ur Jodha know u better hehehe)

12- and for me...mera BETA jitna zaroori hai...utni hi uski MA bhi...' (hai Allah I love this line kash mein Jo ki jagha mei hoon... indirectly he's telling Jo that she 's important to him...)

13- 'Jalaluddin...Mohammad. The chairman of IMPERIAL...the kind hearted MUGHAL king...most influential human being on earth...the man of many women's dream...is actually a RAPIST. Kaisa ho agar yeh kal kisi newspaper ka headline ho toh...' (actually the word Rapist give me a hint about the identity of the kidnapers which I assume it to be Jodha's Friend or BoyFriend in previous chappy in Abdul's FB part when they both went to Jo's orphanage- it was just my feelinghs n prediction hehehe no offences!!!)

i am pretty much moved by your asuumtn...but no comments for now

When emotions speak louder, words take a back seat- this line was awesome like cherry on top of cake... nicely written..

actually I don't know wat lead me to write this much comment on ur update usually I rarely post comment on FF update but this act of mine shock me too n im still wondering I actually did type this comment n post it

trust me tehzeeb...i am touched by your comment...it's from heart...i can feel it...loved the way you picked the lines and made ur takes...it's just great...I would love to get such beautiful presents from you...

... anyway very nice update y no precap!!!!

since there is no precap u ought too give a long teaser plus long2 update!!!

plus so sorry but jaldi update karo na... can't wait too long... pls!!!

update toh jaldi nehi hoga...but will try to make it long

Originally posted by: ---Mehak---

Originally posted by: dodoneha

it was awesome...simply fabulous⭐️...

loved d chappy especially d first part❤️... d restlessness nd anxiety of jalal was potrayed so marvellously👏... also liked d promise which he made dat now he will never let her go away from him😳 (i will be holding on to it as well😉)

pagal promise karne ke baad do bar touch kiya😆

... jalal was very controlled in his encounter wid jo given his record😛 nd yeah also liked how one glance in jos desolate tearful eyes slowly cooled of his burning rage😊... d line ab kare bhi to kya kya kre jaan... its a truth God himself cant alter was... liked how he conveyed 2 her dat she is as much importent 2 her as his son😳... nd loved d way he broke it 2 her dat he knew dat salim was his son... poor jo😭 she was so helpless yet she tried 2 held her ground👍🏼

as 4 dear abdul - shock laga lagaaa🤣... d kidnapper called jalal a rapist😲😡... i guess someone snooped on jo-hamida convo...

snooping wala case mere ko bhi lagta hai...lets see...😆

but i didnt understand one thing... dat why did d kidnapper kidnap rico now when jalal is in kolkata🤔... why not before?😲if d guy really did eavesdrop on deir convo den he could have asked 4 d money before too 😕...

valid point...iske bare me toh maine socha hi nehi...will try to get an answer😳

but d way he called jalal a rapist😡... it seems d guy knows abt jalal-jo past encounter😲...

ise sab pata hai dear...

any way i hope jalal soon traces dem nd gives dem wat dey deserve😡...

them nehi HE...ek hi hai😉

missing rico😳... plss bring him back soon😳

thora our intezzar😳

thanks 4 d pm nd plsss update soon😳 (another chutti😲😭)

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